You did a wonderful job (yet again). You can continue to bounce up and down like Alice would after Bella accepted an invitation to go shopping.

I loved how you made baby Swan-Cullen have his copper hair and her chocolate doe eyes (their most identifiable characteristics--clumsiness doesn't count quite yet). I also loved how you had Edward call her little love. Great idea having Charlie listen in--now he knows Edward's intentions were honorable.

Author's Response:

Eavesdropping is usually not of the good, but, in this case, it was more effective than any conversation that Charlie and Edward could have had.

Little Love.  ::: sigh ::: Part of that came from his pet name for Bella, and part came from the fact that I call my son that!  Still, I thought it fit with the story.

Thanks for reviewing!

 

Sometimes, when you're feeling really low, somebody does something that restores your faith in human nature. Sometimes, somebody elses faith in happy endings gives you strength and hope for the future. Sometimes, something as silly as a fanfic makes tears spring to your eyes.

To say I was moved by your writing would be a harsh misinterpretation of my own feelings. You have a beautiful way with written words. The emotions you are able to conjure up with your writing compares to nothing I have ever experienced before. Each moment that plays out in the story is so real, and so raw, it hurts. I can't say that this last chapter was a happy one, but it most certainly was a moving one.

You are an incredible writer and I pray to God that you never stop. Dream bigger than you ever dreamt you could. I would be lying if I didn't say that I truly believe you are a more talented writer than Stehanie Meyer. I think, if you ever chose to persue it, you could become a real writer someday. You have a truly amazing talent. I love your story and can only hope that you will see your own potential. It's been a pleasure reading your story.

 

Author's Response:

Wow.  I mean... wow.  Um.  I'm speechless.

Shall we discuss tears springing to one's eyes?  You've just brought them to mine.

Your comments truly mean the world to me.  I don't know what I did to deserve such high praise, but I am so grateful that you have connected to my story in such a way and that you believe in me and my writing with such conviction.  I'm just... wow.  Truly, I am so honoured and grateful for your words.

I will endeavour to live up to them.

I would love to write, professionally, one day and hope to high heaven that you are right.

Again, many thanks for your review.

The anguish Edward feels for the injury he caused Bella is so raw. The way he repeats "Hurt her" to Alice is like a child who is being punished. Alice was so upset trying to get him to realize he made a wrong decision, I hurt for both of them.

Author's Response:

Edward is so lost in this place.  In reality, I believe his parents would have had him in serious therapy at the least, but for purposes of the story, he had to suffer in silence.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

This was a sad chapter, the way Alice described how Edward was like the walking dead and how distraught he was about Bella and then how she was so upset about the thought that Bella had done something to harm herself.

Author's Response:

It definitely was *not* an easy chapter.  Then again, most of them are not.

Thanks so much for all of the reviews!

So for some reason I did not review the first 5 chapter, stupid me.

Loved the emotion portrayed in ths chapter, the desperation, the love, the description of the time in the meadow, beautiful.

 

Also, ch 25, I did understand the last part was supposed to be a duet and I loved it but I was so torn up by the end of that chapter I could barely type.

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you're connecting to the story.  25 is definitely a tough chapter.  I sobbed writing the end as if they were calling and answering, or singing back and forth.

Thank you so much for reviewing past chapters!

This may be morbid, but Bella should almost die... again. Shake it up some more. I'm not ready for happy. But I am glad the baby is alive. I hope you use Nessie, or at least a decent name. Not anything like Agatha or Gertrude.

Author's Response:

LOL!  The name is definitely decent.  At least I think so!  And no Renesmee or any variation thereof!

No more almost dying, but I'm no where NEAR done with the angst!

Thanks for reviewing!

Research has shown that skin-to-skin contact can be very beneficial to premies.  Basically all kangaroo care, at least that I'm aware of, is holding the baby against one's bare (or mostly bare for women) chest.  I'm sure of the research or exactly why it works but the staff recommened we perform it when my twin nieces were born prematurely.  I also heard a lot about it in college as I had several classes in childhood issues (I'm a speech therapist by training). 

Once little love is stable can't you just picture Edward sitting in a rocker/glider with his shirt unbuttoned and her sleeping soundly against his bare chest.  I definitely think it would make your readers feel all warm and fuzzy. 

Author's Response:

I know exactly what this is!  Just not by that name.  They highly recommended that with my son and my man spent hours with my son on his bare chest in the hospital room (I was in the hospital 5 days). 

Yes!  This is a lovely idea.  I'll see if I an fit it in!

Loved it!

Now have Bella wake up and be all better please. :)

Author's Response:

I am glad you feel I did it justice.  Bella will be back, but we still have a ways to go...

Thanks so much for reviewing!

It is a beautiful chapter.  Thanks.

Author's Response:

Yes, Sweet Daddyward definitely tugs at the heart strings!

Thanks so much for reviewing!

AAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!! this is too sweet....

now all they need is bella to be okay,, , AND FAST PLEASE!!!!! ;)

i'm loving the story, so update soooooonnnn!!!!!  :D

Author's Response:

Yes, Sweet Daddyward definitely tugs at the heart strings!

Thanks so much for reviewing!

That was amazing!! I ♥ ur story too!xxx

Author's Response:

I am glad you feel I did it justice.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Ok, I'll be honest that I really didn't have any intention of reading your story.  For these situations, I like Edward to be punished and, by your little summary I somehow thought that he had a valid reason for completely destroying Bella.  Then, you totally blew your way onto the Top Ten list... and not just the bottom of the list.  You are cruising up that baby!  Anyway, I thought I'd give the story a chance and have spent most of the day reading it... and my emotions haven't settled since I started!  I truely love the story and how you're writing everyone.  Seriously, I love how you've taken on everyone.  Bravo.  However, I kinda wish I'd waited a little longer to start reading so you could have gotten a few more chapters done and I'd have a little bit of a resolution started so I didn't have this 'punched in the gut' feelling.  I am repeating  "She believes in happy endings, she believes in happy endings", so it's not as bad as it could be.  Anyway, I just wanted to let you know I am really enjoying your story and that I'm already getting impatient for the next update!

Author's Response:

Oh thank you!  I'm so glad you gave it a try!  So many people see "New Moon" and run screaming, but I try to really spin this and write it from a different perspective.  It's supposed to be just short, emotional looks at a situation through the characters eyes and no narrative.  It's up to the reader to fill in the blanks.  I'm just giving you where each of them are.  I'm totally amazed by how many people have read it and reviewed it.

Thank you so much for contributing your thoughts and review!

OK, I have to stop reading these updates until you have more than one chapter up. I can't take just one! 

Author's Response:

At least they are quick!

Thanks for reviewing!