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Beyond Repair by GreatEscape Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 957]
Summary:

EDITED, REVISED, AND IMPROVED!!!

Same great chapters, just better! Everything is the same except all the silly typos and mistakes have been corrected!

When the Volturi arrived in Texas to put a stop to the warring vampire armies, Bella was only able to escape with her life by the skin of her teeth. Her search for a better life was not successful. When the Cullens find her many years later alone and seemingly unconscious can they help her to find the peace she once sought or is she damaged beyond repair?

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AU

Mentions of dark themes and violence.


Categories: AU Characters: Bella
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Series: None
Chapters: 41 Completed: Yes Word count: 159056
[Report This] Published: April 04, 2010 Updated: December 26, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Oh, this made me sad and excited at the same time.  I thought Bella was schizo, the way her brain was going back and forth like that.  Didn't know what to think.  So she stood Mike up, right?  Well, better stood up than drained. 



Author's Response:

Lol Bella is definitely not schizo! And yea she stood up old Newton but some of my other readers were all for him being drained. Lol thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Yeah, I'm confused and I was afraid I was just forgetting important pieces of the story.  Thanks for the AN.  Now I know it's not me at fault, it's YOU!  *grin* 

I love how Rosalie helped out Edward like that.  She's really blossoming now that there is a need for her.  I really like that a lot.  I always felt that in the books, it was a shame there was no outlet for the love she had the potential of giving to those who need it.  Not talking about Emmett, she has more of a caretaker love, like Esme, but different too. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Lol it is me! Bella will keep reveal bits and pieces of her life throughout the story until everything is out in the open. Hopefully I can pull that off, well. Rosalie was always one of my favorite characters in the book and I felt like we should have gotten more from her, so I made that happen here. Thanks for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: June 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Wait, was it supposed to end there with "Alice thought."?  That was weird. 

Poor Bella, she feels hideous with all the scars.  I feel bad for her too.  Women are very much tied to their physical appearance, after all.  Sad but true.  I am curious as to what Carlisle thinks of her?  We've kind of heard from all the "children", and Esme, but Carlisle's been very quiet.  And absent.  Her talent is very useful for Edward, no doubt about that.  It seems like it would be extremely useful for Jasper too, in overwhelming situations.  Of course he'd probably freak. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I don't what happened with the end of the chapter. I just went back and edited it because I definitely didn't put those last few lines in there. Yea Bella has big issues with scars, especially now since she's in a house with three other women who are basically flawless. I'll admit that we won't get a lot of Carlisle in this story but he will make an appearance within the next few chapters. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

I missed a chapter, so I'm just now caught up.  Edward better realize the uphill battle he's got.  It's really a shame that he didn't hear what Bella said to her victim.  It would have cleared up a lot for him, I think.  However, we've got the blind leading the blind here.  Edward doesn't believe he has a soul, and he thinks he's a monster too.  So how can he possibly convince Bella that she doesn't deserve to feel guilt and all that for herself?  Especially when she wants to be punished for her sins?  It's really piquing my curiosity, her supposed mate.  I am beginning to wonder if she was brainwashed into believing he is her mate in some form or fashion.  I also think that Esme has been a bigger help for her than I had realized.  Rosalie seems to have stepped down from her role with Bella, surprisingly.  I thought they would become even closer, but it seems not.  It's nice to see Edward fighting for Bella, doing what he can to help her and get closer to her. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I debated for a long time on whether or not Edward should have heard what Bella said or not. Obviously I went with not but decided to let the readers know. Edward will eventually find out what she says later on in a conversation between them. Convincing Bella she doesn't deserve to feel guilt will be very hard and more than just Edward will be involved. Rosalie makes a return in the next chapter and she definitely hasn't taken a step back from Bella. I wanted the relationship between Bella and Esme to grow because Esme will be just as important in healing Bella as Rosalie, maybe even more important. Bella finds it easier to be around Esme because she doesn't feel threatened by her in any way. Bella is easy around Rosalie because she knows if need be can manipulate Rosalie to her own advantage and their peronalities are very similiar. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Surely Lucas brainwashed Bella, because everything he did was so twisted up it's just... wow.  Poor Bella.  I'm sure Edward must have overheard all that, it must have been so difficult for him.  Rosalie and Bella have so much in common in this fic, it's just sad. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Yes, Bella had quite a time with Lucas unfortunately. Yes Edward heard everything and we'll hear a little bit from him in the next chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 13, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I'm glad that Bella finds Edward's gift to be a good thing.  That really shows how comfortable she is with him.  Poor Edward, that was just torture for him to have to see what she went through.  This is really horrific, what Lucas persuaded her to do. The more I think about it...

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

It was really awful for Edward to have to see what Bella went through, through her memories and I wasn't going to make him at first but in the end I decided it would give him some better understanding. And make for good angst ;) Yea, Lucas was a very evil man. smh. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I'm so glad to see Bella go hunting with Edward!  The events afterwards was sad, I'm glad that she spoke with Rosalie about it.  It's heartbreaking what her brain has been conditioned to, because of all the abuse and brainwashing. This must be difficult for Rosalie, too, dealing with this.  It may also help in some weird way though, because as awful as Rosalie's experience was, it's still not as bad as Bella's.  It kind of puts things into perspective, you know?  Not trying to minimize what Rosalie went through or anything, but there's always something worse.

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I wanted Bella and Rosalie to be able to help each other. Rosalie could help Bella cope and as you said Bella could put things in perspective for Rose.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: July 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Just a small mistake-Edward kissed her forehead, not her cheek earlier.

So why do they have to go home now when their guests won't arrive until tomorrow? Does Edward have to clean his room or something? Lol

I wonder what happened to Bree? It sounds like she genuinely tried her best to protect Bella.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

*hides face in embarrassment* Going to fix that right now! Thanks for pointing it out to me! And yes that's exactly why Edward had to go home. Esme wants her house more than perfect when her guests arrive lol. There's also a little story of what happened to Bree back in chapter nine. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

So I'm thinking Bella knows Laurent?  And not in a good way.  Hopefully Edward doesn't stop Bella in a stupid way that upsets her and makes her run. Bella's story about her dad made me want to cry.  That was just awful.  No wonder she had so many hangups with needing to be loved by that horrible "mate".

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Yep. Bella's father is the source of most all her issues. As for Edward, the next chapter will be up soon and we'll see how he handles the situation! Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I had forgotten all about that conversation with Rosalie. Well, I don't think Bella is going to just forgive and forget. I'd like Laurent to explain to the Denalis what he had done. See how they feel about their newest member. Oh, I know Bella isn't an innocent but I don't think she deserved whatever they did.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

I figured a lot of people would forget especially after reading of the reviews for the chapter before and that's why I added in that little bit so that people could remember. We'll learn all about Bella's past with Laurent in the next chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing!

 
The Blizzard by she_viking Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1401]
Summary:

Bella is walking home during a blizzard and stumbles upon a homeless man on the ground. Despite her better judgment she decides to save him from the cold, and the night turns into something she never expected. Rated NC-17 for language and lemony stuff.

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 127182
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2010 Updated: June 22, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I wasn't sure what to expect when I started reading this, but this really took me unawares.  Much more moving and realistic than I had thought it would be.  I loved the inner monologue because that was so what I would have been thinking.  Edward managed to win me over without a word, too.  Obviously he's suffering from something (PTSD?), I wonder what happened to his wife? 

Thanks for writing and sharing!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 29, 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I've fallen behind bigtime on this story because I forgot to put it on alert, and I should have reviewed every chapter. But I simply couldn't help myself and my need to find out what happened next. So I'll try to leave an extra long review. I knew that Bella would go looking for Edward rgardless of the danger. I may be slightly in love with Angela. She's all sorts of amazing. I love that you didn't have Alice or Rosalie be the bff here. Although your slight reference to a college roomate obsessed with dressing her was hilarious. Edward's past sounds so sad. He doesn't have the temperament for being a soldier. He can't let go of the horrors he sees, he broods too much and he's too much of a thinker. He's not a follower.

I am so glad that he's okay for the most part. Mike as an unexpected and most unwelcome intruder. Gross. Can't believe he thought he could just come back to her like that. I'm so glad Edward isn't brooding about all that they're doing to take care of him. He's the type to not accept help easily.

Thanks for the story! Either you already have this written or you are the fastest writer ever.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Such a strange contradiction Edward is! A former soldier, yet a pacifist. I had kind of expected him to be more bitter than that. I wonder what he plans on doing after he leaves? He seems perfectly normal except for his inability to talk.

Thanks for the update!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I think we all need a hug.  Oh Edward!  Come back!  I don't think Bella would mind the current version of Edward, don't you see you're both? 

This explained a lot of what's going on with Edward.  I mean, yes people who are handicapped can have a typical life with jobs and such, but that's not all that is wrong here.  I'm dying to know if he has any family - parents, sisters/brothers... I wonder if Bella can look for them since she knows his name and has the dogtag?  I thought that with dogtags, they put serial numbers for identification?  I have no idea to be honest.

I'm glad he took the picture.  I must admit I'm worried that Bella's going to go looking for Edward in the worst neighborhoods now and get herself into trouble. 

Thanks for the update!

 
Daybreak by kay0913 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 591]
Summary:

Bella Swan thought everything that she has dealt with was real, that she lived in a town where the supernatural exists. One day she wakes up, only to find out that the reality she had belonged to was nothing more than one big elaborate dream.

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
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Series: None
Chapters: 26 Completed: No Word count: 72280
[Report This] Published: April 07, 2010 Updated: October 01, 2011


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15 - Interrogations

I just read this story from the beginning. And it's definitely different from what I was expecting. I like how Bella was differentiating between the two Edwards because that makes sense to me. Of course he would fight it tooth and nail! But, would Renesmee be born? Because I'm thinking of the chances of the same egg and sperm joining-but hey, this is your story and what with it being the whole dream world and all, it would work too if Renesmee comes into being.

Thanks for sharing with us!

Author's Response:

Part of the plot is Bella's power to somehow know what's going on before she's told and in a way see the future, like her dreams in Breaking Dawn. So, it could be that Renesmee might still happen, but then again, I'm not sure if she'll make an appearance or not.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16 - Target

Man, the mood they're in they better find someone to kill. Maybe they'll be happier afterwards. I get the feeling it's going to get fubared though, have they forgotten how Bella's dream is coming true? Of course Edward's reaction to the details is over the top. I expect the Guardian car at any moment now. *grin*.

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

LOL, I was just researching their cars last night. Don't worry, they'll find someone.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: August 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17 - The Hunt

I should have known Rosalie couldn't let it rest! Man, talk about scheming. The fight with the nomads went well at least. Still don't really trust Laurent, but we will see I guess. But I trust Rosalie will at least keep Bella safe for the most part. She may see a side of vampires she hasn't yet, but physically I imagine she'll be fine. Edward's gonna freak on her though. Heh.

Author's Response:

You can bet on that. Edward will be livid. Rosalie has good intentions though.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: October 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19 - Temper

Well I didn't see that coming! It's like some kneejerk reaction for Edward to run. But all this has to be kind of overwhelming for him. I can see both of their pov.

Author's Response:

Thank you. Yes, he is completely overwhelmed by it all.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: November 04, 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20 - Travel Plans

That was an interesting point by Jasper, really smart of him to notice that.  I am so glad that Edward isn't leaving, but it looks like the damage has been done in a way.  Bella is definitely not happy right now.  But hey, she gets props for having a spine about it and standing up for herself. 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

I've responded to a similar review. I initially had Emmett doing the talk with Edward, but I figured I already did that with the part called Unexpected, so I changed it to Jasper. Then as I was thinking of how Jasper should approach Edward and make him see what he was doing, I realized that the two guys were exactly alike when it came to their women. I didn't really see that until I was writing their talk.

Yes, there has been some damage done. I believe Bella is brave and strong, except when her insecurities are involved. So since Edward gave her the real reason why he wanted to leave, and having gone throughb the torture she did even if it was just a dream, it gave her the courage to confront Edward.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: March 03, 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22 - Time

Edward's brutal in his teasing with Alice.  hehe  I guess it's his only line of defense against a psychic.  I thought it was funny how everyone disagreed with what he should do next.  I can't help but wonder, what would have happened if Edward had done as Alice had wanted and asked her out immediately? 

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Haha. He's also being a typical 17-year-old older brother.

If Edward asked Bella out immediately, she would be pissed, like Jasper said. She would have said no, and she would ignore him for a bit longer. She'll still go out with him eventually, but at this time, all she can think about is him wanting to leave.

 
Waking Up Alone by IssaBissa Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 30]
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A short but sweet tale of what might have happened had the wolves waited until Laurent broke the treaty.

"Searing pain flowed through my body as Laurent ripped into my neck. So much for painless. But an odd thing happened, just as the pain started, Laurent threw me to the ground while looking off into the distance with what my pain seared brain could only make out to be shock and fear spread across his face. "


Categories: New Moon, AU Characters: Bella
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Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 7341
[Report This] Published: April 09, 2010 Updated: May 21, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Finding What is Lost

Well I can't help but wonder what the wolves had planned to do with Bella? Were they really going to tear her apart? What about Jacob? I was a little surprised that Bella didn't think anything about Charlie though in the previous chapter, I guess she was trying to deal with one thing at a time? She sure didn't hesitate to speak her mind about what the Cullens did to her - she didn't sugarcoat that at all. I'm trying to mentally picture her as she says that and I can only come up with her being bitter. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for or not.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I have to say, you may have a point about Charlie. I did kind of forget about that part. As far as the wolves go, I did try to work them into this story but they seem to want their own spin off story. The little divas are having issues with being written though. Look for that sometime in the future.

 

As far as Bella being bitter goes, she is a bit. She has been abandoned by all those she has opened herself to. (Remember that this includes Jacob at this point in new moon.) All she has left now is her hullicinations.  I think if you had been put into her place you might be a tad on the bitter side as well.

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Meal Interrupted

So the wolves followed her? Or was it just random coincidence they ran into her? It is always fun to play the what if game in Twilight, and the Laurent scene is one that just begs for it. After all, all it takes is a couple of seconds and she would have been on he way to vampireville. I'm definitely interested to see how she handles the Cullens, losing her dad, etc. Thanks for writing!

Author's Response:

Very assute. Yes, the wovles did follow her. I am very glad that you are enjoying the story! You shall see more soon!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 21, 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Fixing The Broken

Honestly, I would have loved to see Carlisle, Emmett and Jasper beat the crap out of Idiotward verbally and physically, but that's probably because I'm mean like that. Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

Hehehe, I know. I felt the same way, but in the end I decided it is better left ambiguous. Besides, Edward didn't need too much crap beatin out of him. He did a pretty good job of that by himself once he figured out what was going on.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!!  Your kind words are always appreicated!! Make sure to look for the Jacob side shot in the future.

 
Breathe by AStarDanced Rated: PG starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 214]
Summary:

Edward leaves Bella one morning to go hunting. When he gets back, why won't she wake?

My years of medical training had never prepared me for the sight of the woman I loved, limp and unconscious. Even my perfect vampiric recall couldn’t compete with the panic fogging my mind.


Categories: New Moon, Eclipse Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Edward
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Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 15083
[Report This] Published: April 12, 2010 Updated: September 02, 2010


Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: April 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1:A-hunting he must go (tiffanyanne3)

It is so true that once you are relieved of the stress, your body is suddenly like this open market for the worst bug around. It always seems to involve a fever too. Completely believable, your premise. I like how Edward was so resistant to leaving her too. It makes sense that his perfect recall can't let go of that time he thought she was dead.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I'm so gratified that you like it. I am always worried that my take on Edward doesn't meld with other readers. I would hate to do damage to a character that so many people love. Thank you!

 
Reviewer: Sheeijan Signed
Date: May 02, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Flying

I think Edward's brain got fried by Jane or something. He has totally no trust in his own medical training when it comes to Bella, does he? I don't blame him for overreacting-from a vampire standpoint the human body must be so frail and easily susceptible to the slightest virus. He died from the Spanish flu, too. It's a good thing he came back when he did!

Thanks for the update!

Author's Response:

He's not thinking at this point, just reacting. Edward doesn't deal well with circumstances outside his control - he's certainly not dealing well with this!

 




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