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Reviews For The Ritual
Reviewer: MissJanuary (Signed) · Date: July 09, 2011 02:55 PM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

Shhh, hear that, the displaced air, it's that fucking penny!!!  You know I've never been a fan of the saying 'Waiting for the other shoe to drop.' It's meant to a warning, omnious. The sound of shoes dropping never felt like that to me, they always sounded like home. Friends, family coming to visit kicking there shoes off. But that damned penny... when it hits the floor with that all too loud, staccato sound. Then it seems to roll around listlessly before finally coming to a stop. Now that's fucked up, never mind the damn shoe! ~Jen

Reviewer: MissJanuary (Signed) · Date: July 08, 2011 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 13: Guilt

Great chapter!  Lemon and all; however I can't help but think about that penny waiting to drop. You know you're distracting me from my own writing, damnit! ~Jen

Reviewer: MissJanuary (Signed) · Date: July 08, 2011 08:06 AM · On: Chapter 8: The Past

WiP was fluffy, and funny. But this is... desperate. I guess that's the best word I think to pin on this story so far. Love the flashbacks too; revealing just a little more of the past.  Well did! ~Jen

Reviewer: jamiecullan68 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2011 04:16 PM · On: Chapter 22: Not When I Need It (vjgm)

great chapter cant wait to read more. Hope  to read more soon

Reviewer: ellizabethcullen (Signed) · Date: November 20, 2010 03:29 PM · On: Chapter 22: Not When I Need It (vjgm)

I do hope you write more soon

Reviewer: Merrisol (Signed) · Date: October 29, 2010 11:10 AM · On: Chapter 22: Not When I Need It (vjgm)

I imagine that this is an emotionally draining story to write. Writing is a fickle thing. Either it flows in your mind or it doesn't. You can't force creativity. I have enjoyed this story enough to wait as long as it takes to read another chapter. I am sure that others probably feel the same way I do. I wonder if it would help if you went back a couple of chapters and read what you have written. That might get the creative juices flowing again. Just a thought. I am thoroughly enjoying this story.

Reviewer: campcathryn (Signed) · Date: October 26, 2010 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 22: Not When I Need It (vjgm)

Love the update

Reviewer: slayerjules (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2010 03:03 AM · On: Chapter 21: Limbo

:)

 

Reviewer: RobwardLover (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2010 05:20 PM · On: Chapter 21: Limbo

Thanks for coming back to us and starting the path to bringing them back together :)

Reviewer: AlysLuv (Signed) · Date: July 06, 2010 05:39 PM · On: Chapter 6: Faking It

poor bella....p.s. gnocchi is the shiznit

Reviewer: campcathryn (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2010 06:57 AM · On: Chapter 20: Event Horizon (v)

Love it

Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2010 05:21 PM · On: Chapter 20: Event Horizon (v)

oooo what next?!  good transition chapter. you definitely have me on edge for when she gets baaaack....update soon pelase!!

Reviewer: maserati (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2010 02:28 PM · On: Chapter 20: Event Horizon (v)

We're in the heartbreaking stage here, aren't we?  I'm hoping fervently that you are an HEA writer.  I have no first-hand knowledge about what alcoholism can do to someone, but through your story I'm seeing how its effects are felt by countless people.  Thanks so much for writing this story.  Can't wait to see how the phone call goes.

Reviewer: maserati (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2010 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 20: Event Horizon (v)

We're in the heartbreaking stage here, aren't we?  I'm hoping fervently that you are an HEA writer.  I have no first-hand knowledge about what alcoholism can do to someone, but through your story I'm seeing how its effects are felt by countless people.  Thanks so much for writing this story.  Can't wait to see how the phone call goes.

Reviewer: jfk06 (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2010 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 19: Waning Crescent (vjgm)

Wow, what a chapter... I knew it was coming & I must admit, I was *dreading* the confrontation -- but I think this worked really well. Bella had a breakdown, but she actually made a somewhat sound decision: she was becoming dependent on Edward and a separation from him while she works on putting herself back together seems like a really good idea.

As a side note, why did Jake & Alice go with her to BC?  Just to support her? Or are they worried she'll lose courage on the plane and then disappear altogether?

I wonder what made Edward finally tell her?  And what's going on in Edward's head now?  Do we get to find out? :-D

Reviewer: RobwardLover (Signed) · Date: April 03, 2010 05:01 PM · On: Chapter 19: Waning Crescent (vjgm)

I was upset after the last chapter, when it looked like she was just going to run and not talk to him at all.  I feel better now, since you gave them that time together in the morning.  I think they are both hurting a lot. but I think now Edward understands what she is doing instead of thinking she just ran away from him.  This will be so hard for both of them, but it will end up being the best possible route to the outcome they both want. 

Reviewer: PerennialAddict (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2010 04:53 PM · On: Chapter 1 : La Louche

That was h--h-hot!

Reviewer: maserati (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2010 02:50 PM · On: Chapter 19: Waning Crescent (vjgm)

Well, you've done it now.  You've made me cry.  I hated to see her go, but I know she has to do it.  She can't rely on Edward alone to make her feel good abut herself.  Great writing.  Thanks so much!

Reviewer: Merrisol (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2010 12:14 AM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

Their imperfection is perfect. I love this story.

Reviewer: RobwardLover (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2010 02:27 PM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

I was so happy to see an update on this!  It's been on my fave's for a while and I was hoping you'd come back to it.  I knew the shit had to hit the fan eventually, but damn!  I had hoped maybe Bella wouldn't take it this hard.  Maybe Edward could have softened the blow of delivery a little more?  I totally understand where you're going with her and her reaction.  But that doesn't mean I have to like it! 

Even if I'm the only one reading, please keep posting!  You can't leave me hanging after that!

Reviewer: maserati (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2010 02:53 PM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

I just came across your story this weekend, and I truly can't believe that I've missed it before.  If there was a way to get thousands of other people to read it, I would do it in a heartbeat.  This is one of the most moving stories I have read in a long time.  Not only will I designate it as a favorite, it's one of those that I will most certainly re-read.  And that rarely happens with me.  You've truly owned my soul with this.  If the storyline itself wasn't enough, you have mad writing skills.  I just don't know what to say.  The only other story that has affected me this much was "Femme Docs and Kevlar Knights".  Can't wait to read more of your story.  Thanks so much for taking your time to write this.

Reviewer: sweetstarryeyes (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

I started reading this a few months ago, and I wanted to let you know that.  I really enjoy the story.  I like your Edward and Bella, and I think that the premise is a nice change from the Edward-as-addict fanfics out there (not that those aren't fabulous, but focusing on a female character as an alcoholic is interesting.  And your Bella is a good, if flawed, character).  If you keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Reviewer: ugagirl120 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 03:28 PM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

aww this hurts... i feel so bad for Bella!

Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 09:30 AM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

I always read!  Can't wait to see where this goes.  This chapter breaks my heart!

Reviewer: JourneyJohnny (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 08:52 AM · On: Chapter 18 Everything Has A Price(v)

Wow, that was great! This intensity I love so much is still there. I felt as if I was literally sucked into the story, and I totally felt with Edward and Bella.

This chapter was so sad, I almost cried, and this is something I rarely do because of something I read. Take it as a big compliment!

Oh, Bella... it is quite clear that she is going to leave him, but I still hope she won´t... those two belong together.

I can`t understand why there are so few people reading, because in my opionion it is one of the best stories here, and I love it!

Please, keep on writing, and I promise to comment on each chapter!

 

 

 

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