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Daybreak by kay0913 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 591]
Summary:

Bella Swan thought everything that she has dealt with was real, that she lived in a town where the supernatural exists. One day she wakes up, only to find out that the reality she had belonged to was nothing more than one big elaborate dream.

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No Word count: 72280
[Report This] Published: April 08, 2010 Updated: October 01, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 - Target

Man, the mood they're in they better find someone to kill. Maybe they'll be happier afterwards. I get the feeling it's going to get fubared though, have they forgotten how Bella's dream is coming true? Of course Edward's reaction to the details is over the top. I expect the Guardian car at any moment now. *grin*.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

LOL, I was just researching their cars last night. Don't worry, they'll find someone.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17 - The Hunt

I should have known Rosalie couldn't let it rest! Man, talk about scheming. The fight with the nomads went well at least. Still don't really trust Laurent, but we will see I guess. But I trust Rosalie will at least keep Bella safe for the most part. She may see a side of vampires she hasn't yet, but physically I imagine she'll be fine. Edward's gonna freak on her though. Heh.

Author's Response:

You can bet on that. Edward will be livid. Rosalie has good intentions though.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: October 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19 - Temper

Well I didn't see that coming! It's like some kneejerk reaction for Edward to run. But all this has to be kind of overwhelming for him. I can see both of their pov.

Author's Response:

Thank you. Yes, he is completely overwhelmed by it all.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20 - Travel Plans

That was an interesting point by Jasper, really smart of him to notice that.  I am so glad that Edward isn't leaving, but it looks like the damage has been done in a way.  Bella is definitely not happy right now.  But hey, she gets props for having a spine about it and standing up for herself. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I've responded to a similar review. I initially had Emmett doing the talk with Edward, but I figured I already did that with the part called Unexpected, so I changed it to Jasper. Then as I was thinking of how Jasper should approach Edward and make him see what he was doing, I realized that the two guys were exactly alike when it came to their women. I didn't really see that until I was writing their talk.

Yes, there has been some damage done. I believe Bella is brave and strong, except when her insecurities are involved. So since Edward gave her the real reason why he wanted to leave, and having gone throughb the torture she did even if it was just a dream, it gave her the courage to confront Edward.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22 - Time

Edward's brutal in his teasing with Alice.  hehe  I guess it's his only line of defense against a psychic.  I thought it was funny how everyone disagreed with what he should do next.  I can't help but wonder, what would have happened if Edward had done as Alice had wanted and asked her out immediately? 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Haha. He's also being a typical 17-year-old older brother.

If Edward asked Bella out immediately, she would be pissed, like Jasper said. She would have said no, and she would ignore him for a bit longer. She'll still go out with him eventually, but at this time, all she can think about is him wanting to leave.

 
Waking Up Alone by IssaBissa Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 30]
Summary:

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A short but sweet tale of what might have happened had the wolves waited until Laurent broke the treaty.

"Searing pain flowed through my body as Laurent ripped into my neck. So much for painless. But an odd thing happened, just as the pain started, Laurent threw me to the ground while looking off into the distance with what my pain seared brain could only make out to be shock and fear spread across his face. "


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 7341
[Report This] Published: April 09, 2010 Updated: May 22, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Finding What is Lost

Well I can't help but wonder what the wolves had planned to do with Bella? Were they really going to tear her apart? What about Jacob? I was a little surprised that Bella didn't think anything about Charlie though in the previous chapter, I guess she was trying to deal with one thing at a time? She sure didn't hesitate to speak her mind about what the Cullens did to her - she didn't sugarcoat that at all. I'm trying to mentally picture her as she says that and I can only come up with her being bitter. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for or not.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I have to say, you may have a point about Charlie. I did kind of forget about that part. As far as the wolves go, I did try to work them into this story but they seem to want their own spin off story. The little divas are having issues with being written though. Look for that sometime in the future.

 

As far as Bella being bitter goes, she is a bit. She has been abandoned by all those she has opened herself to. (Remember that this includes Jacob at this point in new moon.) All she has left now is her hullicinations.  I think if you had been put into her place you might be a tad on the bitter side as well.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Meal Interrupted

So the wolves followed her? Or was it just random coincidence they ran into her? It is always fun to play the what if game in Twilight, and the Laurent scene is one that just begs for it. After all, all it takes is a couple of seconds and she would have been on he way to vampireville. I'm definitely interested to see how she handles the Cullens, losing her dad, etc. Thanks for writing!

Author's Response:

Very assute. Yes, the wovles did follow her. I am very glad that you are enjoying the story! You shall see more soon!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Fixing The Broken

Honestly, I would have loved to see Carlisle, Emmett and Jasper beat the crap out of Idiotward verbally and physically, but that's probably because I'm mean like that. Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

Hehehe, I know. I felt the same way, but in the end I decided it is better left ambiguous. Besides, Edward didn't need too much crap beatin out of him. He did a pretty good job of that by himself once he figured out what was going on.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!  Your kind words are always appreicated!! Make sure to look for the Jacob side shot in the future.

 
Breathe by AStarDanced Rated: PG starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 214]
Summary:

Edward leaves Bella one morning to go hunting. When he gets back, why won't she wake?

My years of medical training had never prepared me for the sight of the woman I loved, limp and unconscious. Even my perfect vampiric recall couldn’t compete with the panic fogging my mind.


Categories: New Moon, Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 15083
[Report This] Published: April 12, 2010 Updated: September 02, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1:A-hunting he must go (tiffanyanne3)

It is so true that once you are relieved of the stress, your body is suddenly like this open market for the worst bug around. It always seems to involve a fever too. Completely believable, your premise. I like how Edward was so resistant to leaving her too. It makes sense that his perfect recall can't let go of that time he thought she was dead.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I'm so gratified that you like it. I am always worried that my take on Edward doesn't meld with other readers. I would hate to do damage to a character that so many people love. Thank you!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Flying

I think Edward's brain got fried by Jane or something. He has totally no trust in his own medical training when it comes to Bella, does he? I don't blame him for overreacting-from a vampire standpoint the human body must be so frail and easily susceptible to the slightest virus. He died from the Spanish flu, too. It's a good thing he came back when he did!

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

He's not thinking at this point, just reacting. Edward doesn't deal well with circumstances outside his control - he's certainly not dealing well with this!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 09, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Silence (tiffanyanne3)

If I had to guess, I'd say that Bella has overdosed herself a bit on some cold medicine. With her weight loss, if she took a larger dosage intending to be sure to get to sleep, it would have been more effective than she had intended.

I like seeing Carlisle's POV! He's a third party who can observe their interactions without judgment.

Thanks for the update!

 
Muse by Gwen Cooper 426 Rated: G starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 8]
Summary:

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A one-shot piece, very canon, set any time after Breaking Dawn.  Bella & Edward.  Romance.

 


Categories: Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 2217
[Report This] Published: April 20, 2010 Updated: May 05, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I thought this was lovely. I like the idea of the two of them doing things that they love like that. I love the thought of sharing their learning and passions back to human society. And finally, I love how very much in love they are here without even being in the same room. Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I, too, love Bella & Edward.  This was an idea I could really believe, personally.  Glad you liked it!

Hugs,

Gwen

 
Summary:

Edward’s heart was racing. Everything depended on this moment. Tennis was his passion, his life. Could he win this match? “Hit the ball to his backhand,” someone whispered. That one sentence will change everything irrevocably. For Edward Cullen, life will become more than Game, Set, Match. It will be Game, Set, Love.

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: SMUT - Best of the Best - Edward and Bella
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 73878
[Report This] Published: April 28, 2010 Updated: December 14, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: The After-Party

So I just found your story today.  I can't say I know much about tennis, although I do have a passing knowledge of the pros and popular ones (who aren't necessarily talented but look good on the cover of magazines).  I like the premise, and the fact that Edward's not some manwhore who sleeps with every tennis slut who drops her panties for him. 



Author's Response:

LMAO!! This was like the best review ever :-)) Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Myr xxx

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: The Message

I missed a couple of chapters, but I'm caught up now. They're kind of all acting insane, as in so fucked up they're not normal and I'd be scared of them if I ran across them in RL. Bella in particular - her attacking Alice like that made me think of the crazy people you see on the tv show Cops, the ones you sneer at for being such morons. Of course Edward's not much better, but he hasn't tried to hit anyone yet. All in all, they are all kind of acting like they're 5 year olds with raging hormones to boot. Alice is the only one I'm liking right now. She didn't hold a grudge against PsychoBella, and she gave some darn good advice to boot. I also like Renee's loyalty to Bella, that was kind of nice of her I thought to be all mama bear. Even if it wasn't exactly needed.

Thanks for the update!

 
Lost and Found by nitareality Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 23]
Summary:

Frustrated student Bella has a big problem. She lost BOB and he's being held in the lost and found, in RA Edward's room. Can Alice and Rose help Bella recover BOB without sacrificing her dignity?


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6723
[Report This] Published: May 07, 2010 Updated: May 20, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh lord this brought back memories. Endless frustration when all you want is to get off and you can't because your stupid ass roomie won't ever leave the freaking room. Gah! Loved how they had the plan and stuff. Funny as hell and a fun read all around.

 
Twists of Fate by Morbidmuch Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 28]
Summary:

It had been 7 months. 229 days. On the 230th day, she got the surprise of her lifetime.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 2066
[Report This] Published: May 08, 2010 Updated: May 25, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: ONE-SHOT

I gotta admit I've got a soft spot for stories in which Bella gets to put Jessica in her place when she's acting like a total bitch, instead of just taking it. Love how sweet the reunion was. Starcrossed lovers reunited! Nice oneshot.

 
Summary:

This is the story of Edward who was denied something he wanted. When does love become obsession? When does protector become predator? This is the story of a vampire who had been alone for so long, his one chance taken from a future he never knew he wanted.

A different choice makes all the difference.

 

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Categories: Twilight, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 29377
[Report This] Published: May 16, 2010 Updated: May 17, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Fortress

Just found this story and I gotta say, Edward is making me dizzy with his back and forth ways. At this point I just want to shout at him to make a decision and stick with it, for the love of all that is holy. And seriously, if he's going to blame himself for her head injury then he might as well blame himself for global warming and the bird flu too, while he's at it. He takes self flagellation to another level. I feel bad for Bella, her type of injury will be difficult to handle. It's very disorienting and scary to deal with.

Thanks for writing and sharing!

 
Summary:

As their 40th wedding anniversary approaches, Bella looks back on her life with Edward.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 6374
[Report This] Published: May 28, 2010 Updated: May 28, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I admit I'm a sap.  I cried while reading this.  Edward's marriage proposal totally got to me.  It was cheesy and sweet and probably one of the most perfectly human Edward proposals I've ever read. 

I loved the humanness of this one shot.  No perfection, but beautiful and strong and just wonderful.  Absolutely sucked me in. 

Great job with this!  You really moved me.

 
Summary:

Without Bella's love, I can merely exist. Now that I've lost her, I am bound to wander this earth, alone and unchanging for eternity. - Edward, attempting to be noble, leaves again after the Night of Tears. Now Bella must run after him and piece her broken vampire back together. When they reunite, can they begin to open up to each other and through honest conversations, start to build a stronger relationship? Eclipse/AU.


Categories: Eclipse, AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 168167
[Report This] Published: May 28, 2010 Updated: January 23, 2013


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 04, 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Floating On Clouds

Just found your story. I really love how you tackle the issues between them. It's rare to see a story point out the wrongs both sides committed. Bella for her idiocy regarding Jacob, and Edward for his leaving and constantly making decisions that affected them both. Bella not accepting his gifts always irritated me immensely. For someone who supposedly had all this insight, not understanding his reasons for wanting to give her gifts was ridiculous.

Loving Chicago. It's such a beautiful city. I've been once and just adored it. It was spring and the tulips were blooming, we walked all through the park and looked at the beautiful old buildings, it was fantastic.

Thanks for writing and sharing!

Author's Response:

Hi,

Finally I get a chance to respond. Thanks so much for reading and leaving a review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story so far. There were so many scenes in NM and Eclipse that had me scratching my head and wondering what the hell was wrong with these two for hurting each other like they did.

Chicago is an amazing place to visit and to live. I lived in the suburbs for about 6 months about 15 years ago (during the winter) but have been able to go back a few times since. It's lovely in the Spring and early Summer before it gets too hot. More Chitown in the next chapter.

Thanks again.

TMOT

 
Consumed by Kreative Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 303]
Summary:

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Edward left Bella broken, but not alone. She still had her father, her mother, the pack and Jake. When a vengeful Victoria puts all her efforts into changing that, however, Bella decides to run before more damage could be done. But she soon realizes there is no way she can outrun a superfast vampiress bent on revenge. So...she stops running,... waits... and leaves it all up to fate.


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Alice, Bella, Billy, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Irina, Jacob, Jasper, Kachiri, Kate, Laurent, Renee, Rosalie, Senna, Tanya, Victoria, Zafrina
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Completed: No Word count: 35396
[Report This] Published: May 28, 2010 Updated: August 25, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 6: It was all because of a VAMPIRE

Wow, I can't believe Edward let Bella leave like that.  It just seems like he has no will to fight for what he wants.  I couldn't help but notice how the tables have turned - this time it is Bella walking away from Edward.  I guess he thinks she no longer loves him.  I'm glad that she's gone looking to find out the fate of her mom and Phil.  I can't imagine that they're alive, unless Victoria had someone watching over them to use as leverage, but I doubt that.  Perhaps that has something to do with who the vampire is in Forks though?  Hmm..

Thanks fo the super fast update!  Really appreciate it!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 05, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Running in tandem

Well that took care of Laurent and Riley!  And Bella didn't have to do a thing except light the fire up.  I found it mildly amusing that Edward was so literal in his threat and making good on it.  I'm sure it felt good for him to use some of his tension in such a productive manner.  "Besides punching Jake and setting Victoria on fire, I had never even hurt a fly."  I giggled like crazy at that line. 

Is that hotel for real?  That bathroom, thanks but no thanks.  I wonder if Edward peeked?  *grin* 

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Concentrated and undiluted by human smells

Wow, Bella kicked his suicidal, drama queen ass. What a wake-up call for Edward, I can't imagine a more effective way to shake him out of his mood than that. His head must be reeling. And then to see her so angry at him, well he deserves it. Surely 4 against 2 are very good odds, as long as they don't get away of course. I like how forceful Bella is being right now, not weak and helpless. I think the time spent running from Victoria (and the loss of so many people) really hardened her. It certainly changed her.

Thanks for the update.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Just get on with it

This is super fantastic! I had actually thought of a scenario somewhat like this with a lighter to catch her hair on fire (except mine took place in her house and it was a lighter for the fireplace), but I am not a writer.
So I'm excited to see that you had the same brilliant idea and actually did something with it, unlike me. I like yours better, because you made it where the venom acted like butane or something. I am very curious to see where you go with this. Will Bella be angry and bitter with the way things went down? What has Edward been up to? Boy he's in for a surprise if he goes to Forks anytime soon.

Thanks for writing and sharing! I'm really excited for this story!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: My own personal fireworks show

Excellent! I was worried about Bella losing her memories, but here she is undead and dealing well. I really enjoyed the logic of her thought process. I'm a logical kind of person so it was pleasant to see her like that and not being all impulsive. Really looking forward to more!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Too bad they are only food

I couldn't help but giggle a bit when Bella called Edward an asshole. It was appropriate. I just am amazed at how resourceful she is. So far she's managed to save herself from Victoria, destroyed her, found out her plot, kept from feeding on humans, and let the cavalry know that Edward's in danger. Oh, and she tracked the baddies and overtook them.

Thanks for the update!

 




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