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Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: November 27, 2009 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Your version of meeting the Denali's and how Carlisle's introduction to Forks and the Quileutes was rich. And, the little boy telling him, 'Bye, Cold One' was adorable. I like that Carlisle was too polite to be derogatory in describing the Quileute smell. LOL.
Fantastic chapter.
Author's Response: LOL -- yes, Carlisle is too polite to say they stink to his nose. But then, Carlisle has been around worse smells at some point, I'm sure ;)
I really enjoyed writing this chapter, mostly because he is happy for the majority of the chapter. Carlisle's about to sink pretty deep for the next couple of chapters. He knows he isn't meant to stay in Denali, but he doesn't do very well on his own.
I'll be posting the next chapter in the queue sometime tomorrow.
Reviewer: devil4eva_666 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 07:01 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Bring on the edward times!
Author's Response: LOL we are almost there, not the next chapter but the one after that. Thanks for reviewing devil4eva -- let me know what you think of my version of Edward!
Reviewer: BellaS (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 05:39 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Wow. People back in the old days were so brave to just pick up and move. Look at the doctor for instance. He was originally from Wisconsin or whatever. what made him just pack up his belongings and end up in Forks? It's not like now when we can text/call/fly anywhere.
Author's Response: GOLD! It's all about the GOLD! Forks was a river settlement in the northwest, perfect for panning for gold. There is an old fur trade in the area, but Forks grew significantly with the gold rush. I think the doctor from Wisconsin was the younger son of his family and wanted to make a name for himself in a new place AND find a little gold. He just never knew that something like the Russian Influenza outbreak of the 1860s would come his way.
And yes, I agree, I can't quite imagine going that far out with so many dangers and uncertainties. I am a traveler and adventurous, but probably not THAT adventurous. ;)
Reviewer: BellaS (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 05:18 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
What was the purpose of the vampire that was negligently (is that a word?) killing those people? Was it to lead to te conversation between Carlisle and Sioban about changing people?
Author's Response: Yes, mostly it was about the issue of desperation, loneliness and the fact that Carlisle is still a long way away from being capable of making new vampires no matter how desperate he is. It was also about showing that Carlisle is connecting with vampires, he has compassion for them now, even vampires who are killers like Siobhan. He is starting to have his positive influence on vampire society even though they haven't realized it yet. ;)
Reviewer: Master of the Boot (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 01:49 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Simply amazing story. The meeting with the Denalis was just wonderful. I've heard the story of their mother and the immortal child a thousand times but this is simply amazing for a retelling. You were able to invest it with such heart and emotion.
I really liked that theory about how the volturi are covertly killing the animal feeders. It makes perfect sense. All too often, people see the good in them instead of the evil. You have seen both sides of them and shown them to be the ruthless, self serving thugs that they are.
A lovely first encounter with the Quileute. It was a nice little trip back in time. history is starting to have some familiarity to it. I bet any money that little boy there was named Ephraim. It was priceless to see Carlisle when he was recognized for what he was.
Ta
Master of the Boot
Author's Response: I'm really happy the Denali story succeeded because the challenge was to make the iconic story have impact, and hopefully the similar sense of loss made the connection between Carlisle and the Denali coven even more believable.
The theory about the Volturi killing the animal feeders does make sense, but it is really more Eleazar's paranoia, and Carlisle has a good point about the fact that animal feeders not being a threat -- not yet anyway.
VERY good guess about the chief's son, just one generation off! I messed this up with a previous response below so I want to get it right this time: It was Jacob's great-great-great grandfather carrying his great-great-grandfather to River Forks as a child. The chief told the story of "the cold one who saved Black Fur's son." Ephraim was the son of the boy who was saved. When Ephraim catches Carlisle on their land nearly 80 years later, that story Ephraim remembers his grandfather and father telling is the ONLY reason they trust Carlisle enough to negotiate the treaty!
More coming soon -- next chapter will be posted in the queue sometime tomorrow.
Reviewer: ttcub (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Oh wow!!! You have done it again by explaning how he meet Tanya and them. And how he 1st met the warewolves. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoing the familiar characters :) You're going to love the next couple of chapters. The next chapter will be in the queue sometime tomorrow.
Reviewer: Psykojinx (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 11:28 AM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
I love how Carlisle is amused at an angry Caius!
And I love your story!
And I love your writing!
Opinion still not changed ;)
Author's Response: LOL ;) Carlisle doesn't fear angry Caius!! ;)
Glad you're still enjoying it psykojinx -- let me know what you think of the rest!
Reviewer: Aryceli (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 06:42 AM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Bring on more!!! can't wait for the next chapters!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review aryceli -- I'm glad you're enjoying it, and the next chapter will be in the queue sometime tomorrow.
Reviewer: Gingertoffee (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 04:12 AM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
This is such a great story - i love it! Can't wait for the next installment.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review gingertoffee -- I'm glad you're enjoying it, I'll be dropping the next chapter in the queue sometime tomorow.
Reviewer: kitsune_001 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 02:40 AM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
I like the new chapter. Was the Chief a Black? This updatecamejut in timefor my birthday. Thanks.
Author's Response: Happy birthday kitsune -- I'm glad you liked your birthday present. ;)
Very good question -- Yep, that was Jacob's great-great grandfather carrying his great-grandfather to River Forks as a child. He created a story of "the cold one who saved Black Fur's son." When they catch Carlisle on their land nearly 80 years later that story is the ONLY reason they trust him enough to negotiate the treaty.
Reviewer: Jilli90 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 12:51 AM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
love it
Author's Response: I'm really glad you are loving it Jilli90. Thank you so much for taking the time to review!
Reviewer: LadyLawyer (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 11:22 PM · On: Chapter 13 ~ 1847
Thanks for this story. I feel like I am really getting to know and understand Carlisle. I look forward to your next story. It won't be long until we are in Chicago, it seems.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review LadyLawyer! I'm really glad you are enjoying it so far.
My next story is also about Carlisle, but has been on hold for a bit due to school. Hopefully I'll find some time next semester or over winter break!
We are actually one chapter away (not the next chapter, the one after that) from Chicago ;)
Reviewer: Master of the Boot (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 10:12 AM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
First, I gotta say, Reisa Dead? Oh man, I really liked that girl.
I always love this story. This one in particular was wonderous. It deals with Carlisle's ability to turn a human and how it all started. It was a great way to work in Siobhan, who I loved from the books.
This chapter was just so dense and rich. There were so many different characters and conflicts. That rogue vampire was really cool even though we didn't get his name.
I really get what Siobhan says about how a vampire couldn't follow Carlisle's lifestyle unless they were with him from the start. It really makes so much sense.
You are able to build so many new ideas and then hook them up to the books.
Ta
Master of the Boot
Author's Response: LOL yeah, it killed me to off Raisa (of all the females, she's probably the closest to my own personality, tho I don't want kids anytime soon) I really liked her too, but for obvious narrative reasons I had to make their relationship DONE. And the way she dies is very important.
Carlisle's relationship with Siobhan is a mystery to Bella in the books but really it always seemed like they picked on each other like siblings, and I thought it was appropriate for Siobhan to be the first to earnestly advise him like a big sister about making a companion. He has a long time to go before he will seriously consider taking her advice.
Regarding "nameless" vampire I'll repeat something I wrote to another reader: I kind of left the "nameless" vampire's fate open on purpose. Carlisle doesn't destroy him, which gives him a chance to go off and either find another way to live, or find another way to die. And I left him "nameless" on purpose too, I originally had a plan on who he was supposed to be, but I found it more poetic to let him be sort of an "everyman" vampire, one of many many vampires who must be fighting the same battle that Carlisle is fighting, against loneliness and hopelessness.
I'm glad the ideas are still connecting for you, I promise I have many more ;) I'll be dropping the next chapter in the queue sometime tonight...
Reviewer: mandee81 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 06:05 AM · On: Chapter 1 ~ 1661
p.s. is the little girl that sibohen is following maggie?? that is pretty neat:-)
Author's Response: Yep ;) You'll see her again in the next chapter briefly.
Reviewer: mandee81 (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 06:00 AM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
wow, i read this from the first to the 12th chapter that you have posted up so far and am speachless.....i am in love with this tale! i love the indepth look at carlisle exsistence.....you are an amzing story teller, i am amazed at how you can weeve all of the breaking dawn vampires into his intricate past! i began reading this because i came across your 1 shot about bella and edwards centenial anniversary and couldnt belive that you had a story to go with that amazing one shot! i am sad that i read the end first, but i dont even think about it when i am so caught up in his past and his discoveries, i love it! you have a talent and i can not wait for this whole story to be posted! p.s. i do not have a story that i love on this site that does not revolve around bella and edward, but you tell this story so perfectly that i am absolutely captivated, this is my new favorite and it dosnt even have my two faves in it! great job!
Author's Response: Wow mandee81, that is one of the best compliments I've gotten so far. I never tried to actively convert people who love B&E because they have their own VERY special love story, but I have always connected to Carlisle's character the best and that's why I wrote this.
I'm very VERY flattered that you love my story too, but I can promise you this -- B&E are in this story, they both play PIVOTAL roles in Carlisle's life and destiny. ;)
Stick around, you came in at the right time, just three or four more chapters until Chicago...
Reviewer: Mercywhitlockjasperslilsis (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
This is a really great story.Sometimes I think that carlilse cullen actually wrote it himself!
Author's Response: That is a very sweet compliment! Thank you for taking the time to review, I hope you enjoy the next chapter, I'll be dropping it in the queue sometime tonight.
Reviewer: Mercywhitlockjasperslilsis (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2009 02:35 AM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
This is a really great story.Sometimes I think that carlilse cullen actually wrote it himself!
Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 06:30 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
Wow. Lots to digest!! Siobhan was fantastic- I'm terribly interested in what happens to her little street waif! The careless vamp made me sad for Carlisle. I wonder how much he's taking to heart from that?
And, do we get to hear Carmen and Eleazar's story next time?
Great chapter!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked Siobhan, she was also one of my favs from BD. You'll see what happens to her "pet" in the next chapter, another reader who wrote a review has already guessed who she is ;)
The "nameless" vampire is a mirror for Carlisle. He realizes looking at the desperation in the "nameless" vampire's eyes just how desperate he is, and Carlisle has been hiding his own desperation from himself. He's taking the encounter quite to heart, but he's not ready to take Siobhan's advice... yet.
You will get a short story from Carmen and Eleazar, but there's a LOT more that happens in the next chapter, which I'll be dropping in the queue sometime tonight.
Reviewer: kitsune_001 (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
Hey the New World chapters. I have been looking forward to these chapters, I can't wait till the net one is out.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're still reading Kitsune -- let me know what you think of the rest of the chapters... I'll be posting the next one in the queue sometime tonight.
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 04:03 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
So, it was Siobhan who implanted the idea of changing someone to keep him from his everlasting loneliness. The unnamed vampire, will he see him again? Will Eleazar and Carmen stay with Carlisle? Do they know the Denali sisters already? So much more I want to know!
Author's Response: Yep, Siobhan is one of the few that Carlisle likes who loves her vampire existence and she appreciates the need for companions.
Regarding "nameless" I'm going to repeat something I wrote below: I kind of left the "nameless" vampire's fate open on purpose. Carlisle doesn't destroy him, which gives him a chance to go off and either find another way to live, or find another way to die. And I left him "nameless" on purpose too, I originally had a plan on who he was supposed to be, but I found it more poetic to let him be sort of an "everyman" vampire, one of many many vampires who must be fighting the same battle that Carlisle is fighting, against loneliness and hopelessness.
Eleazar and Carmen do stay with Carlisle, or rather, he goes with them ;) The Denali coven is in the next chapter, many questions will be answered...
Reviewer: Aggiezee (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 02:21 PM · On: Chapter 1 ~ 1661
Thanks for the new chapters, and continuing to fill out the details of Carlisle's long life.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're still reading Aggiezee! Let me know what you think of the rest.
Reviewer: Psykojinx (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
Ouch! Oh poor Carlisle. I kinda wish we had that vampire's name :) Does he get destroyed later?
Another question! With the whole footsteps toward the bedroom scene and Carlisle being scared of his father in that moment, it made it seem like (to me) there was more than just beatings going on... were that the case?
Author's Response: I kind of left the "nameless" vampire's fate open on purpose. Carlisle doesn't destroy him, which gives him a chance to go off and either find another way to live, or find another way to die. And I left him "nameless" on purpose too, I originally had a plan on who he was supposed to be, but I found it more poetic to let him be sort of an "everyman" vampire, one of many many vampires who must be fighting the same battle that Carlisle is fighting, against loneliness and hopelessness.
Good question about Carlisle and his father but no, the violence was only physical/mental, not sexual. When people suffer a trauma and associate that trauma with a smell or sound just that sound/smell can put people into a panic, which is part of why PTSD is so disruptive to post trauma life. Before Carlilse was beaten as a child his father would often just walk up to him calmly and stand in front of him, pausing for what felt like an eternity before he worked himself up enough to punch him. Heavy footsteps set off Carlisle's memories.
Reviewer: Graceful_imp (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 12:06 PM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
Great chapter!
I really am enjoying this story :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for writing a review, I'm really glad you are enjoying it so far. More to come very soon, I'll be posting the next chapter in the queue some time tonight.
Reviewer: TransylvaniaOrange (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 1 ~ 1661
Thanks for another wonderful chapter! I can't wait to hear Eleazar's story.
Here's to a hundred reviews!
Author's Response: Thanks TO -- the response has just been awesome. Here's hoping people keep writing positive reviews as the New World chapters go up! ;) I'll be posting the next chapter in the queue sometime tonight.
Reviewer: ttcub (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2009 10:40 AM · On: Chapter 12 ~ 1811
Oh my I am really liking this. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: I'm really glad you are still enjoying it ttcub! Next chapter will prob be posted in the queue tonight.
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