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Reviewer: chris44 (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2010 12:08 AM · On: Chapter 1

That made me wet!

Reviewer: chris44 (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2010 10:30 AM · On: Chapter 1

WOW!!

Reviewer: ttcub (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2010 06:14 PM · On: Chapter 1

Wow very hot, and dripping wet there. I need to go and stand outside in the frezzing cold to cool off. Glad there is no snow yet are I would melt it LOL.

Reviewer: Stine (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2009 11:52 PM · On: Chapter 1

I liked this story, good job! :)

Reviewer: glitteratiglue (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 04:18 PM · On: Chapter 1

Gorgeously hot and sweet x

Reviewer: Snowball Sniper (Signed) · Date: September 18, 2009 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

OH I love this scene. I got my smutty fill on this one, even though I liked the other version too. They are both sexy. But this one more so. >)

Reviewer: cherforty (Signed) · Date: August 18, 2009 05:26 AM · On: Chapter 1

I loved that . Beside being well written it filled in what was was missing and of course couldn't have been written in 'Breaking Dawn'.

Reviewer: georgiagirl (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 11:07 AM · On: Chapter 1

i liked it, but wish it was longer, i hate saying that to people cause really who am i to be a critic when i havent wrote anything at all.... i want to, but thats another train for another day, i just felt like the lemon scenes after bellas change should carry them thru the night, not just a human moment, so i wanted them to start again.....maybe i will try to write that. i dunno. anyways, i was really good, i like you made edward get rougher, and the language is cool too, i've always thought there should be more cursing, especially with emmett. anyways, great lemon!

Reviewer: folm (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 1

I enjoyed seeing a different, less restarined & more desperate, side of Edward! I thought it was cute how he paused to express his forever love amidst all the dirty talk.

Reviewer: justafan (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 05:38 AM · On: Chapter 1

This  is great. I always love to see the different perspectives on scenes from the book that we can only guess what happened or what was said. Good job.

Reviewer: HeavenDust (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 07:53 PM · On: Chapter 1

That was fuckhot... this is what SM should've written, though a lot of little girls wouldn't be able to read the books otherwise. I always have a soft spot for Dominant Edward, so yes... this story pushed all the right buttons. The desperation, the frenzy, the need... all there. Very nicely done too. :) Thanks for writing this!

Reviewer: singingkat (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 06:39 PM · On: Chapter 1

I did really enjoy this...demanding but still in character Edward is very realistic. Good job :)

Reviewer: Strider (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 04:31 PM · On: Chapter 1

That was very sexy.  I like it when Edward gets all dark and rough.  I still can't imagine either of them saying "fuck," but sometimes no other word will do!

Reviewer: agiismsxx (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 01:45 PM · On: Chapter 1

:D

Now THAT's what should've been in Breaking Dawn.

I think you should write to SM and bombard her with copies of this one-shot.

PLEASEEEE!!! Maybe she'll rerelease the book :D Wouldn't that be something?

Reviewer: Mels78 (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 01:11 PM · On: Chapter 1

Good.  Liked the way you handled the scene and not too out of character. I liked it.  

Reviewer: SophieHarold (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this for several reasons. First, it's entirely within canon, which is the only thing I can wrap my brain around. But secondly, and far more importantly, the writing is extremely real from Bella's perspective.  Her voice is well written. She's new to her body in a sense, and that comes through. The fact that her new body changes the very nature of their relationship and how full it can be makes the story really interesting.  The fact that you wrote Edward as still hanging on to the need to be gentle as something that she would want and that is standard or expected is also really compelling.  SM left that entirely to the imagination even though it was central to the entire plot.  I'd love to see additional chapters. 

Reviewer: SurfNSwim (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

Demandward. Hot.  So very very hot. 

 

 

Nothing quite like lemony goodness!

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 11:29 AM · On: Chapter 1

great job

Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 09:44 AM · On: Chapter 1

Nice job. Thanks for writing this for us!

Reviewer: bethc_88 (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 08:42 AM · On: Chapter 1

Wow. Great stuff... thanks for sharing this with us!

Reviewer: cherry (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 1

ohhhh,,, that was hot. SO HOT.

Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 08:24 AM · On: Chapter 1

That was fabulous! Thank you! You just made my quiet afternoon a lot better. : )

Joan

Reviewer: worth_it (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 08:19 AM · On: Chapter 1

Ohhhhhhh, I like impulsive Edward. I like him a LOT.

XXjXX

Reviewer: onyxx0028 (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 08:15 AM · On: Chapter 1

Awesome!

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