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Reviewer: gypsy411 (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2010 08:03 PM · On: Chapter 30

Just started reading it, but couldn't stop until I finished everything available. Amazing.

Reviewer: RockinThatAfroPic (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2010 05:42 PM · On: Chapter 30

this story is absolutely devastating but it is so well written. since i got home from class i haven't been able to stop reading, i can't wait to see what happens next. oh and i love the variety in the music selection you referenced.

Reviewer: lilangel_me (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2010 10:13 AM · On: Chapter 30

Oh my tears, tears, and more tears.  Please update soon, I feel like I'm in emo land waiting.....  I vote for Alice and Edward as teens.  Thanks for being a great writter and sharing this story. 

Reviewer: belachia (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2010 09:05 AM · On: Chapter 30

i'd like to see more of edward & alice as teenagers...should be interesting.

 

wow, these last two chapters really have me antsy to know what happens next....

Reviewer: OperaAngel (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2010 03:57 AM · On: Chapter 30

AWESOME! excuse me while i grab a tissue. i'm absolutely hopeless at reviewing, more the invisible reader type, but this chapter really warranted it. i'm waiting with baited breath (would have said holding my breath, but i can't hold it for that long!) for the next chapter, to see where all the suspense and tears and drama is going, as it really hard to predict - my head says one thing and my heart the other. I also love the fact that so much of this story revolves around the music, showing what a central part of Edward and Bella's (and i suspect your) lives. excellent work so far on the story, and roll on the next chapter ASAP please! also, with regard to outtakes, methinks number 2 :)

Reviewer: shadesofgray (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 04:59 PM · On: Chapter 30

I don't really care about outtakes...I just want you to write the next chapter.  ASAP.  You know, the one where Esme appears and tells Edward where to find Bella and they all live happily ever after.  K, thanks.



Author's Response:

I think this is the best review ever.  I'm hoping to get it up by the end of the week...

Reviewer: team rob (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 30

:)

Reviewer: team rob (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 26

:)

Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 02:59 PM · On: Chapter 30

WHAT will be all over??  i'm on the edge of my couch here ;)

about an outtake??? well..i havent had an opportunity to read the other outtakes yet, so i don't know what you have written so far.  maybe an outtakes from charlie's POV in relation to how he feels about everything that's happned to see things from his side?  just a thought.  you are the creative genious here for this story ;)  

 

lvoe it!

Reviewer: freefelli (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 30

I've been meaning to tell you this for a while, I usally try to avoid 3rd POV fanfics because they're often written in a way that makes it hard to relate to the characters, but I think that the 3rd POV benefits your story, funny enough I think it actually makes it's easier to relate to all your character's emotions and motives. To be completely honest I rarely think about the fact that it's 3rdPOV because you write the story so well, it all flows naturally.

Want to hear something embarassing (for me)? I study medicin, so my mind usually interprets things in an inapproriate way, anyway, I always read your pename as a direct translation of the latin name "saccus lacrimalis" which means tear sac and is the anatomical name for the "casket" that collects the tears from the eyes (which then moves via a ductus to the nose-if your interested). So when I read that your name is taken from a lyric I choked my tea and felt a bit stupid =). 

Love, Felicia

ps. This chapter was great (as usual), really moving and really unnerving.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing and sharing that medical trivia - I need to hang onto that and use it! - and also, for sticking with the story and loving it.  I read a lot of fic, but I've never been able to write often in first person.  I did it once, for a novella, and in flashbacks in another novel, but I generally prefer third.  It's easy to convey emotions and perspective if you approach it in the right way; from your review and others who've said the same, I must be doing just that!

Reviewer: that_lambrini_girl (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 12:04 PM · On: Chapter 30

oh my goodness - I have read so much fanfic & this was the 1st thing that actually made me cry!

I hope our boy get's to her in time.....

xx



Author's Response:

Really?  I'm honoured!  I know there's a few fics that have gotten to me - not too many - but a few.  I seldom cry when writing/editing my own work, but Alice's telling of Edward's suicide, Jessica's funeral and this chapter got to me!  Crazy.

Reviewer: Leenf (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 11:24 AM · On: Chapter 30

omg this is havey, i hope she will survive and that edward finds her.

keep up the great work and post soon

bye bye

Reviewer: freefelli (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 11:23 AM · On: Chapter 29

I've been traveling this week and I heard Sia's-breath me on the radio which made me think of your story, and then when I finaly got home I was so happy to see not one but two updates from you. You must have been working hard, and I really appreciate it because it saved me from all the angst that this chapter's cliffhanger would have meant. However it didn't save me from all the tears I have cried over these characters. This horrible search for Bella stresses me out, I can't imagine anything worse than thinking that you're to late, wanting to turn back time while all the what if's is going thru your mind. It's like torture in it's purest form. And you write it so well.

I know the fear that comes with loving someone who's suicidal, the helplessness, the terror, and I think you have captured it all. It's a difficult topic and I like that you don't simplify things just to make the story more "likeable".

Regarding Jakob, I think that they should have talked long before this because the misunderstanding and guilt has been crushing Bella, but I totally understand that Jakob wasn't ready to face her yet. I like what Bella says in the next chapter about him, it's somehow comforting and hopeful ; "Jake is okay, sad but okay".

I've just realised that I've written a very long review, when all I really wanted to say about this chapter could be summed up with three words: I love it!! Or: beautiful, heartbreaking, amazing!! :)

F



Author's Response:

I know the fear that comes with loving someone who's suicidal, the helplessness, the terror, and I think you have captured it all. It's a difficult topic and I like that you don't simplify things just to make the story more "likeable".

I know what it's like, too...  Been there a couple times.  I've had minor dissent over the course of the story but, most, like you, appreciate that it's realistic, which is ultimately what I need to be.

Breathe Me is definitely in the playlist for this story... such a great song...

 

Reviewer: team rob (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 11:11 AM · On: Chapter 5

:)

Reviewer: Bella_Cullen884 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 11:05 AM · On: Chapter 30

Great chapter! Thanks for the update!

I hope that Bella is found soon. Hopefully the hotel manager where Bella is staying at will call Carlisle and tell him what a wonderful niece he has.

I can't wait to see what happens next! Looking forward to your next update! (You have me on the edge of my seat, wondering what will happen. :) )

(I would like to see Outtake option number three. x) )

Reviewer: Lynnoo (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 10:18 AM · On: Chapter 30

Poor Bella seems so lost and lonely here! My heart aches when I think of how much pain she feels, and how she's beating herself up over this all! 

 

I just hope she realizes that people are looking for her soon. She deserves to be slapped in the face with their love. 

 

I think an outtake of Em and Rose would be interesting. They are such an odd couple but I love them to death!

Reviewer: DrSnuggles (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 09:22 AM · On: Chapter 30

oh which outtake? Geez! 1 or 3...can't decide which right now (will come back for an additional review when i have the answer to that one ;) ) loved the tink and edward moment in the study! it hit home :) and the panic....i feel their panic, even withh being 99.99% sure this is a HEA-story ;) like always mmwwha!

Reviewer: inbetweendayz (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 08:35 AM · On: Chapter 30

i would love an extended version of chapter. thank you for gtting this chapter out so fast it . Poor Bella I know she hates sleeping alone i know i do

Reviewer: MissDarkAngel (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 30

Is this story gonna have its HEA?
Cause it wouldn't surprise me if Edward doesn't get to Bella in time and kills himself out of guilt...
But that's not gonna happen.. Right?

This is the first time I almost cried... And that doesn't happen... ever...
I could really feel Edwards pain, and Alice's love for him...

If you write more of this, I might actually cry...

I don't know which outtake I would like.. I would love the Jasper Alternate though... :D

xxx



Author's Response:

Just for you, I am going to try very hard to get the Jasper done.  <3

How to describe this story's end...  people are healed at the end.

Reviewer: Cullenbabe1231 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 07:18 AM · On: Chapter 30

I can't wait to see what happens next... please tell me Edward gets to Bella in time...

Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 06:34 AM · On: Chapter 30

how can they not be out looking?????????



Author's Response:

Forks+numerous forests=major darkness.  They've checked everywhere they can in 'civilization'.  That's why Charlie's said, "Go home, rest, help search the parks in daylight.  The police will keep looking because they're armed (bears! wolves! ;) ) and we'll go in the morning."

Edward got forcibly sent home by his family.  Of course, none of them can sleep anyway...

Reviewer: Shonla (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 05:28 AM · On: Chapter 30

Omg great chapter. Well I know he'll find her b4 its to late. I want an extended version of the bar scene.

Reviewer: tinaconnor (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 04:30 AM · On: Chapter 30

Please update quickly.  I am hoping that the next chapter will provide some resolution.  You had said you put a lot of time into the next three chapters.  We have two and there must be a reason you mentioned 3.  This story is amazing, but the heartfail is killing me.  I can't imagine you would let Bella commit suicide.  Will the motel owner call Dr. Cullen and thereby alert him to Bella's presence?  E&B need to be reunited.  Why did she throw the phone away?  ARG!



Author's Response:

By the end of 31, things will twist and you'll feel more hopeful about Bella, and Edward.  The full resolution, is in 32.  And yes, I have been telling Bitchella not to do it.  She's stubborn!

(The story is planned for 37+epilogue)

Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 01:41 AM · On: Chapter 30

great chapter....

Reviewer: HopeStreet (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 01:18 AM · On: Chapter 30

My vote is for Edward and Alice.

Stories of visitations creep me  out a little but also make me happy to hear since it always accompanies a sense of wonder and profound happiness for the people I know that it's happened to - kinda like they have a special knowledge - a special sense of something that they glow with - hard to explain in words.

I really thought it was Bella in the accident.  I'm glad she's sleeping first before she does it.  But this is it.  There are no more communications to have.  She's completed all her loose ends.



Author's Response:

I've drawn that visitation sequence from RL incidents...  They are strange and unnerving for those who experience them, but ultimately comforting...

As for Bella...  She's still got a way to communicate, and that will come out chapter 31.

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