I have to tell you this is the first fic in a LONG time that has caught my interest. You write beautifully and I'm amazed this is your first piece outside of school. I love the detail you've put into this story. most of the time I run across promising plots but the author seems to rush things or sidestep the fleshing out of the characters and environment so they can jump into the meat. Thank you for painting a solid foundation. It's nice to see a Bella that picks up on the subtle signs that the Cullen's aren't "normal" unlike the more commonplace Bella who seems to miss just about everything in front of her face. This is the sort of thing that keeps me coming back. I can't wait to read more of your work! Thank you for writing. ;)

Author's Response:

First, I would like to thank you for taking the time to write a review.  Reviews like yours help keep the direction and tone of a story from falling to the wayside. 

Second, I am utterly flabbergasted that you enjoyed it so thoroughly.  I am astonished that anyone is even likes my writing.  I have never been particularly proficient at creative writing, so this is a complete boon for me. 

Third, I am now terrified of disappointing everyone who has expressed interest.  I am frightened this will become a complete failure after so many have expressed that they enjoyed it, but I am going to do my best to prevent that from happening.  I had planned to post a chapter a week; that might not be possible as I want substance over timeliness.  It’s not worth posting a chapter if I’m not proud to do so.

I cannot express how gob smacked I am that people found this story appealing, let alone have marked it as a favorite.  I just love that people have read it.

Thank you so much for your kind words.  They really mean the world to me.  I never realized how important a review was until I posted this first chapter.  I had been having problems with the chapter I am currently working on, but your review has spurred me to “get my butt in gear” and revisit it.  It is really rewarding to receive such a meticulous appraisal.

Thank you, again.

 

 

interesting....hope you update soon

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  I hope that I don't disappoint as time goes on!

This is an excellent first chapter.  The descriptive language is vivid, the Cullens are familiar but new through Bella's eyes, and there's that mystery about the discrepancy in Bella's age...very intriguing.  I am looking forward to reading more!