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Reviewer: bella93 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 07:38 PM · On: The Dance

YEAH

sooo they will get away and aro will leave them alone and bella and edward will be together 4ever and bella will be hurt and turned or have a kid!?!?!?!?!

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 06:30 PM · On: The Balcony

EDWARD EDWARD EDWARD im glad hes here i was worried i kinda guest that since chapter 3 though

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 05:22 PM · On: The Bedroom

why is there no edward? hey wait is the naked vamo edward? is edward in this story at all ever?



Author's Response:

Edward does make an appearance in this story :)

If you stick with it, you will get there soon enough :)

Reviewer: khhc (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 04:06 PM · On: The River

sooo gooood. always.

Reviewer: scarhett89 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 01:48 PM · On: The Hunt

Okay, so this is, honestly, the best Twilight fanfic I have read so far... and I have read alot. I have been a die hard fan of the series for almost a year now and I have read a years worth of Twifiction(and for me, that is a alot because that is all I ever do!). I have been reading over at fanfiction.net but found this site and I started reading...

Truly, though, an amazing fic. I could go on and on about it but here are some of my favorites aspects...

It feels like so often, Edward is the dominant and that Bella is the "weakest link". It would be almost impossible to change that and stay in character UNLESS you come up with an amazing plot like this one!!! :) You stay in character, as best as you can with Edward, under the circumstances. And you have Bella in perfect character. To quote a little BD, it is just "so Bella" to cast her wants and desires and even preservation of life aside to help someone she cares about. I love it...

This fic has one of the most complex plots I have yet to encounter. Edward was kidnapped and held for experimentation, he knows who did it, he knows they are coming for him, he is mental and emotional scarred from this and the only one who is able to reach out to him is Bella(love, too, how you incorporated his mind-reading into things and how the Cullen's deal with it,  I also love how you have shown that one of the things that comforts Edward so much is Bella's smell, you bring so many things from Twilight into the story and slide it in with your own little twists!!)... There is so much suspense! I was constantly on the edge of my seat reading it...

Bella and Edward's love or interest or whatever we could call it at this point, is so pure! I love the fact that she uses touch to comfort him but doesn't automatically illicit sexual desires and they instantly start shagging each other right then and there!!!! There is so much more to it than that. I love it when it isn't all lust. You know, sometimes, you just want a good story to read that isn't just SMUT!!!! :)

Anyway, I think that I have made this long enough...I truly enjoyed this and I absolutely cannot wait for the next installment! I will definitely be following your work from now on...

-Scarhett89 :)

Reviewer: OCD_indeed (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 08:15 PM · On: The Dance

So not vampires huh?

hmmmm... werewolves?  But then how would the wolves have him for over 80 years?  It has to be vamps.  But then again I am sure I am totally wrong.  I have no idea.  BUT just because he'd never seen a vamp, doesn't mean they didn' have something to do with it. 

Are you throwing Witches into this fic? bahahahaha!!!

 

"They'll find me," he whispered, his fingers trembling around mine. "They won't stop," he looked out the window, fear written plainly on his face. "They'll never stop... until they find me."

So... he knows who had him though, and why they won't give up on him.

Okay I give up.  I'll show you mine if you show me yours!  Despairward is yours if you give me Basementward.

So by Alice enforcing Prom.... does this mean Basementward will be ready for prom??  Maybe... why else would you foreshadow a little dancing.  It shows that he is civilized and can try to possibly survive in the outside world.

Gah, I could go on and on!  SO MANY QUESTIONS!!!

Love it baby.  Keep it up.  I had no idea you were talking about Cullenitis when you mentioned getting a "previewer".  I love her, she's so amazing, and you are in such good hands.

okay.  I must go to bed now.

mwah! you know I love you.

b

 

 

*OMG!!  I MEANT CULLENITIS!  but look at the time on this puppy.  It was late.

 



Author's Response:

Having no idea is what keeps people reading! Wait for the chap that it comes out, I'll lose half the readership! :)

WITCHES! Pff. People are calling aliens, too.. pppppfffffff.

NO ONE WILL EVER ACCUSE ME OF BEING A CRAPPY SECRET KEEPER AGAIN BWHAHAHAHA. I think Jill has despairward all figured out already :)

And.. technically, I was talking to cullenitis. I'm pretty confident cullenista doesn't even read vitb, snort. I heard somewhere (cough)imdb(cough) that it's too slow for her? So I picked the pervy one with a very similar name who fellates the story at any given opportunity. She did a fab job for me, too. My stress level was way lower this chap x)

Go to bed! Well, this was yesterday or two days ago, but I hope you went to bed :) And I'm behind a chap on the fallout now! GRR! RL SUCKS! :)

Thanks so much for reviewing ocd, I love when you give me some love :)

Reviewer: Lauravamp (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 03:23 PM · On: The Hunt

I just left a review a little while ago and read your responses to some others.  You said that there were clues in the last chapters and I think I've figured it out, but who knows maybe I'm way off.  I'm not sure if anyone has already asked this, so sorry if you've already answered.  Is Jacob in this story?  Does Bella know him?  Does she know about the werewolves? 

I think the werewolves were holding Edward captive.  Bella said no humans would be strong enough to capture a vampire.  She also mentioned how she can hear wolves howling sometimes at night.  Finally, I noticed that when Edward was scared about going outside, Bella told him the land all belonged to the Cullens.  Edward seemed more at ease then.  Perhaps he knows about the treaty with the Quileutes?  For some reason I just can't get this stoy out of my head and I had to share my little inferences.  :)  Can't wait to see where the story goes!



Author's Response:

Haha, cheating! I read review responses too :P

There ARE clues, an especially large one in ch.16.. o.O So you're thinkin werewolves, eh?

Well, I can say that Bella has made absolutely NO mention of Jacob, so it's unlikley that she knows him (if he's even a character in this).. but of course, I can't tell you what's to come!

Interesting take on the hints though! We'll see :P

Thanks for reviewing hon :)

Reviewer: Lauravamp (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 02:22 PM · On: The Dance

I absolutely love this story!  You are a talented writer and I look forward to reading the rest of this story!  I imagine it's going to be pretty long since Edward still has a long way to go before he's "normal".

Reviewer: stlfilwtl (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 11:15 AM · On: The Dance

This is just awesome.

Reviewer: stargrl678 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 10:23 AM · On: The Dance

AWW!! :( poor Edward! I hope that he is strong enough to fight back!! and what is happening with the volturi!!

post more soon!!

Reviewer: lilroses_89 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 01:35 AM · On: The Dance

Bella's reflections about her feelings for Edward and their possible repercussions was great. I was considering those myself so it was nice to see her take a step back, even for a moment, and think about her situation.

The ending scene was adorable. I loved how they 'danced' together. Very sweet.



Author's Response:

So glad you enjoyed this one hon :) Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: makovitza (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 07:01 PM · On: The Dance

Sigh. I was all excited to find out something about whoever it was that caged Edward, then you dashed my hopes! I hope we get some answers soon...or at least some more clues! The fact that the Volturi are coming is ominous, although maybe they will have some answers for Carlisle. I can't believe Alice let Bella get away with getting out of the dance, after spending so long helping her get ready. Bella is such a whinger sometimes! Still, I'm glad you explained the whole homecoming vs prom thing - not being American I originally assumed Alice was going to drag her to the dance kicking and screaming. Oh, and the dance between Edward and Bella was super-sweet. Great chapter. Can't wait to read more! :-)



Author's Response:

There are some clues in this chapter :) Just sayin' x)

I think Bella has priorities, and the dance isn't high on them. Edward had a freak out, and Bella wasn't going to go to the dance and leave him at home freaking out :)

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, you just have to look for the clues! They're in there! :)

Thanks for the review

Reviewer: selene_romanov (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 06:55 PM · On: The Dance

this story is good and moves very slowly, but for a good reason i can see, i wonder what kind of people kept edward for so long, captive and how he escaped?

Reviewer: fonsy (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 09:46 AM · On: The Dance

I'm amazed. This story is amazing. One of my top 5. I started reading it yesterday, and I'm so intrigued by everything that's going on. Just WOW.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: NoMoreThanUsual (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 06:45 AM · On: The Dance

That was awesome!!!  I'm soooo loving this story. And I'm hooked!  LOL

 

Thanks for the explanation about homecoming and prom. LOL  I'd have missed that entirely!  I thought Alice was making Bella go to this dance. And I'm glad she's not! :D

 

Great story!



Author's Response:

Haha, I'm glad my end note did not go to waste. I feel like a lot of people overlook it, since people are still angry with Alice, but I'll write it in the opening note next chap as well x)

 

Thanks so much for reviewing!



Author's Response:

Haha, I'm glad my end note did not go to waste. I feel like a lot of people overlook it, since people are still angry with Alice, but I'll write it in the opening note next chap as well x)

 

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: pillowbiter (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 04:54 AM · On: The Hunt

this was recommended to me on the forums and I can easily see why. I'm so curious to know more!

Reviewer: TeamJasper13 (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 01:12 AM · On: The Dance

I really don't think it would be fair of anyone to accuse this story of moving too slowly anymore cause there was so much happening in this chapter that I hardly know where to begin!

So of course, after that nail-biting, cliffhanging, WTF! answer at the end of the last chapter, we get absolutely no more answers for that in this chapter, lol. And yet I wasn't really surprised nor too displeased at the lack of more information about Edward's captors. It just wouldn't be VitB if we got all the answers at once, lol.

And besides, we did finally get our answer to exactly what is different about Bella for Edward, what he meant when he told her she wasn't like them, which was cool. And that led to him telling her she was perfect which was wonderful. And that led to Bella realizing she's developing feelings for Edward, which was even more awesomer, even though it did make stuff a little more awkward for her.

Carlisle's pov was great and it's really wonderful that Edward is starting to develop a little more trust in the Cullens. And that he took a shower on his own. But I have to say I'm starting to think you might have a little wet Edward fetish going on, lol, after all the time he's spent getting washed. Just kidding. I mean, who doesn't like images of Edward glistening with water, standing naked in the hot streaming water of the shower. Yum!

And we got all this nice fluffy progress and then Alice enters with that horrific vision. The Volturi are coming, WTF! That definitely takes the story in a whole new direction and brings up a thousand more questions and leaves me holding my breath wondering what will happen now and if they will tell Bella and how they'll keep Edward safe and what exactly the Volturi will want and just OMG!

And did Edward hear their thoughts about this new development? What was causing him to be so anxious the night of the dance? Was it just that he knows they'll come after him? Is he worried about Bella too? Will he try to leave to keep her safe?     By the way....these are all just thoughts that go through my mind as I read and I really don't expect any answers from you. I know it may not sound like it but I'm actually happy to wait and read the answers in the story, I just like to let you know all the crazy stuff that goes through my mind while reading this insanely good fic.

And they danced! Oh my god, how sweet! Best dance ever! Even though it wasn't really dancing, but oh well. And Alice caved and let Bella off the hook for going to homecoming. Have I mentioned before how much I love Alice? (Especially with her subtle hinting....Much Ado About Nothing, lol)

As always, I'm entralled, excited, and absolutely impatient for more! BEST STORY EVER!



Author's Response:

There are actually.. dare I say.. hints, throughout this chap................ :) I hate saying that, just because I don't like to give things away, but there are hints. And no, it wouldn't be VITB with (gasp) answers! :) That's what keeps the readers comin :P

I have every fetish with edward ever. Gosh, he's gotten washed like 4 times though, it is really ridiculous! However, for the story, I can't just let things like that go unnoted, because if I just let people assume he was showering/cleaning himself, that'd be a huge thing to skip over.. gah, OR maybe I just have a wet fetish x)

Yes, the Volturi are coming, eeeeeeee...... Usually isn't good news.. we'll see.. :)

Edward would have heard their thoughts, unless he's got some sort of masterful blocking out scheme in place.. They were only down the hall when they were talking about it, though, so yes, Edward would've heard.. o.O Which means that it's quite possible that something in that conversations/in their thoughts is the source of his strife.

I love hearing the crazy stuff that goes through readers minds! Mostly, people say it's crazy, but in reality, it's not so crazy :P Most of the questions are very logical for what's going on in the story, although there are the occasional off the wall ones, LOL. I don't think any of yours are crazy though :P

Thanks so much for reviewing, as always! Hope you enjoyed this one, hopefully soon we'll know who done it... :P

Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 07:30 PM · On: The Dance

Aro's coming for what? Oh I love this story so much and I'm so curious as to what more is going on. Can't wait for more. :)

Reviewer: elsvampirsexisteixen (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 05:37 PM · On: The River

OMGAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! Woman you're amazing.

Your cliffhangers make my heart beat faster

Reviewer: g-riley (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 03:33 PM · On: The Dance

Still loving this, keep it coming, and thank you.

Reviewer: Helens_Love (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 03:27 PM · On: The Dance

awesome, absolutely amazing! More, soon, please ;-D

Reviewer: BellaCara (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 03:23 PM · On: The Dance

AWESOME!

Reviewer: witchykitty (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 03:10 PM · On: The Dance

Another great chapter!

Reviewer: berrycute105 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 02:32 PM · On: The Dance

i loved loved loved. ou never fail to excite me for the next chapter. I was wonderin edward reaction to bella was like . i would love more detail on it . i dont know why but i do. and isn't homecoming aroud the beginning of the year and prom end



Author's Response:

Yep, homecoming is in the fall and prom is in the spring :)

There will of course be more detail, but we won't get into his head until after the story is over.

Thanks so much for reviewing!



Author's Response:

Yep, homecoming is in the fall and prom is in the spring :)

There will of course be more detail, but we won't get into his head until after the story is over.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Reviewer: mskohl (Anonymous) · Date: May 15, 2009 01:40 PM · On: The Dance

Thank you for that brief moment of affection.  I love their sweet dance.  It's simple, but still it's a big step for him.  I can feel the love building between them.  It's a dependancy right now, so I can anticipate something changing that, but I don't want to consider it yet. 

It amuses me that Bella doesn't realize all that he can hear. It seems she's still naive and doesn't consider that Edward might listen to what the Cullens' are thinking about her at every opportunity or that even though he doesn't know who the Volturi are, he can hear their worry about it.  Of course he knows that Alice and the others fear Bella has stronger feelings for him.  Of course he heard Alice's revelation to Carlisle and his responses. 

I anticipate that he will understand their coming danger and will try to help them by leaving.  Hopefully, they'll get all this out the open and he'll find it in himself to interact with them.

Thanks for taking the time and energy, once again, to share this story with us.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed their dance. It was a huge step for him, you're right!

And of course bella is naive! she wouldn't be bella if she understood everything, LOL! But yes, he's getting a lot from alice, carlisle, and JASPER! Guh, the things he must be picking up from Jasper, not only about her feelings for him, but his feelings for her!

Thanks so much for reviewing!

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