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Summary: Feature

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This is Edward's side of the bedroom reunion scene in eclipse (Chapter 8: Temper, pages 185-195).

Many thanks to psymom and MarcyJ for very thorough and extremely helpful betas - they're amazing!

As usual, all the regular disclaimers apply: Stephenie Meyer owns all things twilight; no money is being made from this work; and absolutely no copyright infringement is intended. The dialog from eclipse here is copied only for clarity. Thanks to Stephenie for creating such wonderful characters!

One other note: I am a member of team Switzerland - I do not dislike Jacob, so don't be upset with me. Edward, on the other hand, has his own opinions...

In Edward's words...


Categories: Eclipse Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: Totality
Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 7339
[Report This] Published: March 22, 2008 Updated: April 18, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: March 27, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Homecoming

I've read this another place and I still get worked up over it.  Ever think of doing the climatic epilogue from Eclipse?  You know, the whole "I love you.  I want you.  Right now." scene?  Sends shivers down my spine!

Author's Response:

Yup, that one's on the list... :-)  I think the proposal scene will be first though.  :-)
thanks, Mizra!  -blondie

 
Summary: After Twilight, Bella spends the happiest summer of her life with Edward. What did they do? Lots of dating!
Categories: Twilight Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: No Word count: 30793
[Report This] Published: May 08, 2008 Updated: August 28, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 20, 2008 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

I've been reading through this and found a great stopping point for a review.  This is fantastic!  Edward and Bella making a bet about who plans the best date.  Something I'm sure they would have done.

 This was my favorite, however.  Edward actually had trouble doing something.  I admit, however, I've never tried tying a cherry stem into a knot.

 Overall, the plot is good and loose, room for almost anything to happen.  I can't wait to hear about the Cullens going cosmic bowling.  That's the highlight of the evening in my neck of the woods.



Author's Response: Edward + whipped cream would be a delicious dessert!

 
Summary: Post Eclipse. The story of Bella and Edward continues. Originally published on fanfic.net
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Completed: Yes Word count: 65705
[Report This] Published: May 11, 2008 Updated: May 11, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 15, 2008 Title: Chapter 12: Awakening

Okay, I'm forcing myself to stop reading long enough to post a review.

 Of all the 'powers' Bella has had in the fanfics I've read, this is the one I imagined her having.  It firts her completely and is so closely related to how the canon of Twilight has been written, one would think that you and Stephenie were in collab with each other!

Wonderful work, all the way around! 

 
Summary:

Final Authors' Note

Roo: (stunned) So I just finished reading Breaking Dawn…

Marcy: (stunned) Erm…me too…

Roo: Wow. We thought that we had a hilarious joke going on.

Marcy: The worst plot idea imaginable.

Roo: “Pregnant vampire Bella joins the army.”

Marcy: Stephenie Meyer outdid us, crackfic wise.

Roo: She gave us “Pregnant human Bella gets a half-vamp mutant torn from her womb as Edward chews through her placenta before turning into a vampire anddefeating the army.”

Marcy: That makes our story look pretty tame and believable.

Roo: All that silliness that we came up with about Bella being a mind-shield and the Volturi being afraid of her…

Marcy: Who could have forseen that that was actually TRUE?? Unbelievable…

Roo: I was going to have Jake imprint on Jane, thinking that it would be funny and outrageous.

Marcy: Little did we know that Jake would imprint on the infant half-vamp mutant torn from Bella’s womb. Jake gets paired with Edward’s kid?? That takes "outrageous" to a whole new level.

Roo: And so the puppy fell in love with the baby sea monster.

Marcy: Stupid crackbook. Sick maschoistic readers.

Roo: Raises questions about what half-werewolf/shapeshifter, quarter-human, quarter-vampire people would be like. Ew.

Marcy: One of those aliens from “The Host” must have snatched Stephenie Meyer’s body. It’s the only explanation for how bizarre Breaking Dawn was.

Roo: The staff at “Twilighted” said that if someone had submitted Breaking Dawn as a fanfic that they would have put it in the “Alternative Universe” or “Crackfic” sections.

Marcy: Probably “Crackfic.”

Roo: So anyways…there’s not really a point in continuing this story any more now is there?

Marcy: Probably not. We’ve been outcracked.

Roo: So we’re jumping ship.

Marcy: Yep.

Roo: But fret not, faithful readers!! More crack will be coming your way!

Marcy: New realms of weirdness wait in our imagination! Now that NOTHING would surprise us, we know no limits!

Roo: Angela could be a witch!

Marcy: Ben could be the invisible man!

Roo: Mike Newton could be a merman!

Marcy: The Cullens could take Nessie trick-or-treating!

Roo: Hey! That sounds like a GREAT idea for a fic!

Marcy: It will be our next project!

Both: MWA HA HA HA HA!!


Categories: Crackfic Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 16540
[Report This] Published: June 08, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 21, 2008 Title: Chapter 6: The Best Part of the Plan

This is one of the most outrageous stories out there!  You ladies are a-mazin' writing this fiction on crack.

Keeps me occupied for the next 11 days anyway. ;)

 
Brotherhood by blondie, Roo Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 98]
Summary:

The Cullen boys go hunting. Jasper can't stop quoting the Princess Bride, Emmett can't stop quoting Monty Python and the Holy Grail, and Edward, rather put out, responds with Shakespeare. Hilarity ensues! Cowritten with the awesomely funny Roo and the Edward-centric blondie!

Amazingly in canon - believe it or not!


Categories: Eclipse, Crackfic Characters: Edward, Emmett, Jasper
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Completed: Yes Word count: 9835
[Report This] Published: June 12, 2008 Updated: August 04, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: June 19, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Much Ado About Lancelot and Buttercup

Holy Crow, I love the fact that you use Princess Bride quotes here.  That made my day!

Author's Response: As You Wish.... 8-)
blondie

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: June 19, 2008 Title: Chapter 2: Holy Princess Grail, Hamlet!

"I chuckled. Death cannot stop true love. All it can do is delay it for a while, I thought. I leaned back, eyes closed, enjoying the sun as it created rainbows through my eyelids."

Perfect!!!  Now I'd love to see a Princess Bride/Twilight crossover.  Would it be deliciously possible? :)



Author's Response: You're going to have to write that one, Mizra, but I could definitely see it... hahahaha.  Thanks for the reviews!
blondie

 
Summary:

This is a vision that Alice probably didn’t have, but I thought it would be neat if she did. Set after Edward’s return from Alaska after running away from Bella on her first day at school.  Esme's POV.


Categories: Twilight Characters: Alice, Edward, Esme
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3286
[Report This] Published: June 12, 2008 Updated: June 12, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: June 15, 2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'd love to see this in Midnight Sun!  I think it would be a wonderful addition to this pre-Bella state of Edward.  Very tongue-in-cheek, really.  Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much.   I'd love to know more about the pre-Bella Edward too.  I can't wait for Midnight Sun and I hope she addresses it there!  Thanks again!

 
Seducing Ms Swan by Rialle Rated: PG-13 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3032]
Summary:

 

AU Post-New Moon.

Bella never jumped, Alice never had her vision and Edward never came back. Six years later, Bella is struggling to make a new life for herself as a teacher in Rochester, New York. How will she fare when a very familiar student crops up in her classroom? Will she be able to remain professional, or will old ties get in the way?

Edward is convinced that getting Bella back is just a matter of 'persuasion', but Bella isn't prepared to be that cooperative. What's more, she's in the grip of a dark secret which threatens to prevent her from loving ever again.

Bella Swan is slipping under...

ALSO POSTED ON FANFICTION.NET


Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes Word count: 124383
[Report This] Published: June 16, 2008 Updated: July 25, 2010


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: July 07, 2008 Title: Chapter 3: White Walls

Wow, oh Wow!  So, Edward is going to dazzle Ms. Swan into utter submission, eh?  I think it's really a good change in the story that his family gangs up on him to force him to stay.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 18, 2008 Title: Chapter 11: The Truth

HOLY FREAKIN" CROW!!!!!!!!!!!!

 I sure missed a lot since I read this last.  You were only up to chapter 3 or 4.  Now I'm left with this whopper of a cliffhanger.... and I just don't know what to do with myself.  You write brilliantly, with the fervor I love Bella having and the stupid idiocy of Edward's so-called "I left you because I loved you" plan.  It seems to stupid now, not noble at all.

 Did I mention you write brilliantly?  I ABSOLUTELY LOVE that you have an actual honest-to-goodness argument between Bella and Edward.  It's so rare to hear that, the confrontation between the two.

 I loved Breaking Dawn, all the books, but this should be right up there with them.  The New Moon AU book.  I love it!



Author's Response:

Lol, has it really been that long since you last checked in? Wow, that must have been one marathon reading session then :D

So glad you're enjoying it and I'm pleased you agree with me over Edward and Bella's argument. It's about time they did more than just stare at each other with gooey smiles.

Oh my Gosh, thank you! <3

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 11, 2008 Title: Chapter 12: Race Against Time

Wow, oh, wow.  I knew there had to be some way Edward would save her.  She couldn't just die... not now.

 But what about Brady?  And Jake?  As much as it pains me to ask about Jacob, I have to.  I have to know what's going on there.

And will Bella really be alright?  Thislong hiatus really left me pondering... thinking... will Bella and Edward be able to come together again, can he "atone" for what he had done to her.

Thank you for finally updating.  I relished reading every minute of it!

As for a summary, you're right about it no longer being about seduction but rather atoning. What happens when true love, thought to be long gone and dead, is revived?  How does one handle the emotional baggage of having to start over again?  How does one truly forgive the other for their past enough to trust them again?  This is what the story is about: trust, forgiveness and, hopefully, the reviving of true love.



Author's Response:

You always leave such great, thoughtful reviews and I love you for it <3

Aaaaaah Jake. Well, it's the world'sworstkeptsecret that I am a HUGE Jacob fan, so that might give you a hint as to whether he's going to make another guest appearance...

I'm glad you liked the update, thank you very much!

Those are some interesting ideas for the summary, thank you! I'm going to give it more thought tomorrow when I'm not so tired. If I use any of your ideas I'll be sure to credit you. (And give you your 'prize' of a free plot-related question lol).

Have a nice weekend! <3

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: November 18, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Ghosts

I've said it before and I'll say it again: as much as it pains to read any separation on the part of a fandom canon couple, I enjoy how you are taking the time to challenge Bella as a character, to force her to change her perspective and herself in ways she hadn't, and quite maybe had, imagined.

I do hope for a positive resolution. I'm a sap and old-fashioned that way. :)

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: October 12, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: An Ending

I still stick to my guns and say that even if this is a heart-wrenching chapter, it's your choice to take the characters where you want. And I badly want to see a resolution, so I'm sticking with you. Keep going!

 
Summary: Alice throws Bella a surprise bachelorette party in a posh Portland Penthouse, complete with risque games, embarrassing gifts, tequila shots, a stripper named Emmett, and a night out on the town bar-hopping. Hilarity ensues as Bella is more surprised than pleased.
Categories: Post-Eclipse Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Quil, Rosalie, Sam, Seth
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 26272
[Report This] Published: June 28, 2008 Updated: October 22, 2008


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: July 19, 2008 Title: Chapter 3: The Ice Sculpture

OhMyGosh.  In the name of all that is holy, this is wrong on so many levels.  No wonder the Cullens need therapy!

 

Really funny, though.  Actually, VERY funny!

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: July 27, 2008 Title: Chapter 4: A Stripper Named Emmett

Oh, that is a mental picture I REALLY did not want to have.  Dang.

 
Summary:

How it happened. How it began. How it ended and how it was revived. 

This is the story of Esme Cullen. 


Categories: Pre-Twilight Characters: Carlisle, Esme, Other Character
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Completed: No Word count: 29684
[Report This] Published: July 14, 2008 Updated: February 15, 2009


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: July 20, 2008 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I always wondered a little more about Esme's story.  It's so much like Edward and Bella's, what with a human falling in love with a vampire.

And I can imagine Esme being extremely stubborn.  She reminds me of my mother.  And most likely, myself as well.

 Nice job!

 
Summary:

 

Bella Swan spent the first two years of her life in Forks developing a friendship with Jacob Black that finally turned into something more.  As she begins her senior year of high school, a new family moves to town and Bella slowly begins to question the path she thought her life would follow.  Sometimes there is a difference between what you think you need and what you never knew you wanted.  Takes place during the timeframe of New Moon and Eclipse.  J/B at first, but eventually E/B. 

 

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Categories: AU Characters: Bella, Edward, Jacob
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Completed: No Word count: 170230
[Report This] Published: July 16, 2008 Updated: July 19, 2009


Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Shakespeare

Despite your fluff preference, I rather enjoyed a fluffy, heart-pounding moment between these two usual suspects. And.. now... I finally understand why everyone talks about IVO so much. It's so fantastic and refreshing to read something canon, but not canon. Sticks with the same ideas, but runs in a different direction with them.

So, yeah, I'm an IVO fan now, too.  Great work and I look forward to more chapters!

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 03, 2009 Title: Chapter 8: Missing

Whoa. Sam's change sounds so much worse than how I interpreted from the books. I don't know why, but it does.  Great work!

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 12: The Lodge

This is the Bella I can relate with. The Bella that felt she had to play it safe, appeal to others.... but no longer. This is where I give a standing ovation and thank a literary character for being gutsy enough to do what I had never done: be different.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 04, 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Giddy

So this is the infamous "No Edward, I'm drunk" part. I've been wondering when it came up.  I rather like this interpretation a lot (if not more than the original).  It adds more realism to the impossibily unrealistivc story. Great chapter!



Author's Response:

I didn't know that line was "infamous," but I'll take that label anyway. ;)  Teenage drinking in a small town is hard to avoid, so I thought it was pretty realistic.  Glad you did, too.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 16: Acquaintances

No offense taken. I'm not fond of gangsta rap, monster trucks or centaurs either. (Unless the centuar resembles a faun, which is quite alright in my book.)

*squees for Mr. Tumnus*

Either way, I see why people like this. It's intriguing, funny and downright cool. Yes, I said cool.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 17: Friends

Hoo-rah for demeaning Laguna Beach. I would have pointed out the whole entire MTV channel (which no longer has music videos, but reality TV. Dang it.)

Yes for dialogue. It was win-win situation, my friend.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 18: Pumpkins

Oh dear Heavenly Lord! A brooding, scowling, vampire pumpkin? Now I've read everything. That's hilarious!

"I want an Edward pumpkin..." she mumbled softly.

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Hallowed

1) Gooey fluff "awww" moment: Awww, he bought her a new pumpkin!

2) Thank you for making the painfully obvious more outstanding. If I were Bella in Sm's version of Twilight, I'd be acting like your Bella. Talking myself out of it all, trying to not fall head-over-heels in lust with a boy I hardly knew. (Of course, that wouldn't prove fruitful and I would still fall head-over-feet for said boy. Argh.)

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 22: Crushed

Finally! Vamp Edward appears blatantly on the page in black and white. *does her best Kip impression 'YESSSS'*

Oh, and I still have my Mall Madness board game. And a good, worn copy of Mystery Date. Yes, it's a knock-off, but it is still Mystery Date (in 80s form).

 
Reviewer: Mizra Signed
Date: April 06, 2009 Title: Chapter 25: Monster

I'm really having a hard time keeping it together here. Maybe it's because this feels like re-reading Chapter 3 of New Moon all over again. Or maybe it's because it's 1:00 in the morning and I'm still reading.

Whatever the case, I'm an incredibly heartbroken sobbing mess now, thank you very much. But I'll manage. Because this is the single most awesome way to have her declare her love and him reject her that I've read thus far.  I could see it play out in my mind, just like it would as a movie.

I inexplicably love how you have Bella classify herself as a monster for loving Edward, whom thinks he is the ultimate monster. It's an idea I hadn't thought of before, but inherently true, no matter the situation (both in fanfic and canon). We would all feel like this (or I would) if we dropped a secure, stable future for a tumultous, exciting love affair with a "dangerous" man.

I can't send comments and reviews (on the side of near worshipful) enough, so I'll just say thank you, keep my Kleenex box handy and plunder on in the morning.

 




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