This isn't so much a "review" as a thought that my mind wouldn't drop while reading this chapter (10)... In Breaking Dawn during the final confrontation with the Volturi, Bella realized through experimentation that if an alpha (Sam or Jacob) was under her shield all the other wolves in his pack were also shielded through their mind link.  So, while readin this chapter, I kept thinking, "Why not keep Sam or Jacob near Bella at all times (even if that meant that Bella sometimes had to go to La Push)?  Or, if that wasn't feasible, at least keep Bella near enough that one of them can quickly reach Bella should any of the patrolling wolves come across the Ghost Walker's scent.  That way Bella's shield could be used to counteract the effects of the Ghost Walker's gifts while they hunt him down.  Even if you go by the split packs with Sam as alpha of one and Jacob of the other and thus not all wolves would be covered by Bella's shield (since members are only mind linked with their particular alpha), there would still be at least some wolves who would be able to see, smell, etc. the vampire and, thus, would be able to lead the others in the hunt.

A side plot...grreeaattt... -__-. come on who give a shit.

"He's stalking me"...thank god somebody said it. Renee doesn't know SHIT.

I don't get bella or edward here... Why don't they just confront jacob and tell him that his b.s imprint is not a instant permission to violate their daughter if she just needs a friend from him?. She just wants to be FRIENDS, isnt the imprint suppose to clue in those wolves of what the other person needs from them?. If she wants a friend, he is suppose to be a friend; if she wants a nanny he is suppose to be that!. So why is it that he has a problem when she just wants space?. Why is jacob always the NO means YEs asshole?. Sicko. Tried to get his rocks off w/ Bella and failed, now the same with her daughter. Dude is a F*#&ing rapist/stalker.

I LOVE the fact that Renesmee is making her own choices. This wolf-printing nonsense always rubbed me the wrong way. Jacob was a dick when he was going after Bella. You couldn't give that dude a clue (that Bella was in love w/ someone else) for free. He thought if he emotionally raped her enough, she would eventually be his. Not to say that Bella wasn't partly the blame w/ all her 'visits' to the reservation. She was just as belligerent w/ her need for multiple sources of attention as any 'whore'. Which brings me to the fact of this imprinting. What is this nonsense, sense he didn't get the mom, give him her daughter. FTW???. I HAAAATTTTEDDD that. He would been better of given the option to date "Palm-ela" for the rest of his life. I also hate that most fanfic just 'surrenders' Renesmee to this sicko. They have his smelly ass 'living w/ them, ... again FTW?.

I know Carlise and Esme are compassionate, but the rest of them, especially EDWARD doesn't have to just "accept" it. Seriously ppl, the guy was an agressive jerk, trying to get his rocks off on Bella and FAILED, now since he 'imprinted' on Renesmee (HER DAUGHTER, in the span of WEEKS after bella marriage to another guy) you just throw your hands up and invite him 'everywhere' you go, so he can wait her out and get his rocks off when she turns 18 at the stroke of midnight?. WHAT IS WRONG w/ U PPL?  that's just phucking Sick!.

Have me hold my junk for 7 to 18 yrs, and I'll say "I love you" to ANYTHING w/ a pulse, imprint or not!. Dedication my a$$. Jacob is just an IN-HOUSE Pedifile, enjoying cullen life b/c Bella can't seem to let him go. (Bella) You became a vampire!, that demanded a few SACRIFICES ya dumb dizzy broad!. You gave up your mom, but kept your emotional rapist/bestfriend /person who tried to tanked your relationship with every opportunity he got ... around?, that was the one you decided to keep?!. Seriously!!!. And NO ONE OBJECTED TO HIS SMELLY ASS GOING EVERYWHERE WITH THEM FOR THE REST OF ETERNITY!; While he waits for your DAUGHTER to ripen before he 'dives-in' balls deep?????

Thank god this is 'somewhat' different. If it was me, I would said Phuck that crap and moved my whole family somewhere else. Or turned him into a yunic.

The plot line is good but the character sketches in no way matched SM's character description; example, the Cullen's in your story have been portrayed as a selfish bunch with no real regard to others feelings ie anyone not a Cullen but this is not true from SM's character sketch Edward refers to Jacob as his "brother" . I did enjoy the plot line except for these anomalies !

I loved the story and the ending.  Thank god Jacob got his happy ending.  Will there be an epilogue?  I hope so, I would like to see Jake being happy with Ness! lol

Thank you!  Dixie

 

 

OMG that was awesome!!!!   I do think the vamps underestimated the wolves I think they would have won eventually but with losses. Thank god Ness got there to help.   I can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Take care, Dixie

P.S.  I hope Ness realizes that she is in love with jake and wants a future with him!

So Ness can see him too!  Damn I hope the wolves get him!

I'm loving the story!  Dixie

Poor Jake, how can Ness be so stupid and stubborn and just plain old mean!

I'm seeing nothing good in this chapter for any of the Cullens. Their choices are a rock and a hard place. The only possiblity is Nessie finally realizing she  does love Jacob. She heard the shape-shifters will all be dead and ran for the reservation.

Holy crap, how are they going to explain that to Sharon...what's going on with Ness?  Who did she see?  The wolves are good, how are they able to detect him?  through movement?

Dixie

Something tells me Sharon has just seen her first giant wolf! They must have been alerted to the danger Ness is in at this very moment.