Reviewer: ObsessingOverEdward Signed
December 24, 2008
Chapter 3: Chapter 3
I'm so glad you turned me on to your story. LOVE LOVE LOVE the peninsula and miss it terribly since we moved four years ago. So between your story and mine I'll get my beach fix.
I enjoyed reading the interaction with Edward. I can't imagine how horrifying it would be to be a hormonal teenager and have your father be able to read your every thought. I also loved his protectiveness of her. It just makes him all the more perfect in my book.
I love Jake and Nessie stories, however I've only found a couple of good ones and I can tell that this is going to be a good one. I can't wait to see where you take this story.
Like you said in your review for HOFY it's fun to read something and go "I KNOW WHERE THAT IS!" However, I didn't recognize the cafe, though Sand City has the fabulous Rocky Mountain Chocolate Factory. Mmmmm.
Like that you picked Sand City, it's obscure and most people don't even know that it is there and you described it perfectly.
I lived in Pacific Grove/Carmel when Fort Ord was still an army base and then years later when they finally turned it into CSUMB. Are the old barracks really still there?
Can't wait to see what other places you write about. The next chapter on HOFY will have two of my favorite restaurants on the Peninsula and I'm excited to share them.
Thanks for sharing!
Oh, I'm glad you stopped by too!
Yeah, while your story is more the face of Monterey and the Penisnsula, I chose places that weren't exactly on the map. It's set mostly in Sand City, even some important stuff in Moss Landing. And Fort Ord is still mostly ruins, and less CSUMB. They put in a shopping center recently, right off the highway--which is what I describe in the story.
I'm glad you think they're in character, it's something I work at in fan fiction. I'm excited for this story because its one of my only successful ones. I'm pretty proud of it.
I can't wait for more HOFY and I'm hopin you'll keep coming back here too :)