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Reviews For Broken Doll
Reviewer: mrs_n (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 04:37 PM · On: Chapter 25

Very interesting. I've never read anything like it. I love love love it. Its beautifully written and as accurate as can be when talking about legends. A few questions... Leda Swan... Was that taken from Leda and the Swan? The Greek Myth of Zues coming to Leda as a swan? Or is that a coincidence? I had more questions but now can't think of them... Darn baby brain drain lol... Anyways, love this.



Author's Response:

Why yes indeed Megan, I borrowed the name Leda from Leda and the Swan.  It was too perfect to pass up.  You are only the second or third person to mention the correlation.

I'm thrilled you feel this story is unique and beautifully written.  Thank you so very much.

 

Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 04:03 PM · On: Chapter 25

Wow! So is Alec doing something behind the scenes to help Bella, perhaps avengeing his families fate?



Author's Response:

Venus, you could be on to something there. ;)

Thanks for the awesome rating and review!

Reviewer: mrs_n (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 03:33 PM · On: Chapter 20

I'm not one to review a story I'm in the middle of reading (I usually wait until I'm reading as the chapters are posted) but I had to tell you that "I may have convinced him he was a princess" made me laugh so hard that I choked on my granola bar. Love this story.



Author's Response:

Wow Megan, thank you so much for giving Broken Doll a chance and for letting me know what bits are your favorite.  I have to admit, Emmett and Jacob are my two favorite characters to write in this fic...I'm so glad you are enjoying it.  Please don't choke on your food while reading!  LOL!!

 

 

Reviewer: Lazairahel (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 03:11 PM · On: Chapter 25

This is an amazing story.  I've read all 25 chapters tonight and was very impressed.  The details in Bella and Leda's story is unbelievable.  I can't wait until you're next update.



Author's Response:

Fredda, I am humbled by your review and rating, thank you very much.  I'm so thrilled you read all 25 chapters tonight.  Just for that, I am sending you something special.  

Thank you, thank you thank you.

 

If you don't get my present via email, let me know.  haines.kari@gmail.com

 

 

Reviewer: cinemapersians (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 25

Whew!  I should have known (silly me!) that it wasn't jealousy that made Bella react like that.  After all, she had all that time with Jacob (too much (UCK!) if you ask me, but it's your story), and she didn't want him then... Anyhoo, I like what you came up with as the reason she reacted like that.

However, I'm a bit confused.  I thought Alec's powers, like Jane's, and Aro's didn't work on Bella? hmmm?

I'm very glad Edward and Bella are together (always), and also happy that Jacob has imprinted on Leah (about time!), but I'm fearful of the Volturi.  Who were the two burned bodies?  Not Alice and Jasper!  Please no.  Please?



Author's Response:

Thanks Pam for the rating and nice meaty review!

Alec and Jane, in this AU anyway, are related to Bella by blood, therefore, their powers are able to affect Bella and vice versa. However, Bella is going to be much much more powerful than the twins.

I can tell you that the two burned bodies are in fact NOT Alice and Jasper. :)

Chapter 26 is up on FF.net.  

 

Reviewer: elle12 (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 12:00 PM · On: Chapter 25

mmmm kiss was amazing, dont understand how alecs gift could numb her when edward & aro cant read her unless there is something in the scriptures



Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed the kiss Maureen.  Thanks for the rating and review!  

Alec and Bella are of the same bloodline, so they can affect each other with their gifts.   Or, at least in my world they can.  LOL!

 

 

Reviewer: Jaenelle Masen (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 11:00 AM · On: Chapter 25

Alec is not supposed to be able to use his power on Bella!! his power works like Jane's...but Bella should still be able to shield herself from his power....ugh! 



Author's Response:

Hi Jaenelle!  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Alec and Bella are of the same bloodline, so it's very possible for them to affect each other.   Don't worry...I promise Bella will be much much stronger once she gets some know how under her.  

Reviewer: coreyT (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 10:06 AM · On: Chapter 2

I wouldn't mind if edward stalked me too. love the dark stuff



Author's Response:

Thanks Corey!  Edward the stalker is a frequent feature in my fantasy life.

 

Reviewer: lastobethnin (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 09:58 AM · On: Chapter 25

I will tell you one thing I love about your story..."We were all standing in a clearing and the wind was making the red cloaks of the Volturi Guard billow and snap around them like wayward sails in a tempest." 

The way you word things is so beautiful and unique.  Such a colorful use of language.  Such a nice change from the stuff I see way too much in fics.

I'm glad that Bella had the heart to heart with Alice.  Such an awesome responsiblilty to have the power to change and alter others futures.   

Still hoping Alec is a double agent so to speak.  You know I love you and this story.  I spend way too much time thinking about it! lol.. Thanks for sharing it!



Author's Response:

Wow Stefanie, thanks so very much for the kind words and the wicked rating.   I guess I just try to describe the movie that's playing in my head when I think of this story.  The scenes are vivid in my mind!  If you think you spend a lot of time thinking about Broken Doll, imagined my warp brain tuned into it  ALL. THE. TIME.

I'm not done with Alec yet!

 

 

 

Reviewer: coreyT (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 09:42 AM · On: Chapter 1

wow very dark i liked it



Author's Response:

Thanks Corey!  I can't wait until you get caught up!  I  love it when new readers pick up the story.  Thanks for giving Broken Doll a chance.  It will surprise you!

 

Reviewer: Oleander (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 08:30 AM · On: Chapter 25

"I struggled against invisible chains, my mouth felt dry as cotton. Leaning over me, a sliver of moonlight sliced across pale skin, illuminating half of his face. His beauty impaled me with the cold dagger of fear as his crimson eyes held mine. Long frigid fingers reached out to touch my cheek."

That passage alone made me feel claustrophobic, panicked, and creeped out.  

WELL DONE! 

This was a great chapter and I think I actually gasped when Bella saw the vision of Leah.  (Knuckles was far from impressed with that).

 



Author's Response:

Thank you very much Leanne!  I'm so glad I creeped you out and peeved off Knuckles.  :)

I hope you are well enough to come to class tomorrow night.  I'm looking forward to Joe's talk about publishing.

 

Reviewer: IslandWoman221 (Signed) · Date: November 28, 2009 07:47 AM · On: Chapter 25

Glad to see it's up here!  Just as good this time around.  Something about the black with white letters just made this scene in particular more powerful for me!

Love what you do babes!  Can't wait for more (but no hurry, I don't want it to end!)  :D



Author's Response:

Thanks Diane!  I do love the black and white as well. Twilighted is the first place I posted and it feels like home to me.

I don't want it to end either!  :)

 

Reviewer: BellePapillion (Signed) · Date: November 22, 2009 04:59 PM · On: Chapter 1

Holy.Cow !! Wow thank you !!! I`ll get on it right now lol!! Thank you thank you thank you !!!!

Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2009 09:49 PM · On: Chapter 24

Okay, okay, okay... I just read all 24 chapters straight through. Thank you for having not finished it yet. YOU TOTALLY HAVE ME IN YOR WEB!!! 

This story is freaking awesome! 

And, it only makes sense that even with all that has been between Bella and Edward that she still has feelings to resolve over Jacob. So very true. She went from loving him and knowing that he loved her (even though is was stronger on his end) to being pissed off and finding out a whole load of shit about her very powerful ancestry. She has yet to have time to truly let her relationship with Jacob end. He was still hers. He kept on trying to make good with her. He himself kept insisting that he was hers. Now Bella must be calm and level headed in her realization that it is over between them. 

That is a lot of shit to deal with in only a week. You are good at keeping track of all of these minute character and plot details. I would not have gotten this far... you're awesome!



Author's Response:

OMG!  I can't believe you read the whole thing straight through!  YAY!  Thank you so much!

 

You have some very good points about why Bella would seem conflicted about Jacob.  Things are not always what they seem. ;)

Chapter 25 should be up next week, it's in the queue for validation right now, so whenever RedChevy gets the chance to release it, it will be up.

Thank you so much Amber, for reading it all and being so supportive. 

xoxo

 

Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2009 03:45 PM · On: Chapter 7

Was the sex too soon?? I don't know. I lost my virginity to my current long time boyfirend (4 years and going). We got together while in college, and before we we reached that first year mark I found myself spending a summer at home several states away. I didn't want to seem like a sex hound, but when we were back together all I wanted was for him to touch me and hold me. After two and a half months without being able to see him and only having his voice over the phone. I just wanted him. To really feel him with me. To feel he wanted me too.

So, no. Edward and Bella having sex after not being together for 7 years (all the while wanting each other) was right on time.



Author's Response:

Ahhh Firsrt loves.   Awesome.  I'm so glad you didn't think it was too soon.  There will be lots more sexin'.  ;) 

 

Thank you Amber!

 

Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2009 03:18 PM · On: Chapter 6

Okay, that is a twist I didn't see coming! I really like the creativity though bringing in some new blood through the pack legends. I haven't seen too much of that. But I'm sure you've had plenty of responses about that.



Author's Response:

YAY!  You made it!  THere is plenty more legend, lore and magic..lemons and other things as well!

Thank you so much Amber for reading through and reviewing!

 

Reviewer: Starnani21 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2009 02:41 PM · On: Chapter 2

Okay...your angst filled story is pulling me in. But 24 chapters? Where is this going? So far you have already gotten rid of the greatest threat to Edward and Bella being together...or maybe my thinking is not creative enough...

Yeah I think that's it. Okay I'll read on!



Author's Response:

Yes!  24 chapters and counting!  I'm working on Chapter 26 right now.  When you get to chapter 6 you will see a glimpse of where this story is going and then I drop you down the rabbit hole.  I tried to keep is woven as tightly as I could to canon, but threw in my own twists and turns and legends.  I hope you enjoy it.  

Thank you so much Amber for giving Broken Doll a chance, reading and reviewing.  Let me know your progress as you read!  

 

Reviewer: BellePapillion (Signed) · Date: November 20, 2009 11:31 AM · On: Chapter 1

oh yes. whenever , if u need a translation just let me know and ill be happy to help you:) And ...come back soon..this i smaking me anxious! I kind of need more :)

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I sent you something to your email to express my appreciation.

 

Reviewer: twi-addict (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 10:26 PM · On: Chapter 13

Exciting stuff!  This is a great story and although I am mad at all of them for their roles in screwing everything up, it make it so much more interesting!   Can't wait to see what Bella has to say to the "dog"!



Author's Response:

ooooh!  Thanks Lori!  I'm so excited you made it to this chapter!  I loved writing this one.  Willow from Buffy the Vampire Slayer was totes my inspiration for Bella in this chapter.

Thanks for the rating and review!

 

Reviewer: twi-addict (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 10:04 PM · On: Chapter 12

Wow, that was so hot!  I love that they're all together and even Rose is being "nice" to Bella!   The power Bella possesses is quite interesting and I can't wait to see what she can do once she learns to control it.   I love the way you write their intimacy... if only real life could be like that every time (wink wink).  Looking forward to more lemony goodness and lots of answers!  



Author's Response:

Thank you Lori!  The Sting song was truly inspiring when I wrote that chapter. It would be nice if RL sex could be that dreamy.  Indeed!

 

Reviewer: twi-addict (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 09:16 PM · On: Chapter 11

Damn, gotta love that Jasper!   So glad that Alice and Jasper are back in the picture and that Bella is being so good about all of it.   Can't wait to see how Edward reacts to letting Bella drive!  You are a wonderful writer and this story just flows so well!



Author's Response:

Oh my!  Responding to your reviews is truly the highlight of my night!  So much praise!  Thank you very much.

 

Jasper with the Matthew McConaghey voice makes me squirrely.  I can't wait for New Moon but I'm scared of Jasper's hair.  Poor Jackson.  He's so cute without the 70's perm!!

 

Reviewer: twi-addict (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 10

My laptop died a few weeks ago and I lost all my stories, bookmarks and passwords so I haven 't been keeping up with this until now.   I love this story and can't wait to see who is at the door!   Still don't have a new computer, but i did manage to set my password so at least I can keep up again!    On to the next chapter...



Author's Response:

Laptop fail!  Horrors!  Thank you so much for finding me again and reading!  xoxoxox

 

 

Reviewer: MarilagML (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2009 10:18 AM · On: Chapter 24

I wonder why Bella ran.



Author's Response:

Chapter 25 to be posted soon!   All shall be explained. ;)

 

Reviewer: MarilagML (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2009 10:08 AM · On: Chapter 23

Wow!  That must have been a scary dream



Author's Response:

It was a scary dream because Bella as witnessing Alec taking the scripture at some point in the past.  Thanks for reviewing!

 

Reviewer: nothing2do (Signed) · Date: November 15, 2009 06:09 AM · On: Chapter 24

Oh no....what in the world.  is she just shocked that he imprinted on Leah?  or is she just overwhelmed by what is happening to her?  I would be scared!!!  This is such a great story and now I will be on edge waiting to see what happened to her and what she is going to do now.....

Love the story :)



Author's Response:

Things aren't always what they seem.  I'm almost finished writing Chapter 25.  I'm hoping it will be updated by next weekend if it slides through validations here quickly.

I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story!  Thanks for reading and reviewing!

 

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