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Reviewer: alltimehigh (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2010 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 4 - New Friends and Townies

lmao 'dry hump her next to the fire' funny plz keep writing i love this story



Author's Response:

 

Thanks alltimehigh!

Hooray!  I'm glad you liked my Quil!  I wasn't really sure how people would respond to the secondary characters.

Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2010 05:12 AM · On: Chapter 4 - New Friends and Townies

I did love the length of the chapter.  It was very good to see both point of views within the same chapter.  especially instead of having to wait 1 week inbetween both points of view.  Can't wait to see what will happen at the Thriftway.  Your writing is very good keep, it keeps my attention and I haven't run into a dull part yet where I have to cheat and skim for a more interesting part.  Keep up the great work!

angel 057



Author's Response:

Hahaha, thanks angel 057!

I'm glad I've been able to keep you interested so far!

I felt both those chapters were too short to seperate, so I'm glad you enjoyed my sticking them together.

Ahh the Thriftway!  Hopefully you won't be dissapointed!

Reviewer: Steph29 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2010 03:00 AM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

Great start!  Looking forward to seeing where it goes.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review Steph29!  I hope you're not dissapointed, please keep reading!

Reviewer: SophieMason23 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2010 01:58 AM · On: Chapter 4 - New Friends and Townies

omg im so sick of the edward leaves and bella falls for jake story line - but this is just plan awsome. completly original i love it!
the chapter legnths are good, don't worry there not too short.  my only complaint is that maybe you could update quicker?
but other than that i LOVE your story :) and i love your banner too :D
much love, please update faster xxx



Author's Response:

Hahaha - thanks SophieMason23!

I'm glad you like my story!  I really wanted to explore what was so often eluded to in the books; what would happen if there was no magic and monsters.  Not to say that there won't be vampires and werewolves in this story (because there will be), but I wanted to lay the foundation of their relationship before all that happened.

I'm updating as fast as I can!  I'm about 1-2 chapters ahead on writing, so as soon as a chapter is validated, I upload the next one!

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: GiftfromtheGods (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2010 10:54 PM · On: Chapter 4 - New Friends and Townies

Nicely done, I like the way you write Jakes thoughts.

Jessica is a stupid ** - well, but I guess she's supposed to be.

The Cullens are going to show up? awesome! Keep up the good work. :-)

 



Author's Response:

Hahaha thanks GiftfromtheGods!

Jake's POV is fun.  I'm trying to write him as the sunny, fun 15 year old he was before all this crazy mythological stuff happened.

Yeah - I found Jessica's character extremely annoying in the books, so I hope I carried that over into my story ;)

Hopefully you'll enjoy my take on the Cullens too!

Reviewer: LaBellamora (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2010 06:59 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

i like the Jake pov.  you are doing a great job



Author's Response:

Thanks again LaBellamora!  It's a lot of fun writing from the different characters perspectives. I thought it would be hard writing from Jake's POV, but I actually really enjoyed it!

Reviewer: LaBellamora (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2010 06:45 PM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

Great beginning!  I would never guess this is your first story.



Author's Response:

Aww thanks!  I haven't done any creative writing in 15 years, and I'm finding this very cathartic! I appreciate your feedback!

Reviewer: stephsmith (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 08:31 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

It's so sweet!  I've been looking for a fan fic about what would have happened if it had been just Jake and Bella from the beginning.  You're doing a great job with it too!



Author's Response:

Aww thanks stephsmith!  That means a lot to me!  I'm glad I was able to fill a void with my little 'what if' story. I hope you continue to read and enjoy!

Reviewer: fullmoon422 (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 03:46 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

awesome - where's the rest?



Author's Response:

Haha fullmoon 422 - it's a coming! I'm about 2 chapters ahead on writing, so hopefully you'll never have to wait more than a week for an update. I'm lucky my beta is amazing and churns things out super fast!

Reviewer: Fadewind (Signed) · Date: September 30, 2010 05:26 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

LOVE IT

I hope you wirte more.



Author's Response:

Thanks Fadewind!  Chapter 4 is already in queue, and is a bit longer than the other chapters so far! Favourite so you get an update when it's posted!

Reviewer: twimom_la (Signed) · Date: September 29, 2010 12:23 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

Fun story! Love reading about these two before things got complicated.



Author's Response:

Thank you twimom_la! I think it's nice to give these two a chance before all that wacky supernatural stuff comes into play!

Reviewer: twiseman (Signed) · Date: September 26, 2010 04:31 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

i like it,  its the relationship that was ment to happen if Edward was not there,i like how you made it the summer before school started, that was an awsome idea now Jacob and Bella get the hole sumer to bond. this is awsome keep up the good work



Author's Response:

Hi twiseman!  Thanks for the support! I'm excited for Jacob & Bella to get some non-supernatural time before school starts!

Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 04:25 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

I am really enjoying your story. I like the whole idea of Bella meeting Jacob first in a natural way. They are really cute together. Can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

Hi danimcket!  I'm glad you like the idea of the "natural path".  That phrase really stuck with me from Eclipse, and I'm enjoying seeing how it will unfold!

Reviewer: GiftfromtheGods (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

Hi,

I think this story is such a nice idea. I really liked reading it and I hope you'll continue it. I want to know where you take the story.

:-)



Author's Response:

Hi GiftfromtheGods! I'm glad you enjoyed the idea!  I felt compelled to see how the natural path would have gone, and I've enjoyed writing it so far! I hope you continue to like where it goes!

Reviewer: Posy (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 07:54 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

I love this story!

I once was a Team Jacob... But then I became a Team Jasper, but I really really like this :)

It's so sweet with Jacob :D -He just CUTE all over... *sigh*

Update soon dear, and I would be very pleased :D



Author's Response:

Hi Posy!  Thanks for your review!  I hope my story reminds you of why you once enjoyed Jacob, even if you love Jasper now.  I'll try to throw in some nice Jasper scenes for you later in the story!

Reviewer: ElaineEscalera (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 07:25 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

awe i loved it :) keep up the great work!



Author's Response:

Thanks ElaineEscalera!  I hope you continue to read it!

Reviewer: ROSEjen (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 06:03 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

awwe jake is so cute....



Author's Response:

Thanks ROSEjen - I think so too!

Reviewer: cagemydreams (Anonymous) · Date: September 25, 2010 05:40 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

I love Jake and Bella! They are so sweet together...Edward always made everything so serious and angsty.



Author's Response:

Thanks cagemydreams!  He is rather angsty isn't he?  I always liked how chill Jake was.

Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 05:07 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

Okay soo loved JPOV and it certainly cleared up the fact of as to why he ran out in to the water.  I do have a question though.  You mentioned that jacob is 15.  Now if you follow story line then soon Bella will be turning 18.  But I'm not sure on how you plan to run with this so I'm just asking for some clarification on the ages and how that will play into your story?  Oh! and thank you for the bathing suit details.  Gotta love a hormonal teenage Jacob he is just too cute.

angel 057



Author's Response:

I'm going to try to keep as close to the world Stephanie Meyer created as possible. So Jake will turn 16 sometime in Jan/Feb? (Any idea what he exact bday is?) Does this mean I can't do lemons? Well - I'm not exactly clear on how Twilighted feels about underage werewolves when they're physically 25, so I'll have to check with my beta.

Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 04:50 AM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

okay so let me start off by sooo very nicely thanking you for the absolutly, very detailed description of jacob's shirtless.  I mean come on who doesn't love a shirtless jacob?  Really?!  Again you managed to do a fanstastic job on this chapter.  I would have liked to see a little more detail when it came to describing the clothes in more detail.  It helps when you try to imagine the scene you create in mind.

angel 057



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I hope to include many more shirtless Jacob scenes!  Why?  Because I agree with you, who doens't love a shirtless Jacob?

Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2010 04:46 AM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

I think for your first fanfic you are off to a great start.  I love the way the chemistry seems to flow between the of them already.  Its not easy and you have seemed to find a way to make it casual yet innoncent all at once.

angel 057



Author's Response:

Thanks for the wonderful compliment angel 057! It's much appreciated!

Reviewer: Edward Hearts Musique (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2010 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

I may be team Edward... but I love thinking about Jacob's transversus abdominis muscle lol yummy!



Author's Response:

Haha - thanks Edward Hearts Musique!  I'd like to think that regardless of any team, we can all appreciate the transversus abdominis! I'll try to throw some in of Edward later too, just for you!

Reviewer: Edward Hearts Musique (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2010 03:38 PM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

I just started reading this story and I really like it so far. It's a great idea, can't wait to see what you do with it :)

 

Musique

Reviewer: jnc420 (Signed) · Date: September 18, 2010 04:15 AM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

love this so far/



Author's Response:

Thanks jnc420! I hope Chapter 3 doesn't dissapoint!

Reviewer: SuperFrog101 (Signed) · Date: September 17, 2010 05:21 PM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

I love the idea



Author's Response:

Thanks SuperFrog101! I'm glad you like the idea!  I hope you like where it goes! Chapter 2 is now posted, and Chapter 3 is in queue.

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