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Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 03:00 AM · On: McDreamy, McSteamy, and McCreamy

   Well it's a relief that Trevor is indeed a doctor and not involved with the mob or the FBI.  On the other hand, he is a player and even if he is capable of loving Bella, he'll likely partake in sluts on the side to satisfy his appetite.  Particularly given Bella's lack of experience.  Just like her previous boyfriends did.  

   Smart lady writing it out ahead of time.  That's how I would do it, had I been blessed with any kind of imagination.  Thank God for you, looking forward to the rest of the ride.

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 01:55 AM · On: Sleeping With An Angel

   Edward's reaction to Emmet & Jasper taunting him about the status of Bella's virtue was very amusing.  Edward's lamant about not being her first was poignant.  The play by play of the player's moves from Edward's perspective was very good.  His sudden realization of how Bella must have felt over the years watching him and his parade of hook-ups was priceless.

   Job well done with the SWAT portion of the story.  OMG Trevor got his page prior to the SWAT team, is he some how involved in this situation?  Now I'm wondering if he'll be a worthy adversary perhaps on the FBI's team or an unworthy adversary involved with the bad guys.  Looking forward to finding out...   

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 12:27 AM · On: Femmes Night Out

Awesome chapter!  You go girls.  Trevor sounds interesting.  Thank you....

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:59 PM · On: For The Love Of Esme

Truly a beautiful chapter.  Thanks.

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:09 PM · On: The Angel's Kiss

Thanks.  I think.

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 10:59 PM · On: Puppet Master J

   Must confess, I was tad disappointed to find out Girls Night Out was put off for another chapter.  But after reading both Jasper and Edward's POVs, it's so totally worth it.  My favorite part of Jasper's POV was his take on Sabrina and Kirsta and the whole "hot sister syndrome."  Then his meeting of Dr Alice Brandon and his subsequent thoughts about love.

   I'm so glad Andy is OK because his talks with Edward are so entertaining.  I found myself grinning ear to ear and literraly guffawed when reading Andy's desciption of a pathetic, over the hill, 50 something player.  Seriously, I don't think I've ever guffawed before!  That was just too damn good to let go without mentioning.

  Come to think about it, I forgot to mention one of my favorite parts about the previous chapter was Momma D's comparison of Edward to non-potty trained puppy.  It perfectly complimented Bella's earlier observations and the way she likend Edward's booty call to that of a dog stealing a steak.

   God I love this story.  I regret not reading it sooner...

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 10:48 PM · On: The Inner Sanctum

SWAT/Masen sweatshirt - freakin' hot

Clicking next again!

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 10:18 PM · On: Underneath It All

:)

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 10:05 PM · On: Peeping Toms and Sage Advice

I knew it!   So glad Bella has MamaD to set her straight after all "Girls just wanna have fun!!!"   Ooooh la la, it's going to be great can't wait...

 

PS:  How did I know you may ask?  I have an older brother.  It was great when he pounded the assholes that bothered me.  Totally sucked when I finally got to attended my first real honest to goodness party complete with Kegger only to find my brother and all his buddies in attenance.  No guys would approach me...

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 09:56 PM · On: Moving Ahead and Protective Mama Bears

I love the showdown between Esme and Elizabeth.  I was all prepared to make a "Team Esme" banner but Edward solved my issues regarding who gets the Mother's Day cards.  Great chapter. Thanks. 

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 09:52 PM · On: Rearrangements and Rock Stars

I think costumes can be very liberating.  Thanks!

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 09:29 PM · On: Avoidance and Disappointment

   Yes!!!!  Glad to see you're making that bad boy squirm a bit.  Looking forward to more Kevlar Knight misadventures and La Femme Docs having a night on the town to let off some steam and deflate a few of those egos.  Thank you.... 

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 08:47 PM · On: The Day From Hell

  Looks like we won't have too long to wait for Edward and Bella to finally figure things out.  I was kind of looking forward to seeing Edward squirm a little as he witnesses Bella become a hot commodity.  Nothing wrong with some competition as sort of an atonement for his manwhoring ways.  It's always entertaining when beautiful smart women go out on the town and end up deflating manwhore egos left and right as they sort through all the Mr Wrongs...     

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 08:34 PM · On: Femme Docs and Self Conscious Sluts

  Their little Bella is getting all grown up.  Can't wait until they all see her dolled up for a real night on the town with her Gal Pals.  The only drawback of being surrounded by a posse of Kevlar Gods is that she probably didn't have very many dates during her high school and early college days.  I suspect the guys she knew in school would be aware of her situation and would have been too intimidated to ask her out... 

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 08:24 PM · On: Perfection

Perfect first date!  Next!

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 08:21 PM · On: Prologue/Brotherly Manwhores

    Starting out just a tad bit cliche' with Edward the himbo and Bella the klutz but the premise of the story is very interesting.  Doesn't bother me at all that Bella's a resident at 23.  My sister graduated high school at 17.  I know several brilliant kids that participated in the running start program.  This qualified them to take college level courses their Jr and Sr years so they basically graduated high school with their associate degrees. 

    PS:  Love the title...

Reviewer: Chelle-Lynn (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 06:12 PM · On: The Day From Hell

*dreamy sigh* Yup... that's it.

Reviewer: Chelle-Lynn (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 05:52 PM · On: Femme Docs and Self Conscious Sluts

First of all, just a couple notes about the world of medicine. I get why you made her 23, and it is possible... I know a few people who would graduate from medical school around that time. That being said, just for the record, if she was in a medicine residency (that is, internal medicine), she couldn't go into either surgery or pediatrics... they are completely different residency programs, as is emergency medicine. Furthermore, she would have to do a general residency in internal medicine for 3 years before she could choose a specialty. She would go into a specialty like oncology, cardiology, or infectious disease. The closest she could get to pediatrics at that point is doing a fellowship in adolescent medicine.

That being said, I like your story so far :)

Reviewer: monica1981 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 05:38 PM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

This has to be my favorite summer. I oved hearing Emmetts' POV.

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 05:34 PM · On: Be Careful What You Wish For

Great chapter!  Time for the next!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 03:57 PM · On: Roommates and Baby Steps

Yay for babysteps!  Next!

Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 02:15 PM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

Loved it! Awww Em & Jasper pretty much had known the whole time.

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 02:04 PM · On: Heart to Hearts and Really Bad Timing

Aw!  Gotta click next!!

Reviewer: Burntcore (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 01:31 PM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

Awwww... how a sweet ending... I had always wanted to know how that one party went... I am loving these outtakes.

Reviewer: LisaF29 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:54 AM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

Great chapter! I see that this is the point where the friends are finally noticing the chemistry between these two. At least when Emmett figured it out he didn't beat the crap out of Edward. I could see him doing that. Of course if he had, he probably would have ruined things for the two of them. Can't wait for more!!

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