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Penname: DaSrO [Contact]
Real name: Daniela Salas
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Hypothesis: Vampires are capable of vertical inheritance.

 

Objectives:

 


  1. Finish knocking Jasper up, for the third time. Why? Because a story is not complete without a parity for Jasper.

  2. Knock up Emmett and Rosalie too. Why? Because it’s their way of dealing with the loss of a child.

  3. Rebuild vampire society after the war, including the transition to an egg-laying society and the adoption of eggs that were orphaned by the war.

  4. Move the Cullens back into human civilization and send the kids to middle school, so that they can learn to interact with humans and blend in.

  5. Send Masen to speech therapy with the humans so that he can learn to talk.

  6. Send Jasper back in time, with the aid of his time-traveling twins, to meet his human family and resolve any lingering issues he still has from his convergence.

  7. Accuse Jasper of being sexually attracted to his grandmother and bring up this accusation as many times as possible. Why? Because it’s the new running gag.

  8. Make entire story one hundred percent biologically accurate, despite the vampires.

  9. Tell a bunch of Cullenesque stories and make it funny, because that which is funniest is best.

Nominated for multiple iSparkle Awards!

Nominated for Best Drama/Angst/Hurt/Comfort WIP and Best Supernatural/Fantasy/Horror/Spiritual Sci-Fi WIP in the Emerging Swan Awards!

I have now been nominated for Oldie but Goodie Author in the Emerging Swan Awards!


Categories: Pre-Twilight, Post-Breaking Dawn, Crackfic Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 64 Completed: Yes Word count: 237551
[Report This] Published: January 02, 2012 Updated: January 08, 2014


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 24, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 5

It was one of your shortest chapters to date, still, it was good :) Was this a jump backwards?how long?cause last we read Jasper was trapped in the wormhole and they were living outside the island...

I like Carlisle's chapters, I know you perceive as dull and so you wont write a whole lot into them, but they've the potential to be the most interesting ones. I notice again how Jasper/Alice and their kids are the only ones with a perceptible presence in this chapter (Esme's Carlisle mate and she got a paragraph worth of mention)....why not classify the story as an A&J? it would get you more readers :)



Author's Response:

It's slightly forward in time from the last time we left Carlisle. When Jasper is trapped inside the wormhole, the Cullens are already off of the island in Mannitoba, but I just didn't mention it.

I would write more of Esme, but it's hard for me to get into her head and with the pain of her grief still being so strong, I don't want to be in her head. I think you're write that I could really go into the events in Carlisle's book and make a whole story about it, especially with what happens next. But, I haven't been able to do it, even though I've been thinking about it for over a year. It wasn't until I thought about what's going on with Jasper and Masen that I got inspired enough to write a whole story out of this chunk of time.

Thanks for the review!

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Book 2- Masen- Chapter 2

Masen has boobs!!! LOL sorry, my inner 12 years old needed to express himself after reading this chapter.

Its been so long! how have you been?

This chapter was nice, kind of a filler, wasnt it? hope that you can continue updating soon.

Take care,

Daniela

P.D.: loved the bit of quiddicth. I love HP!



Author's Response:

I've been really great, thanks for asking. How have you been?

This chapter was necessary for story progression, because I couldn't start by dumping the kids in a pile of humans and expect no one to get hurt. So I'm leading up to school gradually.

I love HP too! Esme read her boys all of the books :)

The next Gall Stone-versary is coming up soon (July 3rd), so I'm hoping the big hybrid battle will be ready to post by then.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 4

It might be a little late to ask...but how do I vote for your story in the Torch Awards?

Wish you the best luch, and hope you win. Thank you, again, for nominating me =)



Author's Response:

Go to http://thetorchawards.blogspot.com/p/voting_12.html scroll down to story and click on it. Today is the last day to vote.

Your welcome. I was dissapointed to find out that we can't vote on best reviewer, because that category is left up to the judges. But I did submit a wonderful essay on how great you are, so hopefully they will make the right decision :)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 3

Lost me a little bit here...Im sorry to say that I read but didnt quite understand and dont feel like thinking right now...so, as for the science stuff, from now on I'll just cruise and accept whatever you say cause it's your story LOL



Author's Response:

If you ever feel like going back and trying to figure the science out, the following might help.

Do you watch the show The big bang theory? The stuff Eliza says is one of the current popular scientific hypotheses in the world of theoretical physics and is also what Sheldon Copper from the big bang theory works on. I don't buy it, so I had Allison come in and blow it out of the water with something more classically Einsteinian. Basically time is a dimension in space, just like the typical first three dimensions. We can't move around in the dimension of time, but Kair and Kare can. And although our decisions have consequences in the future, those decisions are set in stone and the future and past can't be changed. This is different than how Alice sees the future, because she has a different perspective on time: she's stuck at one point and sees every possibility as it comes and goes. Kair and Kare are free to move to other points, but they don't see the various possibilities, only the winning possibility- what actually happens.

This is important because it means Kair and Kare already know what will happen and when it will happen and can go back in time. But they can only change something if they already had changed it in the past- it's more tautalogical reasoning. Basically I'm setting the rules and limits for how their time travel works. This is probably the most important bit of science in the story, but I fully admit it's difficult stuff and I struggled making sense of it myself when I was writing it.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 3

Okey, i feel kind of bad now...I've been really really bussy and for unknown reasons I dont get an alert when this story updates. You know I enjoy your writing and your stories; the thing is (as I already wrote in a previous review for messier) you're too biased towards Alice & Jasper, and it can be boring to have so much detail for a couple and not even mention other characters. Unless, of course, you tag it like an Alice/Jasper story, that way you'll have your audience set for you =)

I like Carlisle chapters, but I have the feeling you dont particularly enjoy writing them so you leave them as practically just structure lines. Maybe if you expand the point of view to tell a broader story more people would be interested. Anyway, I still like it hehe hope you're doing great

Have a nice easter,

Daniela

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 6

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!!! LOL!

How cool of you to make a wolf! LOL I was so surprised I ran to show it to my mom (who's visiting and doesnt even speak English,btw), you made me act like a teenager when she sked, -and how do you know it is you? and I just answered/yelled -cause I do! and stormed out LOL she's still laughing too.

But I would like to think I would not be a defenseless wolf, Im pretty sure I would know how to kick some a** xP

Thank you so much, this was the cherry of a really great day

Hope you have a fantastic week,

Daniela



Author's Response:

Jennifer is the defenseless one- she's pregnant. And Carlisle still considers Nessie defenseless, because she's his first grandchild. Daniela was the warrior in the bunch, included to take care of bussiness if their party was attacked. I'm sure there is a lot more cool fight scenes featuring her...just they all seem to happen when our narrators aren't around- like before the Cullens showed up, Daniela was doing...something...you'll have to tell me just what she was doing.

Tell your mom I said hello and that her daughter makes a great wolf!

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 6

Kuddos on your nomination!!! Gall's a great story and deserves all the recognition =) you're an excellent writer and I hope you win.

(I tried to vote but the site is a bit confusing :S I couldnt even find where your story is!...I'll try again tomorrow when Im not sleepy)



Author's Response:

Voting closed already. I submitted this chapter the same day the last one got accepted, so that author's note has expired :( Winners will be announced in a few weeks, but because of the delay, I doubt anyone noticed and voted for me...The great tradition of me never winning anything continues.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 4

nice n short but it made me late to work. hehe

have a nice day



Author's Response:

You to. My brother's arriving today so I'm hoping it will be a very good day. And I just wrote my first, first author paper yesterday, so I have something to celebrate (now I just have to get it revised and accepted).

Thanks for the review! And sorry you didn't win best reviewer, but you won in my book :)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 7

Jasper Chapter, please!

Happy Anniversary!

How are you? Im fine and happy, I started my master degree last week so Im kind of balancing a lot of things right now, but everything's good.

Hope you have a great day,

Daniela

P.S.: I love it when you use my name LOL thank you xP



Author's Response:

I'm glad your masters is going well. I hope you don't find out what it means to be a starving student (master's students are the lowest paid and the most overworked of all students), but if you do, I know a great receipe for guacamole made from fruits available in typical aberetums. And the key to doing well in master's classes is not to take too many of them at time' they're more work than regular classes and you need to leave time for your other responsibilities.

Jasper would be my choice too and he is in the lead, so keep your fingers crossed!

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 04, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 5

Awwww...I would have though an 'I love you' was the last thing one said to one's dying mother after such long time...still, it was lovely.

How is it that Jasper's so far back in the past? I forgot how was the wormhole thing...well,

Happy GallStoneversary! hope you're doing great :)

Daniela



Author's Response:

Jasper's not quite at the "I love you" stage...

And he can move freely into the past because he fell into Kare's wormhole and that's her power.

Happy GallStoneversary! I'm doing great and I hope you are too :)

 
Labels by samekraemer Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 212]
Summary:

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“Everyone has labels attached to them that they acquire over a lifetime... mother, daughter, wife, lover, friend, co-worker.  I happen to have all of those labels attached to me, plus one in particular that I’m not happy about…widow.  I have a daughter who never met her father, and parents who try to help me out but drive me crazy, along with a father-in-law who I take care of in the absence of his son.  Along with the label of “widow” came another label that I’m not happy about and it’s one I assigned to myself…crazy.  The reason I’m crazy is because every night in my dreams, I talk to my dead husband as if he was still alive.  I was perfectly content to live with those labels until someone showed up in my life that caused me to add another label to my seemingly never ending list…screwed." –Bella Black

 

AH/OOC.  Canon couples, eventually.  This is a story of a woman trying to deal with a devastating loss, so there will be sadness, but there will be humor and there will be love.  There’s foul language, eventual lemons, and it’s told in Bella’s POV.  It’s rated NC-17 for a reason.  It’s a love story at its heart, but it’s not an easy one.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Completed: Yes Word count: 125316
[Report This] Published: January 04, 2012 Updated: June 19, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww the sweetest thing Ive read in a long time :)

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed
Date: April 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I really enjoy your story, but it just broke my heart to read you casual mention of Venezuela. It's awful to be reminded that every scumbag think they can hide here, and it's even worse to know that thanks to Chavez its true. I dont know if you know, but the government in Venezuela has not been a democracy for the last 10 years, and it has taken a huge toll on everybody, specially the body count. Common people is really suffering from lack of security and the highest levels of poverty in all of my country's history. I guess it just made me really sad, and I don't mean aything by telling you all of this, just though that you should know that almost all of Venezuelan people is not on board with all the bad things going on in here.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I think it was mean of you to leave it hanging like that hehe hope 5th chapter its on the way. Too bad the thing with Jasper didnt last 12 hours until he meet Alice.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Really nice story so far. I must confess Im guilty of chrges for doing the same you do, Im reading today cause you posted the fourth chapter. But is really good and I'll stick around and promise to reiew from now on hehe

Have a nice weekend,

Daniela

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 01, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Hi! I just realized you updated this story. Thank you for the author note, it wasn't necessary to apologize (after all, is not untrue what you're saying) but I really appreciate it :). As I told you before, I didnt mean anything by telling you how things are in Venezuela, I just thought you should know that is not a bad country per se, just a really bad goverment causing a really bad temporal situation (we all have our hopes on October 7th for the most peaceful way out of this goverment possible). Regarding the story, so nice that things are looking up for them; it was a good chapter and I'm happy that I got to read the next one right away hehe

Have a great week,

Daniela

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 13, 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

The perfect end to a lovely story :)

 
Summary:

Sequel to Open Up Next to You, this is the story of Bella meeting her true vampire mate. How the Whitlock Coven adjusts and how she comes to open her heart again remain to be seen.

Liam/Bella Post-Eclipse, Non-BD-compliant AU.

Banner by the amazing evieeden. Thank you SO MUCH!

 

This story has been nominated for The Non-Canon Fic Award!

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Thank you so much for your votes!

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Categories: Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: Undeniable: Vampire Mate Bond Series
Chapters: 11 Completed: Yes Word count: 37671
[Report This] Published: January 24, 2012 Updated: March 15, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Dreaming of the One

What a mean lil cliffie I must say...

Call me cheesy, but almost the entire chapter had me thinking abut the song 'what if I do' by the foo fighters...I think it fits perfectly.

Have a great weekend



Author's Response:

Good afternoon!

Mean? Me? *blink* lol

I have never heard that song, so I will go look them up. :) 

Thank you for reading and for the scintillating rating!

LJ

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 29, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: What a Woman

Pretty good!

I must tell you, I though about the whole asking Alistair a thousand times...what if the guy died ten years ago in a car crash three miles away from Bella?

Well,I'll be waiting to see where you take this story

Have a nice week,

Daniela



Author's Response:

Good morning, Daniela!

Ah, with Alistair?  If he started focusing on his gift in terms of Bella's mate, and he couldn't find one – he would have known. He might have taken time to travel a great deal first, to orient himself in several distant locations (or if he were awesome, he might use an database), but if the person who was to be Bella's mate was not walking on the earth, he would not have felt anything to trigger his "finding" gift.

Which would have been really sad, in a lot of ways, but IN that event, Bella would have still had a loving, vibrant relationship with Alice and Jasper.

Hope you like the rest of the story!

Thank you for reading and for the scintillating rating!

LJ

 
Cloud Cover by Annalori Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 48]
Summary:

Bella, Edward

Emily invites Bella to spend the last day of Spring Break with her. Bella does not cliff dive, but instead, dives into her own psyche. Emily and Sam are making it work despite the fact Sam maimed Emily. Bella decides to be as persistant with Edward as Sam was with Emily. Now the pesky task of finding a Vampire in a haystack. Will Alice's vision be a help or hindrance? Will Jacob follow Bella? Can she afford all this travel on her measly college fund and Newton's paycheck?


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 30532
[Report This] Published: March 26, 2012 Updated: May 20, 2012


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Redheaded Leeches

btw, I've been looking for The Book Thief in pdf but I cant find it anywhere....if you have it could you please send it to me? my email is dasro1987@hotmail.com

I'm afraid that as I live in Latin America if I dont find it online I wont be able to read it and Im really curious about it, could you please help me out?



Author's Response:

Sorry,  I read The Book Thief in hardback form, borrowed from a friend.  It's one of the few books made of paper I've read in the past few years- since I got my Kindle.  I know it is available on the Kindle though, I just checked!   I found a site that might help you and am e-mailing you the link!

-Anna

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Redheaded Leeches

Is Tanya's last name in anyway related to Kashcheeva Vera S. (15/09/1922)? if not, I have no idea hehe really nice chapter, I like your Bella better than canon, yours have more spine. Hope chapter 7 is finished and uploaded soon.

Have a nice week,

Daniela



Author's Response:

No, I researched Russian sur names and their meanings.  So, it's not in direct relation to any living or deceased person.  I think S. Meyer wrote Bella kind of two dimentional.  Why do guys like her so much?  Phermones?  I liked her better after reading the partial draft of Midnight Sun and you get to see her from someone else's point of view.  The first 3 Twilight books are all Bella POV and she doesn't think she's interesting or extraordinary, and her good deads aren't mentioned.  In Midnight Sun, Edward follows her around in other people's minds for months and only sees the best of humanity in her.  That's the Bella I want to write about.  Like the movie Pretty Woman, sometimes the "prince" needs to be saved right back.  Bella wants to save him from his own doubts about his self worth. 

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 B & E

I already had your story on favorites!

Great chapter =) I can also tell you're getting better controlling the run-on sentences and paragraph lenght. Hope you can update soon, it's really interesting to read what will come next.



Author's Response:

This is first fan fiction endeavor.  I wrote an original round robin story a few years ago, but didn't enjoy sharing so much...  My husband is my favorite beta but it's the end of the school year & he's really busy right now.  He's a high school English teacher and adjunct college literature professor.  I"m trying to write a chapter a week, but the validation process sometimes makes it take longer to show up on the website, and we can only have 1 chapter in the queue at a time!  Thanks for reading ;)

 
Summary:

 

Big adoring thanks to Lisa254 who surprised me with this little beauty:)

Bella's parents die and suddenly her world is upside down. A beautiful, clearly insane man claims she's a wealthy heiress and he's her personal, very efficient butler and that she's his world. What's a girl to do? Inspired a bit by Mei-Chan No Shitsuji


Categories: Twilight, AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Completed: No Word count: 40735
[Report This] Published: April 29, 2012 Updated: April 16, 2014


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

I enjoy it...but Im really looking forward to the chapter that will not be so cryptic and will allow me to understand this fic hehe



Author's Response:

lol:D ---sorry for the crypticness, I guess? :D

But even though it's slow going, I promise that all will be revealed eventually, but I will try to get more info about the Butler world thrown in if that helps a little? :D

Thanks for the lovely rating and comment!

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Interesting, nice job. Hope to read more from you soon.

Take care,

Daniela



Author's Response:

Thank you Daniela:D

I'm trying to get another chapter validated but so far I'm also knee deep in the search for a dependable beta so we'll see what happens:D

Have a great weekend,

D.

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

Really good chapter! I just wish there were more chapters of this story already uploaded hehe Im really curious about these butlers. Maybe Edward should repaint the helcopter while Bella sleeps

 
Reviewer: DaSrO Signed
Date: August 16, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

really good, and i enjoy it...but im still praying for the day i will understand this situation...thank you anyway for the time and dedication you put into writing :)



Author's Response:

Thank you!

As for the confusion, it's meant to be that way because Bella is simply too overwhelmed at the moment to really take advantage of Edward's knowledge to gain more insight...will she ever get past that hurdle? We'll see.:D

Thanks for the kind words!

 




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