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Penname: DaSrO [Contact]
Real name: Daniela Salas
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Member Since: September 15, 2009
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Summary:

FFSGSG tote

New teacher and aspiring writer, Bella Swan, moves to Seattle. She finds fan-fiction-creation-inspiration in the attractive and surly playboy who lives in the upscale condo across from hers. As her newest on-line story, From Hate to Heat, develops so does a correspondence with a mysterious reader/reviewer of that story. Who, exactly is reading Bella's/bellybeans' fanfic? It's a case of art imitating life and life imitating art. A fan-fic within a fan-fic story with all the canon usuals. Hilarity/UST/Love and lemons.


Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 70 Completed: No Word count: 487774
[Report This] Published: June 21, 2011 Updated: January 28, 2014


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 09, 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33: Conversation Pieces

ROTFL

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Mr. Silk Pants a.k.a. Mr. Big Stuff

LOL I did listen to the song =-P oh,how I wish your story wouldnt go to make those two neighbors fall in love, I really wish...but we all know that wouldnt be the point hehe its just that I have had that neighbor, and that asshole will always be an asshole,he's such an asshole that he went and made friends with my family and friends and remained their friend after breaking my heart. I've such hilarious stories with that guy that I would give you a run for yur money LOL. Next time your story makes me cry from laughing I'll tell you one of my RL stories with my exneighbor asshole hehe really freat story, so funny I didnt take to review the first chapters, sorry for that, but in a way its a compliment: thats just how engrossing and funny your story is =-)

Have a great weekend

Daniela

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28, 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: From Bad to Unimaginably Worse

^"You just can't canoodle with a dick like…a noodle." LOL owe you a story, right now I got to get up and make dinner for my parents..I know, what a wild Friday night =-P

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Distractions

I knew that strawberry was going to cause a scene like this hihihi I bet my arm and leg that Esme is young at heart...which gave the towel hanging feat a whole new dimension LOL

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 16, 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Angela Weber and the Mexican Mandate

Wait...what?Does Emmet knows something we dont? I mean,is any of the two bi...?cause it would be just hysterical to have Edward and Alice fighting over Edward LOL I love your story and drop everything to read as soon as I realize theres an update,and this was a really nice chapter.



Author's Response:

Hi DaSrO!

You're going to die...or maybe "bi-" when you read the update. LOL

I wanted to let you know I have updated FFSGSG over on another site (FFN) and maybe you would like to check out my holiday post. Same penname there. ;)  Thanks for the review and love for chapter 22! I think you will really like 23!  ;)

-bannerday

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 26, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: McCarty Party of Five

LOL oh God,what a perfect xmas present, thank u LOL funniest chapter I've read in a while. Some may think is farfetched that Edward kind of intoxicated figured out the whole bellybeans thing; but that people ignore the epiphany inducer power of real tequila LOL

best wishes for ur holydays n u wish u the best next year. Dont drink and drive ;)

 
Summary:

Isabella an assistant to a high society lawyer, Edward, seems so meek and innocent. But after her 9-5 Isabella works at a tattoo studio, inking people who only know her Bells. What happens when Edward, drunk and out with friends on New Year's Eve, decides to blow off some steam and runs in to the ink covered and pierced Bells?

Night and Day (Banner created by ginnyweasley)

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Aro, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Marcus, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 7076
[Report This] Published: June 26, 2011 Updated: June 26, 2011


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 28, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Night and Day

hey, why a one-shot when this could be the first chapter of a really nice fan fic?okey, it developed really fast, but there could be at least one more chapter hehe :) think about it 

 

 
Summary:

Banner by MegsD. Thanks!

 

For All You Wolf Lovers! What happens when a wolf is separated from his imprint?

Jacob knows that Nessie is his eventual future. He attempts to live without her and the Cullens after selflessly agreeing to give her uniquely short childhood to Bella and Edward. Racked by boredom and loneliness, he meets and befriends a girl who has an abusive and controlling step-father. Will another heart be broken? And what sinister forces are stalking Jacob and the other wolves, and why?

Keep reading and you'll discover who Embry's father is, if Leah ever finds happiness, and how Sam and Jacob deal with having two separate packs. 

He Never Suspected...


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Jacob
Challenges:
Series: The Wolfpack Chronicles
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes Word count: 58052
[Report This] Published: August 01, 2011 Updated: February 03, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chances Are

So nice! Leah deserves to be happy



Author's Response:

Aw, I always thought so =) Thanks for the review!

 

 
Summary:

Banner

 

Incredible Banner by readergoof...she even found a white bikini!!  Thank you!!

 

A jilted bride and a jilted groom decide to go on their respective honeymoons.  When fate brings them together at the same resort in the Bahamas, how much will they have in common besides broken hearts?  Can you start over on your honeymoon?  What do they each bring to the table?  It all starts with a white bikini…where will it end?

 

 

 

AH/Canon couples.  NC-17 for a reason (I mean, it’s me for crap’s sakes!).  Language (again, it’s me).  Shifting perspectives, and unusual twists.  Who doesn’t love a beach getaway?

 

 

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: Yes Word count: 57554
[Report This] Published: August 13, 2011 Updated: October 20, 2011


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 20, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - The Lure of a White Bikini

HI! I just stumbled accross your story. Reallu nice first chapter, the only odd thing was the last paragraph. No straight man would think that, much less about a girl they've just met and have been oogling on the beach hehe

 
Summary:

Bella and Mike wed four years ago and their marriage hasn't exactly been the picture of bliss. A carefully guarded secret surfaces, destroying an already fragile Bella. Everything she knew was a lie, everything she wanted for her life, wiped out with the click of a mouse. An E x B story.

Warning:
There is mention of past sexual assault, crappy childhoods, an even crappier marriage, and some very prevalent social issues (that I’m not going to mention here, because it would defeat the purpose of reading the story).

 

eik

Banner thanks to Forthelongestday

Excerpt: I looked at the clock again, 5:44.  Jesus Christ, did time stand still? Those fourteen minutes felt like fourteen hours.  As the moments ticked by, my palms began to sweat and a nervous pressure mounted in my chest. It's not the end of the world Bella; just the end of your marriage...and everything you knew. God, how was I going to do this? People up and left their spouses on a daily basis and never looked back. Of course, how many of them were under these same circumstances, I wondered.  How many women were faced with leaving the man they loved because he'd woven a lie so hurtful? When it finally surfaced, did it kill them?

banner

 

undertheradar


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emily, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Mike, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 37 Completed: Yes Word count: 171435
[Report This] Published: August 29, 2011 Updated: November 27, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Past Nevers, Future Firsts

Your surrender by neon trees?
awww,Im kind of sad I ran out of chapters. It was a really full day, but reading your story filled well the little blanks.

Hope to read an update soon, take care

Daniela



Author's Response:

Don't worry the next will be up soon. I think.

~MissJanuary

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Dear Aunt Emmy

Hi! Im a new reader  to your story (way to be obvious,right?) so dont be surprised if I end up reviewing old chapters. Since you asked in the author notes' of this chapter, Im in Barquisimeto-a small city in Lara, Venezuela. Today's a religious holiday, actually, the biggest procession of Latin America. My whole family is there, but Im in bed with my laptop reading your fanfic :) lets see if I can catch up with your story today. So far we seem to listen to some of the same music, does your Bella 'feel like scream' list include weak and powerless or passive from A Perfect Circle? They're in mine and they fit this.

Have a great weekend,

Daniela



Author's Response:

Hi Daniela!

Always glad to have a new reader. Venezuela, wow. I'm always amazed by how far reaching fan fiction truly is. It's like the great equalizer. And Weak and Powerless is most definitely on that Feel Like Screaming play list. I love A Perfect Circle. My dog is named after one of their songs, Brena.

Thanks for the review and thanks for taking and interest in my fic. I enjoy hearing from you.

tunes~MissJanuary

 
Summary:

Banner

From the ashes of North America Volterran Empire has emerged. Divided into twelve districts, some of the horrors the opressed humans are forced to endure are universal, the weekly blood donations, the fear of being carted away for even a hint of treasonous behavior.

Others are unique to each District. In District 2, the children of the wealthy are given the best possible education money can buy. But they're educated for only one purpose: violence.

Violence they can use in the annual Morphing Games, in which two adolescents, sixteen through twenty, are sent to the capitol to fight for their lives and the ultimate prize: immortality.

My name is Bella Swan, and I'm a Prospective in the 100th Morphing Games. There's only one problem: I don't want to win.

Hunger Games/Twilight X-Over. Vamps galore!

For those curious about the Morphing Games:

more can be found here:

http://orringtonrose.wordpress.com/


Categories: AU, Crossover Characters: Alec, Alice, Aro, Bella, Ben, Bree, Caius, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emily, Emmett, Eric, Esme, Jacob, James, Jane, Jasper, Laurent, Marcus, Mike, Renee, Renesmee, Rosalie, Tanya, Victoria
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 38783
[Report This] Published: September 18, 2011 Updated: November 26, 2011


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 31, 2011 Title: Chapter 7: EPOV OUT-TAKE

Nice, in a way -Edward being a mindreader- it was a little from the poit of view of most characters til now, so it was really complementary and clarifying to the story so far. Hope another BPOV comes soon, cant wait to see the games prep unfold.



Author's Response:

He's a useful narrative tool that way! And BPOV is on the way!

-OR

:)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: [8]

Good luck with all your projects, hope to read next chapter soon.

Have a great weekend :)



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed.

New chapter should be up soon!

-OR

:)

 
Forever by monkeymoe Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 145]
Summary:

Banner

 

Five hundred years. Four past lives. Three lost souls. Two lovers. One last chance.

Bella has spent the last twenty-five years of this life knowing of her soul's past quests and heartache. When passing a familar stranger on a busy New York street has her spiraling into the past, she must push through to insure a future with her soul's counterpart.

To fail would be to die.

 

Rated for some dirty time in the beginning and probably later on, language, violence. Also a heads up if you're touchy on slight religion about reincarnation.

One more note - There will be some talk of suicide. Nothing too detailed, but there none the less.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 28554
[Report This] Published: September 18, 2011 Updated: April 26, 2013


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 12, 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Reincarnation

There's one thing I dont like about your story: the lady's sucha quiter...she doesnt deserve to be reborn as a lady after 3 suicides...the rest I love. On to the next chapter...

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 29, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Any Other Day

Its starting to be cruel the pace at which you develop this story...still,I enjoy it and I'll keep reading it.

Have a nice weekend,

Daniela

 
No Longer The Prey by Maranda Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 185]
Summary:

NLTP

After Edward left in New Moon something changed in Bella. When faced with her past she decides to fight back against her own demons. Unfortunately, that catches the attention of the "agency". They recruit her and train her to hunt vampires. But when a familiar family is brought to the agency's attention Bella must make a choice.

How much would you risk to save the one you love?


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 63822
[Report This] Published: September 25, 2011 Updated: March 14, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: City Of Blood

So nice when one gets what one desired from a story...she really des want to save him t kick him around Italy's streets =)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Mission Impossible

I like the goal, but not the motives. The only good reason to rescue Edward's sorry ass is to kick him all over Europe...and, I really hope she calls his dad soon, preferable with those disposable cel phones Alice got before leaving for Europe

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: The Plan

You're right, this story is too good for the little reviews it has. So, here I am reviewing a chapter that's been up for months now just to tell you how thrilling and enjoyable your story is. Your story should have won the 'Bella I dont mind sharing air with' prize hehe

BTW, Happy New Year



Author's Response:

Thank you! By the way, do you know where I can enter those types of contests? Or do they just give out the awards as they see fit?

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Concern in Delay

I have your story on favourites =) nice chapter. I still think everything is a bit too much, but I want to see where will you take the story.

Have a nice weekend

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Explanations and Experiments

I really liked your story, but the last two chaptes have been just too much. I'll keep reading and tell you then...anyway,it's been well written and entertaied so I thank you for the time ad effort you've put into this story



Author's Response:

Hopefully the next few chapters will be better to you. I know I lagged a bit in the previous ones but I'm getting it back. Promise!

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Ecstasy

“Just please try not to make Edward so whinny and
corny, so many authors do that and make him so cheesy and pathetic…” 
- Mynet (FF)

Agreed.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Redemption

Like this Bella

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Peaceful

Didnt see that one coming! kuddos! so the syrum just minimize and slow the transformation if bitten to a non perceptible but accumulative process...and Im guessing it takes around a decade to complete the transformation, and by then they "develop cancer and die"...obviously one of the first things to go are the ones that allow fertility...well thought =)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed
Date: February 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Going Home

My only disappointment is that it wasnt longer =) dont be so hard on yourself.

Have a nice week,

Daniela

 
Summary:

When is the eleventh hour for Jacob and Bella? Was it in New Moon or Eclipse? Do we have to go back to the dive off the cliff? Maybe it's after the newborn fight? Perhaps even later.

It's one minute before midnight. Bella and Edward are married, and she is pregnant. What can Jacob possibly do to change the course of events? 

This is a Jacob / Bella story that begins part way through Breaking Dawn. That's right, this story picks up at the end of Book I of Breaking Dawn.

**WARNING!**
Multiple character deaths (from both sides)! I cannot guarantee anyone's life except Jacob and Bella's. Just so you know, in case it's going to really bother you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

1st Place "Best Complete"             1st Place "Best Grasp of Character"


Disclaimer: The following is based on the characters, settings, and events that appear in the Twilight series by Stephenie Meyer. All recognizable and/or trademarked elements, including, but not limited to, characters, settings, events, plot points, etcetera, are the property of their respective owners. No copyright infringement is intended. The author of this specific story (known by the pen name, light4dawn) is not associated with Stephenie Meyer, or any other affiliates involved with the Twilight series. This work is intended for entertainment purposes only, and no profit is knowingly generated as a result of it. Only aspects entirely unique and original to this story are owned by this story’s author.

 


Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Bella, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes Word count: 68795
[Report This] Published: November 21, 2011 Updated: January 16, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Resolution

Nice chapter, but Im still curious as to why/how all the Cullens died... maybe an outake from Carlisle's POV about what happened there would solve all my doubts ;)

Have a great weekend



Author's Response: There is one more chapter that will give a little more information on what has happened with the Cullens, but it will not give a "battle scene" level of detail by any means. Most of the chapter focuses on Jacob, Bella, Leah and Sam. I'm sorry to say, I am unlikely to write an out take from the Cullen's point of view. It's just not my thing, out takes, or writing in a Cullen's POV. Thank you for reviewing, and I hope the next chapter will answer some of your questions.

 




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