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Penname: Alizabeth Roc [Contact]
Real name: Alizabeth Roc
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Aspiring writer working on a totally non-vampiric book. I love to use this as a distraction when the writers block hits.


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Future Promises by Goldenbane Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 54]
Summary:

10 years have passed since the events in Breaking Dawn.  When a graphics designer finds work in the town of Forks, his fate becomes linked with the Cullens.


Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Jacob, Jasper, Other Character, Renesmee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 52675
[Report This] Published: November 22, 2008 Updated: September 12, 2009


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A New Job, a New Town, and a New Beginning

I'm looking forward to finding out who Alicia is! My favorite part was the description of the bodyguard.

I found you on review4review, if you wouldn't mind reviewing my story I would appreciate your feedback, it is A Place Under Heaven http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164

 

 
Raven Song by SassyGeminiMom Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 34]
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Justice McIntyre is a smart, beautiful and ambitious woman who was just promoted as Assistant District Attorney and slated to head up a new department in the District Attorney’s office.

She is also a werewolf.

Can one night with a cocky and gorgeous mystery man jeopardize her chances of winning the biggest case of her life?

Can Justice find a way to separate the woman from the wolf long enough to revenge the human murder victim against the accused werewolf?

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Categories: ORIGINAL FICTION Characters: Other Character
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: No Word count: 4988
[Report This] Published: March 19, 2009 Updated: March 19, 2009


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Raven Song

My measure of a good "love" scene is when it is so hot I forget to be embarassed. This story did that. I'm glad I found your story through the contest. Great writing and I can tell you had a good time doing it. I sure enjoyed reading it.

 
Voices by BekahR Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 318]
Summary:

The Cullens are the picture of the perfect family, but behind the wealth and charm, they are hiding something -- something that will be discovered by Isabella Swan when she meets a broken, troubled boy and learns that even perfection can be imperfect.

 

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AU Human; rated for sensuality, mild profanity, and violence. Canon pairings.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 68368
[Report This] Published: June 02, 2009 Updated: June 01, 2010


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 15: MIND OVER MATTER

I just found your story through review4review I am hooked. Somewhere about Chapter 10 I announced that we'd have to order pizza for dinner. The characters all flow so well - you have each of their voices down pat. I love the professions (Alice as a wedding planner is so great).

I think the pace of Part 1 was really masterful... yes I was anxious to get to Edward, but you revealed so much so well that I never felt that any lines were throwaway. I will read anything you write on this site.

I won't claim to be a writer, but my first chapter is up now of A Place Under Heaven I would really appreciate your feedback.

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164

 



Author's Response:

Hi, Alizabeth -- thank you for such a thoughtful review! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far.

I would love to exchange feedback; I'm always on the lookout for new stories to read, so I'll head over and check it out.

Thanks again.

 

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: DOCTOR JAZZ

Was that cranberry juice?! Poor Alice, the truth hurts. I guess she's not at the acceptance phase yet. I'll definitely check out your journal. I just got mine up username alizabethroc



Author's Response:

So far you're the only one who's mentioned the cranberry juice -- you have a keen eye, madam. ;)

I'll make sure I give your journal a look too; I'm just getting used to all the lj functions at this point . . .

Thanks for reading!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 31, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: EDWARD'S WORLD

I loved this chapter. You really know how to build tension, woman!



Author's Response:

Thank you, Alizabeth! ;)

 
Summary:

Shadows and Meadows, alternate banner

 

Within a moonlit meadow, the ultimate danger lurks.  Shadows in time, Edward and Bella face an unpleasant truth that may change their destinies forever.

An entire world shifts as lives change, over and over, in the unpredictable currents of time.

It all begins in Forks, under a typically cloudy sky, when Bella gets tired of waiting yet another day for Edward to show up for school, and decides to take matters into her own hands.

This is an alternate universe story.  Canon pairings are adhered to.

 

THANKS AND KUDOS TO THE SUPER TALENTED ANNAMORPHOS FOR THE BEAUTIFUL BANNER!!  YOU ROOOCCCKKK!!!!   =D

 


Categories: Twilight, Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Renesmee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: No Word count: 11571
[Report This] Published: June 10, 2009 Updated: July 26, 2009


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Memories

I liked the prologue, you tripped very swiftly and smoothly into the twist at the end and hooked me right in.

I have been longing for a family scene with Edward, Bella and Nessie so I was sad you had to skim over that, but of course that's not the point of this opening. Moving on to the next chapter with excitement.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Ditching

curiouser and curiouser.

I like your Bella. It is so out of character for the canon Bella to think she could give advice on men. The Bella inner monologue is very unique to your story.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6: Joy Ride

I love love love the chapter title, that was a moment of inspiration.

Another highlight for me was when she cursed him in English and Spanish!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: The Meadow

So hear I am, bumping up against the end of the posted chapters. They are so short and tasty (like delicious little cookies). Your names are cool and I'm very intrigued about the premise that you have just presented.

You have a talent for naming your chapters and your story title is great as well.

I'm glad I found your story on review4review. I hope you post quickly. If you get a chance please take a look at my story and hit me up with a review.

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164

 
Waning Moon by YborJen Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 420]
Summary: Feature

 

The epic story of Carlisle Cullen began in 17th century England. Since the fateful night he was transformed into a vampire Carlisle has searched for two things: redemption in the eyes of God, and unconditional familial love. Follow Carlisle through the old and the new world as he meets friends and enemies on his journey toward his destiny as an inspiration to vampires everywhere. Carlisle and his family will discover, however, that love is eternal, but life is not.

 

 

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

 



Categories: Pre-Twilight, Twilight, New Moon, Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alec, Alice, Alistair, Amun, Aro, Bella, Ben, Billy, Bree, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charles, Charlie, Charlotte, Chelsea, Demetri, Didyme, Edward, Edward Masen, Sr., Eleazar, Elizabeth Masen, Embry, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Garrett, Irina, Jacob, James, Jane, Jared, Jasper, Kachiri, Kate, Kebi, Laurent, Leah, Liam, Maggie, Makenna, Marcus, Quil, Renee, Renesmee, Rosalie, Sam, Seth, Siobhan, Stefan, Tanya, Tia, Victoria, Vladimir, Zafrina
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes Word count: 152115
[Report This] Published: August 16, 2009 Updated: January 15, 2010


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 22, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 ~ 2006

I loved the action in this Chapter. I would like to hear more about the physical damage that the vampire's experience and how they heal if they are stagnant. I remember in an earlier chapter Carlisle reattached limbs with heat. If you have time to post on this in your thread, that would be great.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing again Alizabeth -- I loved writing the action.  I wanted to show the vampires and werewolves really working together, not in separate units fighting two separate groups of newborns.
And GREAT question about the issue of physical damage.  I will say that my theory is that there are "levels" of damage.  Minor cracks are not on the same level as a dismembered limb, but I will post a bit tonight on the FORUM to satisfy your curiosity on that point because it is a very good one!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 17, 2009 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ~ 2005

I've wondered about Rosalie's motivation in calling Edward. Its interesting that she seemed to have no real perception about how the news of Bella's suicide would affect him.

I was interested in your explanation as to why the family felt comfortable in Forks and wanted to return. Other than the clouds, I was never clear what the appeal was.

You answer questions I had and questions I didn't think to ask. Amazing how much ground you covered in this chapter.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing again Alizabeth --

Rose is a tough, tough character.  She is very difficult to make sympathetic and I tried really hard to do that by explaining her motivations.   And the problem is she DOES know how the news of Bella's suicide would affect him, but she is so selfish that she convinces herself that she alone can MAKE HIM SEE REASON. I'll post more on this on the thread!

A friend of mine asked me specifically, "why would they want to go back to Forks if Bella is not there?"  So I set out to explain why such a dreary wet, cloudly, rural town could possibly have any appeal.  There are lots of reasons why it is the Cullens' favorite place on earth. :)

Tell me more on the forum about the questions you didn't think to ask!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ 1863

I have been enjoying this story so much. I just had to post after this chapter. It is exciting that the story is now converging with characters that we know (and love) and I feel like I know Carlisle so well at this point. You have developed this character in such an amazing way.

Thanks so much for bringing this part of the story to life.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing Alizabeth -- I'm so glad you have enjoyed it so far, and you can see how far he has come and how long Carlisle is alone before he meets his family and all the others we love.  I'm looking forward to seeing what you think of the chapters that cover the "books"!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 10, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 ~ 1928

Thank you much for this story.  Your writing is amazing. I can't wait for more.

I am really humbled. If you have any time, I have a few chapters up

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164



Author's Response:

Thanks again Alizabeth -- I am keeping a list of stories my readers have sent me, and I've got yours on my list.  I'm working through them when I find time.  I'm on break right now, but I'm still studying!!  How sad is that!  So hopefully I'll get to yours soon.

As Carlisle would do, keep writing, writing, writing!! ;)

 
After All by Scorp112 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 753]
Summary:

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Bella is in a car crash that kills her mother and Phil, leaving her with many physical and emotional injuries. Bella is completely devastated by the accident and is no longer the woman she used to be. She returns to Washington to be closer to her father and best friends, trying to find a way to put her life back together.  

Edward has had a "thing" for Bella for ten years, but he never acted on it, and no one ever knew about his feelings for her. He's done a decent job of building a good life, but Bella's return makes him question and re-think everything he thought he knew.

Once these two meet again, he's going to do all he can to finally get his girl, but life and circumstances will make it difficult for him - and Bella will be the biggest challenge of all.  

Story is AU-Human. 

 

 

 

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 27 Completed: Yes Word count: 159480
[Report This] Published: September 05, 2009 Updated: July 10, 2011


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: December 07, 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Highs and Lows

Poor Bella! You did a great job describing her memories of the accident and that disjointed time afterwards when information is coming in bits and pieces.

Emmet changing the radio station was great!

I thought Edward's POV came across very well. The initial recollection of his meeting with Bella, his feelings of insecurity (wanting to get a shower) - all felt very realistic. I'm interested to know what she thinks of him. I'm glad I found your story on review4review, if you have time to check out my first chapter of A Place Under Heaven & give me a review I would really appreciate it

http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review.  Hope you will come back and continue to read.

Am really enjoying your story as well and can't wait to read more.

Thanks again!

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Seattle

I found you again. For some reason your story dropped off of my favs but it is back on.

No wonder Bella freaked out. All those horrible memories. I was really drawn in and could feel the rising panic. I like that she was sedated for their reunion. I was completely holding my breath when she reached out to touch him. Can't wait to read Edward's POV

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Confusion and Hope

I love how Emmet is egging him on - fanning the flames of jealousy but it doesn't seem that Edward needs too much pushing. Time to ditch that girlfriend.

I'm interested to find out why he so conspicuously couldn't remember Jake. So wrapped up on noticing Bella?

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Unexpected

It was a rollercoaster chapter. I'm laughing at Dr. Dick and then having a perfect mental picture of Alice in her pink robe ... then the good Doctor comes in and ooh la la!

Alice and Esme were perfectly not subtle. I'm not sure how Alice feels about the possibility of something between Edward and Bella. She seems pretty posessive.



Author's Response:

It was definitely a roller coaster chapter - I had so much fun writing it though. Still one of my favorites. 

Alice will definitely be fine with Edward and Bella hooking up. We'll see more of that in Chapter 10. 

Thanks so much for stopping by to review!

 
Lost Cause by bonnysammy Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 427]
Summary:

 

 

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A woman awakes in a forest. She is lost, alone and has practically no memory. Three members of the Cullen family find her and take her to their home. But everything is not as it appears, especially not with the girl.  How can the little she knows to be true actually be possible?  It could be said that anything is possible when thrown into a world of myth.

 

Follow along as she travels on her journey to find, forgive and move beyond her past, all the while finding herself and something she never knew she was looking for.

 

This is mostly an E/B story though other loved and not so loved characters will be involved.

 


Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: Raison D'être
Chapters: 25 Completed: No Word count: 145399
[Report This] Published: September 10, 2009 Updated: May 01, 2012


Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Encounter

I enjoyed the first chapter. It drew me in. You have a beautiful descriptive style.

I enjoyed the glimpses into Bella's personality and humor. Nice Princess Bride reference :)

Very much looking forward to reading and reviewing more. I found your story on Review4Review (Thanks Elise!) I have a couple one shots completed and one story in progress.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing.  I'm glad you're enjoying the little bits of humor that have been placed in it.  (I love The Princess Bride.  I quote incessantly.  I'm sure hubby hates it! lol)

I've been able to read your O/S's  Which I loved!  :D

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: January 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: First Sight

I'll answer the last question first - I do like it when people post a song list.

I can't wait to get all of my questions answered. You have a very good pace of intrigue, revealing a little bit and still moving the story forward in this chapter. It is tempting to rush sometimes and I like that you are letting this unfold.



Author's Response:

Thanks again!  :)

I'm actually creating a playlist for Lost Cause.  I'll probably have it done about 4 years after the fic is completed!  lol

There's a lot that needs to unfold, pieces that will come together as time progresses.  I hope I can keep it interesting while that happens. 

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Surprises

Wow, I love to be surprised and the Cullens' reaction to what Bella saw in the mirror was certainly surprising.

No need to justify three chapters for one day... it was one BIG day. I think you did a great job revealing all of the information that you wanted us to know in these first chapters. I cannot wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing.  Yes.  it was a big day.  And there was a lot that needed to be introduced slowly so it could all have been taken in.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Research

OK, my last lingering theory that Bella is actually a vampire and doesn't know it was totally blown here (it was already hanging in tatters).

Great job on the research section, you were able to make that fresh.

I really appreciate your descriptive style, the house, the furnishings, the clothes, the view of the landscape are all so vivid in my mind's eye from your writing.



Author's Response:

Thanks for another great review.

Sorry to have blown your theory apart!  :D

I'm so happy to be able to bring the vision to life through my words!  It's difficultto describe somethings.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Sound and Sight

I so do want an Alice closet.

I can see  how this chapter was hard to write. You did a great job with the visions and hints of the future. I admit I am breathlessly waiting for Edward to come.

I like how you are integrating technology into the Cullen world.



Author's Response:

Hello, again!  :)

Yes, this was extraordinarily difficult.  It was hard to mesh all the parts together.  Thanks for the review.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Changes

Who does not love a makeover?!

My favorite line of the story so far that made me laught right out loud was..“Are you all right?” she asked, her eyes growing distant. “Yes, you will be in a couple of minutes.”

You have Alice so down cold.



Author's Response:

Actually, I don't love the makeover part!  Maybe the final result, but having to still sit while you're poked and prodded?  Not so much!  lol

I love Alice's character.  Yes, she can be demanding and controling, but that's just part of her nature.  She does it out of love.  Sometimes I think that gets lost.  And she becomes this annoying little mosquito buzzing in your ear. 

 

Thanks for all of your reviews.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Arrival

You give something I've been waiting for (the reunion with Edward) and then add in another mystery - what was that reaction she had?

I loved their banter and I loved that Bella was able to show more of her humor.



Author's Response:

I give and I take!  I'm glad you liked the reunion.  I was terrified it wouldn't go right.  I kind of saw it as the make/break part of the story--well, until the reveal, that is.

I'm sure you know her reaction, you've already read the next chapter!  :D

 

Thanks again for reviewing.

 
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc Signed
Date: February 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Unexpected

Oh I get it!

That is really exciting. I wonder how Edward will like having his thoughts read. I'm thinking he can read her thoughts as well now. Can't wait to find out more.

That was a really interesting dream sequence.



Author's Response:

Yes, he can definitely hear her.  Could you imagine the conversations in their own heads.  I would think that would really get to be annoying for everyone else, you know?

The dream was from the Tonight Show, when Johnny Carson was on.  He used to do a skit like that.  I've never seen a full bit, but I got the basics from research online.  :)  I thought it was a funny way to introduce his talent.

Thanks.

 




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