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Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 06:21 PM · On: Be Careful What You Wish For

   Re Chapter 12 End Notes, that's the one good thing about starting this story late, I know just how long it's going to be.  I'm so enjoying the ride that I'm not to concerned about when the prologue event occurs.  I'm sure it's going to be pivitol when it happens though.

   I'm enjoying the slow burn, makes the citrus that much better.  Sounds like you'll be serving up quite the citrus punch and must confess am looking forward to your delicious lemon/lime conction.

   Bella and the boys - hypocrites much?  I'm glad you addressed that.  Big difference between admiring a fine ass while dancing with someone you just met and kissing a someone in an a dark alley while on a date with another waiting inside the bar.  I'm beginning to feel a little sorry for Trevor, the poor guy doesn't stand a chance.

   I'm looking forward to Bella developing an interesting working relationship with Dr Sellers and some of the other horn dog Attendings too.  Good thing Bella has a lot of experience in dealing with ego driven sex gods.  Perhaps I've mentioned this already; but I do appreciate your evil creation that is McCreamy.  Oh the possibilities he brings to the story are just way too much fun to contimplate.  Wonder how many fans he has?  Perhaps you can PM me at my FanFic Profile PNW Luna to let me know.  I can't be the only one.  As much as we all love Edward, there's always room for more adorkable charactors to love.  Team McCreamy anyone?  Future girls nights are going to be so much more interesting now that they'll have the SWATs and Docs to compare and contrast.  Am looking forward to all their Horn Dog anecdotes and antidotes.

Reviewer: weezieh42 (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:04 PM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

I so love this story thank you for keeping it going.  Hope your daughter is feeling much better this weekend

Reviewer: bloodymaryscot (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:04 PM · On: Femme Docs and Self Conscious Sluts

brillant story.only started reading and am totally hooked.

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 03:11 PM · On: Heart to Hearts and Really Bad Timing

   At the risk of being the Devil's advocate, I think they're all jumping to conclusions about Trevor and wrongfully condemning the poor man.  He was simply admiring some random womans ass while dancing with Bella.  That single incident should not be used to condemn him.  If that were a true measure of ones character then we're all doomed.  First of all, he had only just met Bella; it's not like he was breaking some kind sacred vow.  Second, anyone can look, even happily married and totallly committed couples are allowed.  Evryone will admire and enjoy beauty where ever they find it.  It's the touching part that's a no no.

  High praises to Bella for confronting Edward with his past treatment of her.  Touche' on the whole "Emo Whore" epiphany.  Ouch!  She didn't just deflate his Manwhore Ego, she ruptured it!  As painful as it is to see Edward so tortured, it's the only way to exorcise his Himbo ways.   I have to say he's definitely getting his comeuppance with interest.   Poor, poor, pitiful Edward; his atonement is well under way. 

   Only Emmet could acknowledge a woman's anger/rage as a good thing. 

   Thank you  for another awesome chapter....

Reviewer: AlliYoyo (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 09:24 AM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

I wondered if the City of Angels song was 'Iris'. I love that song.

The scene where Bella decided to learn to play football was great! I can just see that!

Can't wait to read more outtakes!

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 09:00 AM · On: McDreamy, McSteamy, and McCreamy

   Well it's a relief that Trevor is indeed a doctor and not involved with the mob or the FBI.  On the other hand, he is a player and even if he is capable of loving Bella, he'll likely partake in sluts on the side to satisfy his appetite.  Particularly given Bella's lack of experience.  Just like her previous boyfriends did.  

   Smart lady writing it out ahead of time.  That's how I would do it, had I been blessed with any kind of imagination.  Thank God for you, looking forward to the rest of the ride.

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 07:55 AM · On: Sleeping With An Angel

   Edward's reaction to Emmet & Jasper taunting him about the status of Bella's virtue was very amusing.  Edward's lamant about not being her first was poignant.  The play by play of the player's moves from Edward's perspective was very good.  His sudden realization of how Bella must have felt over the years watching him and his parade of hook-ups was priceless.

   Job well done with the SWAT portion of the story.  OMG Trevor got his page prior to the SWAT team, is he some how involved in this situation?  Now I'm wondering if he'll be a worthy adversary perhaps on the FBI's team or an unworthy adversary involved with the bad guys.  Looking forward to finding out...   

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 06:27 AM · On: Femmes Night Out

Awesome chapter!  You go girls.  Trevor sounds interesting.  Thank you....

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 05:59 AM · On: For The Love Of Esme

Truly a beautiful chapter.  Thanks.

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 05:09 AM · On: The Angel's Kiss

Thanks.  I think.

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:59 AM · On: Puppet Master J

   Must confess, I was tad disappointed to find out Girls Night Out was put off for another chapter.  But after reading both Jasper and Edward's POVs, it's so totally worth it.  My favorite part of Jasper's POV was his take on Sabrina and Kirsta and the whole "hot sister syndrome."  Then his meeting of Dr Alice Brandon and his subsequent thoughts about love.

   I'm so glad Andy is OK because his talks with Edward are so entertaining.  I found myself grinning ear to ear and literraly guffawed when reading Andy's desciption of a pathetic, over the hill, 50 something player.  Seriously, I don't think I've ever guffawed before!  That was just too damn good to let go without mentioning.

  Come to think about it, I forgot to mention one of my favorite parts about the previous chapter was Momma D's comparison of Edward to non-potty trained puppy.  It perfectly complimented Bella's earlier observations and the way she likend Edward's booty call to that of a dog stealing a steak.

   God I love this story.  I regret not reading it sooner...

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:48 AM · On: The Inner Sanctum

SWAT/Masen sweatshirt - freakin' hot

Clicking next again!

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:18 AM · On: Underneath It All


Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 04:05 AM · On: Peeping Toms and Sage Advice

I knew it!   So glad Bella has MamaD to set her straight after all "Girls just wanna have fun!!!"   Ooooh la la, it's going to be great can't wait...


PS:  How did I know you may ask?  I have an older brother.  It was great when he pounded the assholes that bothered me.  Totally sucked when I finally got to attended my first real honest to goodness party complete with Kegger only to find my brother and all his buddies in attenance.  No guys would approach me...

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 03:56 AM · On: Moving Ahead and Protective Mama Bears

I love the showdown between Esme and Elizabeth.  I was all prepared to make a "Team Esme" banner but Edward solved my issues regarding who gets the Mother's Day cards.  Great chapter. Thanks. 

Reviewer: 23aether (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 03:52 AM · On: Rearrangements and Rock Stars

I think costumes can be very liberating.  Thanks!

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 03:29 AM · On: Avoidance and Disappointment

   Yes!!!!  Glad to see you're making that bad boy squirm a bit.  Looking forward to more Kevlar Knight misadventures and La Femme Docs having a night on the town to let off some steam and deflate a few of those egos.  Thank you.... 

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 02:47 AM · On: The Day From Hell

  Looks like we won't have too long to wait for Edward and Bella to finally figure things out.  I was kind of looking forward to seeing Edward squirm a little as he witnesses Bella become a hot commodity.  Nothing wrong with some competition as sort of an atonement for his manwhoring ways.  It's always entertaining when beautiful smart women go out on the town and end up deflating manwhore egos left and right as they sort through all the Mr Wrongs...     

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 02:34 AM · On: Femme Docs and Self Conscious Sluts

  Their little Bella is getting all grown up.  Can't wait until they all see her dolled up for a real night on the town with her Gal Pals.  The only drawback of being surrounded by a posse of Kevlar Gods is that she probably didn't have very many dates during her high school and early college days.  I suspect the guys she knew in school would be aware of her situation and would have been too intimidated to ask her out... 

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 02:24 AM · On: Perfection

Perfect first date!  Next!

Reviewer: Bella Luna (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 02:21 AM · On: Prologue/Brotherly Manwhores

    Starting out just a tad bit cliche' with Edward the himbo and Bella the klutz but the premise of the story is very interesting.  Doesn't bother me at all that Bella's a resident at 23.  My sister graduated high school at 17.  I know several brilliant kids that participated in the running start program.  This qualified them to take college level courses their Jr and Sr years so they basically graduated high school with their associate degrees. 

    PS:  Love the title...

Reviewer: Chelle-Lynn (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2010 12:12 AM · On: The Day From Hell

*dreamy sigh* Yup... that's it.

Reviewer: Chelle-Lynn (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:52 PM · On: Femme Docs and Self Conscious Sluts

First of all, just a couple notes about the world of medicine. I get why you made her 23, and it is possible... I know a few people who would graduate from medical school around that time. That being said, just for the record, if she was in a medicine residency (that is, internal medicine), she couldn't go into either surgery or pediatrics... they are completely different residency programs, as is emergency medicine. Furthermore, she would have to do a general residency in internal medicine for 3 years before she could choose a specialty. She would go into a specialty like oncology, cardiology, or infectious disease. The closest she could get to pediatrics at that point is doing a fellowship in adolescent medicine.

That being said, I like your story so far :)

Reviewer: monica1981 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:38 PM · On: Outtake: The Fifth Summer, June 2006

This has to be my favorite summer. I oved hearing Emmetts' POV.

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2010 11:34 PM · On: Be Careful What You Wish For

Great chapter!  Time for the next!

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