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Real name: Daniela Salas
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No Longer The Prey by Maranda Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 185]


After Edward left in New Moon something changed in Bella. When faced with her past she decides to fight back against her own demons. Unfortunately, that catches the attention of the "agency". They recruit her and train her to hunt vampires. But when a familiar family is brought to the agency's attention Bella must make a choice.

How much would you risk to save the one you love?

Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Caius, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 63822
[Report This] Published: September 26, 2011 Updated: March 14, 2012

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Ecstasy

“Just please try not to make Edward so whinny and
corny, so many authors do that and make him so cheesy and pathetic…” 
- Mynet (FF)


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Redemption

Like this Bella

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Date: January 03, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Peaceful

Didnt see that one coming! kuddos! so the syrum just minimize and slow the transformation if bitten to a non perceptible but accumulative process...and Im guessing it takes around a decade to complete the transformation, and by then they "develop cancer and die"...obviously one of the first things to go are the ones that allow fertility...well thought =)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed
Date: February 07, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Going Home

My only disappointment is that it wasnt longer =) dont be so hard on yourself.

Have a nice week,



When is the eleventh hour for Jacob and Bella? Was it in New Moon or Eclipse? Do we have to go back to the dive off the cliff? Maybe it's after the newborn fight? Perhaps even later.

It's one minute before midnight. Bella and Edward are married, and she is pregnant. What can Jacob possibly do to change the course of events? 

This is a Jacob / Bella story that begins part way through Breaking Dawn. That's right, this story picks up at the end of Book I of Breaking Dawn.

Multiple character deaths (from both sides)! I cannot guarantee anyone's life except Jacob and Bella's. Just so you know, in case it's going to really bother you.







1st Place "Best Complete"             1st Place "Best Grasp of Character"

Disclaimer: The following is based on the characters, settings, and events that appear in the Twilight series by Stephenie Meyer. All recognizable and/or trademarked elements, including, but not limited to, characters, settings, events, plot points, etcetera, are the property of their respective owners. No copyright infringement is intended. The author of this specific story (known by the pen name, light4dawn) is not associated with Stephenie Meyer, or any other affiliates involved with the Twilight series. This work is intended for entertainment purposes only, and no profit is knowingly generated as a result of it. Only aspects entirely unique and original to this story are owned by this story’s author.


Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Bella, Jacob
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Completed: Yes Word count: 68795
[Report This] Published: November 21, 2011 Updated: January 16, 2012

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Resolution

Nice chapter, but Im still curious as to why/how all the Cullens died... maybe an outake from Carlisle's POV about what happened there would solve all my doubts ;)

Have a great weekend

Author's Response: There is one more chapter that will give a little more information on what has happened with the Cullens, but it will not give a "battle scene" level of detail by any means. Most of the chapter focuses on Jacob, Bella, Leah and Sam. I'm sorry to say, I am unlikely to write an out take from the Cullen's point of view. It's just not my thing, out takes, or writing in a Cullen's POV. Thank you for reviewing, and I hope the next chapter will answer some of your questions.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 10, 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Silence

=O but why did the other Cullens die if that was what wouldnt happen if they split in two groups?and Bella is the only survivor of that family,I dont know how suspicion and a police investigation is going to be avoided; she's filthy rich now (but that economy boost could have also been done in  a less violent way simply with a divorce) and La Push is about to have a huge leap forward...unless Leah kills Bella. Which we all know wont happen, so please dont make Jake kill Leah, I think it already was enouh violence.

Have a nice week

Author's Response: You'll get the answers regarding the Cullens in the next chapter, but I do want to mention this since it may not be covered in detail, or at all. Bella's idea/decision to burn the battle site was a spur of the moment thing. It was not in play when Alice had the vision about a week ago. During the vision, Jasper would have returned, and all the Volturi that had gone to La Push would have stayed away (presumably because they died). And yes, I agree, there has been enough violence. That's all I'm going to say about what's going to happen next. Thank you for leaving a review!

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Intruder

Thank you for updating so quickly! I really enjoy your story. I would love to see more Charlie

Have a great weekend

Author's Response: You're welcome. This fic will update twice a week. I will leave a chapter end note if there is going to be any changes in that schedule to to holidays or anything else that occurs in RL. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and thank you for leaving a review to let me know! I cannot make any promises regarding Charlie's role in this fic. Sorry.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 19, 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Displaced

are you seriously considering to upload,have beta'ed and posted 3 chapters withing Dec26-31?you're the sweetest, and its the though that counts so dont worry when xmas consumes all yur time and you're not able to post chapter 12 before new year hehe

I think Jake's too nice to become emo,so please dont make him think harder about the whole dead baby thing. And I wish Sam gets better and falls for Leah again.

Have a great week

Author's Response: Regarding your question about posting, the answer is: yes. I work a little ahead so that if I hit a bout of writer's block (which I do from time to time) I don't have leave my readers waiting. My beta is also very good with turnaround and we've already exchanged holiday schedules so you need not worry. Whether or not anyone will have time to read during that time is another story... The dead baby thing will be ... er ... dead for a while. As for what will happen with Sam... you will have to wait for the answer to that. Thank you for leaving a review, and see you back here for the next update on Thursday!

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 22, 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Alibi

Great chapter, so sad everything that happened. I like how practical your Jake is, and the directions is thoughs are pointing...I mean, it would be more than fair that the Cullens help the whole situation with a huuge amount of money for the pack and community through Jake. They're good people who dont deserve to struggle so much and the Cullens have way much more than they could possibly need...

Author's Response: It is a sad situation indeed, but would Jake take anything offered by the Cullens? I doubt it. Things would have to be pretty desperate for him, or any of the pack, to do that. Thanks for your review! I'm glad you like my take on Jacob.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 29, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Solitude

Great chapter!really good. Had me LOL a few time, specially at the "Everything was going to shit (<-this sentence particularly). Leah wasn't bitter anymore, Paul was being nice and helpful and Seth was in love with the damn Cullens. I hated being a wolf." Its awfully akward and funny the frustration you feel when everyone aroun you seems to be better and happier and you're still stuck, and then you feel like an ass for feeling that way; but then again, you cant help it. 

Hope you're having a great time, take care and write a lot =)

Author's Response: Oh, it feels so great when a reader just gets exactly what I wanted to say ... exactly right! "It's awfully akward and funny the..." when I read that in your review I just smiled and said, "That's it! That's what I wanted you to think!" The holidays have been great. I hope yours has too. Thanks for the review!


Ten years after the events of Eclipse, Edward meets his true vampire mate; Bella is left desolate. Alice and Jasper take her in with them to help her through her heartbreak. Rated for mature relationship issues.


Banner by the lovely evieeden.

Excerpt from Chapter Two:


"I love you," she protested, sounding hurt and small.

He stepped closer, one hand tentatively extended. "I love you, too. In, in a way."

After dragging one final breath into her lungs, Bella turned. "In a way?" Her arms were wrapped about her torso, her eyes wide and dark and frightened. "What does that mean?"

"It means that — that out of all the things I was afraid of, Bella, I never ever thought I would not be your mate when you changed. But when you awakened, got through the initial adjustments, I could read it in Jasper's mind. We did not share a vampire mate bond."

tear jerker


Categories: Post-Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella
Series: Undeniable: Vampire Mate Bond Series
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes Word count: 54397
[Report This] Published: December 16, 2011 Updated: January 27, 2012

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 28, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: All I Need is Right Here Beside Me

Thank you, you provided a great distraction for a Friday night without my boyfriend (long distance relationships are harder when you dont find a few innocent hobbies to occupy yourself)...I would love to see Edwards POV and the sequel.

The only thing I wished while reading your story is that Bella would have given Edward some hell. Again, she played a bit like the doormat...Ok, Edward wasnt looking for a different mate, but he certainly didnt even try to honor his wedding vows before leaving her for the brat. If it had been me, the emo and the brat would have at least lost a few fingers.....

Author's Response:

Good morning!

I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. I was in a LDR myself, back in the distant past, as my fiancé was stationed around the world.  It is nice to have things to do. :)

Bella...was being Bella. Fighting the inevitability of the mate-bond would be futile. Giving Edward hell over something he had no control over is a waste of effort. If you have read Edward's outtake, you will have seen that he did try to fight this thing. He did, but he couldn't.

It is not in Bella's nature strike back, in general terms. She might be sneaky about things, but not overtly retaliatory.

Thank you so much for reading and for the super shiny rating!





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Hypothesis: Vampires are capable of vertical inheritance.




  1. Finish knocking Jasper up, for the third time. Why? Because a story is not complete without a parity for Jasper.

  2. Knock up Emmett and Rosalie too. Why? Because it’s their way of dealing with the loss of a child.

  3. Rebuild vampire society after the war, including the transition to an egg-laying society and the adoption of eggs that were orphaned by the war.

  4. Move the Cullens back into human civilization and send the kids to middle school, so that they can learn to interact with humans and blend in.

  5. Send Masen to speech therapy with the humans so that he can learn to talk.

  6. Send Jasper back in time, with the aid of his time-traveling twins, to meet his human family and resolve any lingering issues he still has from his convergence.

  7. Accuse Jasper of being sexually attracted to his grandmother and bring up this accusation as many times as possible. Why? Because it’s the new running gag.

  8. Make entire story one hundred percent biologically accurate, despite the vampires.

  9. Tell a bunch of Cullenesque stories and make it funny, because that which is funniest is best.

Nominated for multiple iSparkle Awards!

Nominated for Best Drama/Angst/Hurt/Comfort WIP and Best Supernatural/Fantasy/Horror/Spiritual Sci-Fi WIP in the Emerging Swan Awards!

I have now been nominated for Oldie but Goodie Author in the Emerging Swan Awards!

Categories: Pre-Twilight, Post-Breaking Dawn, Crackfic Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward, Esme, Jasper, Other Character, Rosalie
Series: None
Chapters: 64 Completed: Yes Word count: 237551
[Report This] Published: January 02, 2012 Updated: January 08, 2014

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 02, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 2

Oh my God! Oh my God! Oh my God! Oh my God!!!! you got me jumping up and down and even all around when I read that you nominated me as best reviewer; and as I am at work, I assume it must have been quite a show LOL

Thank you so much!

Author's Response:

You're welcome :) I even had to write a little paragraph on why you are so great to nominate you. I think an award for reviewers is a great idea, so I was more than happy to nominate my best reviewer. But you better bring your A game, because I can still nominate other reviewers to compete with you (insert eveil laugh here).

Btw, did you see the list of nominees yet? You need to put this on your member page so that everyone knows to vote for you :)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed
Date: April 12, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 1

So nice that you finished your first author work! Im so happy for you. Hope everything went well yesterday. Hey, I didnt even remembered the awards; it may sound cheesy but just the nomination made me incredibly happy :) thank you for it. I hope you'd won, still if you didnt your story was the best :)

Have a nice day,


Author's Response:

I didn't win, but that's okay.

The family visit is going great so far. We drove to New York yesterday and did the sight seeing thing. Then today my aunt arrived and we had a big family dinner :)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 27, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 1

Im already here! =) lets see how Carlisle can build the DRV. Im off to sleep,you keep me up real late with your stories but it was worth it

Author's Response:

Yeah, my first review! Personally, I think Carlisle's story is a bit boring (but necessary), which is why I'm switching up the time line. Up next is the first chapter of Jasper's book, which is the most exciting story :)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 23, 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Book 2- Masen- Chapter 4

LOL my God is Allison ugly! LOL sorry, so sorry, couldnt help myself xP Im sure it took a lot of effort, but Im not so sure it was worth it. Dont get me wrong: Im thankful you take the time and effort to continue and nurture this story. If I could suggest I would tell you that sometimes physical descriptions of a character are enough, let the imagination of each one complete the visual. Just this image made all the nice things I was going to say about the chapter go out of my head, and Im guessing you werent aiming for that reaction hehe

Hope you're doing great, have a nice day!

Author's Response:

It's too bad you forgot all the other commets; I would have loved to hear them.

I made pics of all of the kids for a banner just for Masen's story. I'll put it up soon, but I think Allison was probably the biggest surprise. I like to think of her as homely...

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 04, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Book 2- Masen- Chapter 1

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!! please, please, please enjoy this day!

I wish you a year full of health, joy, love, abundance, success and happyness. May this year be a ladder to help you reach all your goals. Don't worry about the card, I'm sure your daughter adores you xD.

You asked not to leave you chocolate, so I had to look for something else that looked yummy to wish you a happy bday...hope you like it ;) LOL


(P.S.: Ever heard about the law of attraction? may be you're so set to dreadful bdays that you, in some subconcious level, cause them -so sorry, probably the last thing you want to hear.)

Author's Response:

Thank you, that was really nice :)

I may have some responsibility for the awful birthdays, but even when I ask for simple stuff I don't get it. This year I asked my daughter to paint me a card and eventually I sat her down with paints and paper and told her no tv until I get a card and I still haven't gotten a card :( Then I asked for everyone to stop using my dinning room chairs as coat racks (and I made it very clear that this is what I was asking for for my birthday) and I bought coat hooks and asked my dad to put them up for the various coats, and the hooks are still sitting in a drawer and the coats are still on my chairs :( On the plus side, I did get a coupon for a free rental from redbox, which I was not expecting and before your message was the best present of the year. Now I just have to deside what I want to rent...

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 24, 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 5

It was one of your shortest chapters to date, still, it was good :) Was this a jump backwards?how long?cause last we read Jasper was trapped in the wormhole and they were living outside the island...

I like Carlisle's chapters, I know you perceive as dull and so you wont write a whole lot into them, but they've the potential to be the most interesting ones. I notice again how Jasper/Alice and their kids are the only ones with a perceptible presence in this chapter (Esme's Carlisle mate and she got a paragraph worth of mention)....why not classify the story as an A&J? it would get you more readers :)

Author's Response:

It's slightly forward in time from the last time we left Carlisle. When Jasper is trapped inside the wormhole, the Cullens are already off of the island in Mannitoba, but I just didn't mention it.

I would write more of Esme, but it's hard for me to get into her head and with the pain of her grief still being so strong, I don't want to be in her head. I think you're write that I could really go into the events in Carlisle's book and make a whole story about it, especially with what happens next. But, I haven't been able to do it, even though I've been thinking about it for over a year. It wasn't until I thought about what's going on with Jasper and Masen that I got inspired enough to write a whole story out of this chunk of time.

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 08, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Book 2- Masen- Chapter 2

Masen has boobs!!! LOL sorry, my inner 12 years old needed to express himself after reading this chapter.

Its been so long! how have you been?

This chapter was nice, kind of a filler, wasnt it? hope that you can continue updating soon.

Take care,


P.D.: loved the bit of quiddicth. I love HP!

Author's Response:

I've been really great, thanks for asking. How have you been?

This chapter was necessary for story progression, because I couldn't start by dumping the kids in a pile of humans and expect no one to get hurt. So I'm leading up to school gradually.

I love HP too! Esme read her boys all of the books :)

The next Gall Stone-versary is coming up soon (July 3rd), so I'm hoping the big hybrid battle will be ready to post by then.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 4

It might be a little late to ask...but how do I vote for your story in the Torch Awards?

Wish you the best luch, and hope you win. Thank you, again, for nominating me =)

Author's Response:

Go to scroll down to story and click on it. Today is the last day to vote.

Your welcome. I was dissapointed to find out that we can't vote on best reviewer, because that category is left up to the judges. But I did submit a wonderful essay on how great you are, so hopefully they will make the right decision :)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 3

Lost me a little bit here...Im sorry to say that I read but didnt quite understand and dont feel like thinking right, as for the science stuff, from now on I'll just cruise and accept whatever you say cause it's your story LOL

Author's Response:

If you ever feel like going back and trying to figure the science out, the following might help.

Do you watch the show The big bang theory? The stuff Eliza says is one of the current popular scientific hypotheses in the world of theoretical physics and is also what Sheldon Copper from the big bang theory works on. I don't buy it, so I had Allison come in and blow it out of the water with something more classically Einsteinian. Basically time is a dimension in space, just like the typical first three dimensions. We can't move around in the dimension of time, but Kair and Kare can. And although our decisions have consequences in the future, those decisions are set in stone and the future and past can't be changed. This is different than how Alice sees the future, because she has a different perspective on time: she's stuck at one point and sees every possibility as it comes and goes. Kair and Kare are free to move to other points, but they don't see the various possibilities, only the winning possibility- what actually happens.

This is important because it means Kair and Kare already know what will happen and when it will happen and can go back in time. But they can only change something if they already had changed it in the past- it's more tautalogical reasoning. Basically I'm setting the rules and limits for how their time travel works. This is probably the most important bit of science in the story, but I fully admit it's difficult stuff and I struggled making sense of it myself when I was writing it.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 31, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 3

Okey, i feel kind of bad now...I've been really really bussy and for unknown reasons I dont get an alert when this story updates. You know I enjoy your writing and your stories; the thing is (as I already wrote in a previous review for messier) you're too biased towards Alice & Jasper, and it can be boring to have so much detail for a couple and not even mention other characters. Unless, of course, you tag it like an Alice/Jasper story, that way you'll have your audience set for you =)

I like Carlisle chapters, but I have the feeling you dont particularly enjoy writing them so you leave them as practically just structure lines. Maybe if you expand the point of view to tell a broader story more people would be interested. Anyway, I still like it hehe hope you're doing great

Have a nice easter,


Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 6

yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!!! LOL!

How cool of you to make a wolf! LOL I was so surprised I ran to show it to my mom (who's visiting and doesnt even speak English,btw), you made me act like a teenager when she sked, -and how do you know it is you? and I just answered/yelled -cause I do! and stormed out LOL she's still laughing too.

But I would like to think I would not be a defenseless wolf, Im pretty sure I would know how to kick some a** xP

Thank you so much, this was the cherry of a really great day

Hope you have a fantastic week,


Author's Response:

Jennifer is the defenseless one- she's pregnant. And Carlisle still considers Nessie defenseless, because she's his first grandchild. Daniela was the warrior in the bunch, included to take care of bussiness if their party was attacked. I'm sure there is a lot more cool fight scenes featuring her...just they all seem to happen when our narrators aren't around- like before the Cullens showed up, Daniela was'll have to tell me just what she was doing.

Tell your mom I said hello and that her daughter makes a great wolf!

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22, 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 6

Kuddos on your nomination!!! Gall's a great story and deserves all the recognition =) you're an excellent writer and I hope you win.

(I tried to vote but the site is a bit confusing :S I couldnt even find where your story is!...I'll try again tomorrow when Im not sleepy)

Author's Response:

Voting closed already. I submitted this chapter the same day the last one got accepted, so that author's note has expired :( Winners will be announced in a few weeks, but because of the delay, I doubt anyone noticed and voted for me...The great tradition of me never winning anything continues.

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 11, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Book 3- Jasper- Chapter 4

nice n short but it made me late to work. hehe

have a nice day

Author's Response:

You to. My brother's arriving today so I'm hoping it will be a very good day. And I just wrote my first, first author paper yesterday, so I have something to celebrate (now I just have to get it revised and accepted).

Thanks for the review! And sorry you didn't win best reviewer, but you won in my book :)

Reviewer: DaSrO Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Book 1- Carlisle- Chapter 7

Jasper Chapter, please!

Happy Anniversary!

How are you? Im fine and happy, I started my master degree last week so Im kind of balancing a lot of things right now, but everything's good.

Hope you have a great day,


P.S.: I love it when you use my name LOL thank you xP

Author's Response:

I'm glad your masters is going well. I hope you don't find out what it means to be a starving student (master's students are the lowest paid and the most overworked of all students), but if you do, I know a great receipe for guacamole made from fruits available in typical aberetums. And the key to doing well in master's classes is not to take too many of them at time' they're more work than regular classes and you need to leave time for your other responsibilities.

Jasper would be my choice too and he is in the lead, so keep your fingers crossed!



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