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Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 07:11 AM · On: Unforgiven

love it!

Reviewer: tremington (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:59 AM · On: Trembling

AHH! Just had to leave us there didn't ya. Please post again soon! I really love your version of the story.

Reviewer: redvampee (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:47 AM · On: Trembling

OMG!!!  More please!!!  Already loving this storyline.  Loved this chapter and poor bitter Edward in that comment that truly deserved the slap and definitely the asshole remark.  Loved to read that Bella would be nice and fashionable now.  With how things turned out in this AU it makes sense that would be the case (slightly OOC)...yay, another shopping buddy for Alice and she can fit in more than ever with Rose hopefully.  Edward should have left her, hehehe...perhaps we can see more girls having the boys rapped around their fingers.

Reviewer: susiefaye02 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:38 AM · On: Trembling

OMGoodness!!  LOVE IT!!!

Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:36 AM · On: Unforgiven

I love it!!! I am so looking forward to the next chapter. Poor Edward, to be so perfect, how is it that he always sticks his foot in his mouth. Post again soon!!

Reviewer: nautical (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:32 AM · On: Trembling

This was his response?  Oy.  I hate it and love it at the same time.  On one hand, I am surprised that he wasn't overcome with love for Bella, but I appreciate that he was angry that his original plan had failed (though I would never want him to take that out on Bella).  The line about her just wanting immortality just broke my heart---but in a wonderfully angsty way. 

I can't wait to see how Emmett is going to respond to all of this.



Author's Response:

OMG do you love Emmett as much as I do... what a monkey goofball... I would kiss him if he existed in real life (post hot steamy Edward make-out session obv! Watch Bells... lol)

Air

xox

Reviewer: tremington (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:26 AM · On: Immortal

Great chapter... I liked hearing from Alice's POV.

Reviewer: Esquire (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 06:11 AM · On: Trembling

Man, this is a brutal place to give us a cliffie! leaving Edward with a stiffie!  I'm psyched that Bells slapped him - she should have kicked him in his granite nuts with her high heels!! He's beeing a huge wanker, even by Edward standards!!! >:<

PLEASE OH PLEASE WITH EDWARD ON TOP - update SOON! and make it a 20K chapter!!!!  :)

Reviewer: katieam1 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:45 AM · On: Trembling

I can not waite to see what the next chapter brings!

Reviewer: jst4fun (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:18 AM · On: Trembling

Just started reading yourstory today.  You are an excellent writer!  This is  a great chapter and I am looking forward to reading more!

Reviewer: stb551 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:15 AM · On: Trembling

Oooohhh, now it's getting good!  Can't wait to see "what now"! 

Reviewer: rachaelprincess (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:05 AM · On: Trembling

I'm just jumping into your story.  Tell me - do you have this outline in your head??  Do you know exactly where you're going - or are you basing a lot of it on reviews and each chapter? 

I'm so glad they finally meet - though definitely not as sweet as I had hoped :)  Hope they get to some extensive dialogue soon...



Author's Response:

If you could spend 30 seconds in my head - in addition to being completely horrified - you would understand that I have more than any human should ever try and contain in one head.  Sometimes I remember it all, sometimes I don't.  But I refuse to "jot down ideas" for future chapters out of fear it will make me work within those confines when I finally get there and the chapter will come out forced and insincere...

With that being said I absolutely have a basic plot outline that I am following, however I will be the first to tell you that something "happened" in a later chapter that occurred 110% NOT the way I wanted it to.  But it was funny, as I wrote I couldn't "force" these bloody people to do what I wanted.  So I just let go and let them do what they wanted... which worked out quite... er... nicely.... you will see...

Air

xox

Reviewer: MissAmi (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:05 AM · On: Trembling

What now? I need to know!!!!

Reviewer: Shannon Carr (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 04:37 AM · On: Trembling

Wow.  That sure was intense.  Not what I expected.  Shock, trauma, angst, guilt, elation, confusion, yes.  But I didn't know what to do with the rage...I think I expected more relief.

Is it just because things are so out of his control?

Well-written, nonetheless.  And--as a writer--I know that we can't please everyone all the time.  Please don't be offended.  I'm still HOOKED on the story and craving the next update.  It's just different than I was expecting...and you're right (A/N) everyone had to have SERIOUS expectations about the initial meeting.  So go on and totally ignore this if it bothers you.  :)



Author's Response:

Nothing bothers me *grins uncontrollably* trust me, I LOVE this review and all others that give me something to work with.  Also I thoroughly enjoy the fact that the rage was a surprise to you.  Although it seems slighly OOC I think that really its not.  These characters are both desperately in love with each other, convinced in their own ways that the other has moved on and they are not what the other wants, and of course they were caught completely off guard.

That being said I based his "comment" about immortality on a scene in Eclipse when E & B are explaining their sides for marriage.... Edward expresses a concern that perhaps she wanted the immortality more than she wanted him.  Since this is a post-NM plot this SM scene never happened, but it did give us a bit more insight into Edwards true self-loathing mind.

SOOOO not offended in any way, I love you! ha

Air

xox

Reviewer: tremington (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 04:34 AM · On: Alone

Very excited to see what is on the other side. Great story so far.

Reviewer: jessnab (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 04:23 AM · On: Trembling

Crazy long chapter , thanks! Why is he so pissed off ? HE left and she is the calm one ? Interesting.... maybe they should get the sexual tension out of the way and then workout the emo baggage ;) And maybe Bella could be aggressor , just throwing it out there. 



Author's Response:

... shhhh... you have to wait several chapters for that.... but its already written ;)

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 03:55 AM · On: Trembling

WOW! Intense reunion there :)
Can't wait to see what happens next!
GReat chapter :)

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 03:25 AM · On: Immortal

Hmmm... very interesting. Glad Alice can finally see Bells :)
great story so far :)

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 02:47 AM · On: Unforgiven

Just found this; Interested in seeing where you take it.

Reviewer: Steph29 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 02:43 AM · On: Unforgiven

Just came across this whilst in work (suppose to be working) and am completely hooked!  OMG what a dick Edward was towards Bella, he deserved that slap.

I neeeeed more!!!!  Loving this so much.

Reviewer: trutwilightfantasy (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 02:36 AM · On: Trembling

Well he couldn't have handled that any better could he? Hehe. I thought Bella was gonna go a screeching banshe there for a minute, atleast one of them was able to control themselves.

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 02:14 AM · On: Trembling

WTF? I was holding my breath through most of the chapter - good thing I read fast.  I had to laugh when I finished - typical Dickward reaction.  Bella was superb!  What now indeed?  You are the only one that holds the answer to that question.  Please let us know soon.

Reviewer: DevineZ (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 01:39 AM · On: Trembling

WOW just read all four chapters.. this is GOOD.

Reviewer: krisandrob (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 01:26 AM · On: Trembling

Why did he have to go an be an ass to her!

Reviewer: Steelerfan (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 01:05 AM · On: Trembling

You can't leave us hanging like that and dickward returns and hope stays for awhile. Hope you update soon

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