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Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
Each and every chapter just gets better and better. I must take a moment an agree with what one of your other reviewers has said...you need to (if you so want) to work on getting some of your work published. I, for one, would be first in line to purchase it. YOur writing pulls me in and envelops me completely in a different world.
I adore the Alice you have created. Although we haven't seen much of her I believe you have pulled the best parts of the Alice that SM created and if possible, made her even better.
The way you write is so real, convincing. I feel as if I'm in the room with them. The fear Bella felt when stepping off the elevator and seeing/recognizing Carlisle. The pain of trying to rush down the steps. The fear and uncertainity of Julia's fate...it's all as if it were happening in front of me. A live show instead of words on a page.
I so look forward to your next chapter. Thank you, again and again for writing and posting this.
Author's Response: I'm so honored. I love to write it's my passion. Having readers saying such kind things like this really does make me smile like you wouldn't believe. I wish I knew how to thank you enough for the review you just submitted, but you have rendered me speechless. Thank you, for making my day.
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:39 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
I love Alice
Author's Response: Thank you, :)
Reviewer: Aille (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:38 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
Alice was great. I bet she wanted to ask a million more questions than she did.
LOL - Oh that's priceless, Carlisle is the doctor that Bella's going to see. He's going to try and drag the whole story out of Jasper.
Author's Response: That's why Alice disappeared, anything she felt intrusive about asking, she asked Jasper. You gotta love Carlisle :)
Thank you :)
Reviewer: lizandzackfan (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:29 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
Loved it.
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: angelsmg (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:27 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
great so far =]
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: SurfNSwim (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:20 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
Honestly, I'm in complete awe. This is an incredbile story with an original plot and character development I have yet to see paralled here on Twiighted. I can't wait to keep up wth this story and see how it all plays out.
In all seriousness, you should consider writing as more than just a hobby. You have a remarkable talent for the written word and capturing a scene so the audience feels as if they are right alongside the characters. Your use of imagery and dialogue rivals some of my favorite authors. So, I cannot wait to keep up with the story. I am more than enjoying each and every chapter.
The way in which you have introduced characters is exquisite. I'm enjoying Bella's conflict in regards to trust and her worried nature. The klutziness is phenominal - truly using the bare bones of SM's version of Bella and making her your own.
Jasper's character - is extraordinary. You have captured his overwhelming need to protect Bella and be sensitive to her emotions, without using obvious phrasing. I am truly impressed with the development of his character.
In regards to Alice, again - you've grabbed her essence, but still made her your own. Her spunky, charismatic nature comes through beautifully even in pur brief interaction with her.
I can't wait for Edward! But, I'll be patient in waiting for him to arrive, as you introduce characters at perfect times.
Since this is one of the single, longest reviews I have left, I will end this here. I can't wait to see where everything will end up.
Keep on truckin' girl! You're awesome!
Anxiously waiting,
Lara
Author's Response: I don't even know where to start thanking you for this amazing review.
Humbly, all I can say is Thank you so very, very much.
Reviewer: Edwardia Maven (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:12 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Streets
This is a really thoughtful story, empathetic and insightful.
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: btomasko (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 03:03 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
Thank you, congratulations, and keep going!
I love stories like this that are just that; stories. You've got a wonderful sense of storytelling that covers all the bases and isn't at all predictable. i could give you a bunch of fluffy compliments, but that wouldn't be really sincere of me. I will tell you though, that this is one of only a few stories that really leaves a mark with me, and I thoroughly look forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you.
Reviewer: ColfaxBella (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 02:44 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
This is beautifully written, incredibly creative and very unique. I'm looking forward to seeing how you develop this. Thank you for writing it.
Author's Response: Thank you, for both the compliments and the review :)
Reviewer: shereelouise60 (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
can't wait for the next chapter
Author's Response: Soon I promise :)
Reviewer: instantkarmagirl (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 02:27 PM · On: Chapter 7: A Strange New friend
This is an extremely interesting story, and well told. I look forward to more and wish you luck in the writing of it.
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: kaystu (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2009 09:59 PM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
i just started reading this story, and i love it so much already, your writing is so beautiful and more than once and brought tears to my eyes. I love the characters thus far, and im seriously rooting for jasper and bella together, i just absolutely love them and think this is a GREAT jxb story. Keep it up and i cannot wait for your next update, xox
Author's Response: Thank You very much :) It has been such an experience writing this. it's been difficult at times, but I have loved every minute of it :)
Reviewer: Sunsquash (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
I love your story, and cant wait till the next installment. I wonder how Edward will tie into this... will he? I love how you captured Jasper's character, and Bella's also. Keep up the super work! :)
Author's Response: Thank You :) Edward and the others will all tie into this.
Reviewer: ratqueen (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2009 11:03 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
this is wonderful
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: Aille (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 01:53 PM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
I'm so glad that Jasper isn't giving up on her and making her go to the doctor. I love this, and look forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: ClumsyHippy (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 10:43 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Ohhhh! The suspense is killing me!!!
Wonderful chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: little frog (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 08:03 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Awwww Jazz is so sweet!
Author's Response: :) Thank You
Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 07:47 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Oh! I didn't want this chapter to end! I love it when this story updates!!!! We get to meet another new character next chapter and I hope pretty soon we'll meet Alice. Hmm...Alice is Jasper's best friend. Your're doing a fantastic job setting the stage for this, showing the differences. I just love you to bits for writing this!
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: iced blood (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 06:22 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
i'm glad that jasper is helping bella... even though she is making it slightly difficult for him.. but this is a really good story and i can't wait to read more! =]
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: Emmeline Glass (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 05:03 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
it's not slow at all--i love it!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: lmbrtvll (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 04:44 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
I was so excited to see this update! Great chapter, Jasper is soooo sweet! I cannot wait to see what happens next!!!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Reviewer: Chrisstars1 (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 03:37 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Slow my ass!!! I love your story!
Author's Response: Thank You :)
Reviewer: beth cullen (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2009 01:15 AM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Oh, this was just great and I've missed you!!
I love how excited she is over the bath. You write her in this circumstance so well. So next chapter we meet Carlisle? This sounds promising...
Thanks for the update. Just what I wanted to wake up to! :)
Author's Response: Thank you :)
It's funny but all I could think about when I was visualizing her pain is a hot bath, and how it would wase the muscles, lol. Off to see uncle Carlisle, I should be getting another chapter into the beta this week :)
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: August 18, 2009 11:00 PM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
Is it uncle Eddie?
Author's Response: *grin* Thank You
Reviewer: AthenianPostbox (Signed) · Date: August 18, 2009 09:14 PM · On: Chapter 6: The House Behind the Trees
This is fantastic.
Author's Response: Thank You :)
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