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Reviewer: CleanEco (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 01:25 AM · On: The Jump

I love this story! I'll wait as long as I need to for updates. I need to know what happens and what happened to Edward! Although, I do appreciate quick updates, too.

Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 01:08 AM · On: The Jump

so so so good :)

Reviewer: MooMin (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 12:55 AM · On: The Jump

Oh how I love this fanfiction..

Parting is such sweet sorrow,
Saying bye till.. You update.. ; )

Reviewer: nise7465 (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 12:46 AM · On: The Jump

Missed you and our vamps last week!  Another great chapter, liked seeing alice and edward interacting.  Good to see him loosening up a bit.

Can't wait to see what the volturri think of the Edward situation.  Hmmmmm

Reviewer: Belli (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 12:12 AM · On: The Jump

love it. it's progressing really well. Your pacing is brilliant.

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 11:40 PM · On: The Trial

I'm so sleepy... I can't come up with eloquent or witty words to describe the awesomeness witnessed in this chapter here, but it had me smiling through the whole thing... especailly when he shook his head no to her. progress that was ignored! I think im going to bed now, so goodnight, and I shall continue tomorrow afternoon hahaha

Reviewer: cdls1992 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 11:29 PM · On: The Jump

yay! he's coming out of his shell!!!!! .... sort of!!!! :) I love this story! Plz update soon! Is Edward's eyes gold or red at this point? :)

Reviewer: Bellinda (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 11:27 PM · On: The Jump

thanks for the update :D

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 11:25 PM · On: The Jump

WOWSERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I just found your story and read all 18 chapters. Can I just say WOW?

Seriously fantabulous (yes, that is too a word) story! Now, there's only one major problem that I can see .... um .... where's the next chaper? Are you telling me I'm going to have to wait ... geez ... hurry up already!

Reviewer: GeneralGem (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 11:17 PM · On: The Jump

YES, regular updates *does a groovy Dance* hehe. I am absolutely in love with this story, i so can't get enough. and yay hes not so sad!!! the run was cool 2... heheh Keep goin

Gem

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 10:52 PM · On: The Venom

I *think* I unnderstand about the inhibitors... but I'm still wondering how it was possible to get it into his system and how it was possible to mark his body...

Once again though. The perv in me has come out.

Sponge bath.

ALL over.

*giggles and blushes* I wonder just how thorough she was there... XD

Oh gosh, I need to start thinking with my head instead of my lady bits XD

Can I rate this a 14? lol

Reviewer: Kitten the Wolf (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 10:07 PM · On: The Jump

Yay, you updated.

Reviewer: KnoKnayme (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 09:26 PM · On: The Jump

cuuuuuuute!!!!!!!!!!1

Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 09:18 PM · On: The Jump

Awesome as always. :) I love the dialog between Edward and Alice here. And the syringe? I wonder if that was how it was done to him...

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 09:13 PM · On: The Pillow

Lol, I remember the typo... the word "then" was used instead of "than" but I just don't remember where... XD

I love how Alice lied to Carlisle and Co. about being sure that Bella wouldn't be hurt... It shows that she has faith without her usual extra knowledge, adn I think that's pretty wonderful of her. I'm proud to be a fan of her hahaha

But your thought of this simply being a transition chapter has me all jazzed for what's to come next! On I go!

Reviewer: Chalice Cullen (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 08:55 PM · On: The Jump

Oh how much do I adore this story?

!*@&@^#%$$^%^!&!*!!&!^!%$!#@$!%!!*&^$!#!!

&!*&*!!^!%!#@!$!$!^!&!&!**!^!$!##!#!$!%^!^!!!!

THAT much!

 

 

Reviewer: berrycute105 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 08:53 PM · On: The Jump

i nominated u 4 like  or more things. hope u win

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 08:52 PM · On: The Next Day

Oh gosh... I feel like such a perv because when they laid down together under the blanket all I could manage to think of was "is he still nekkid?! :D"

Gosh... the rest of my review went out the window except that I found one *tiny* typo... I don't remember where, and the ending of the chapter completely overshadowed that thought XD

sooo.... IS he naked? :P



Author's Response:

He is :)

Assume nudity until it's outright said that he's clothed ;)

 

And gah! at finding typos but forgetting! lol!

Reviewer: silly bj (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 08:45 PM · On: The Jump

I love your story.

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 08:13 PM · On: The Exam

I'm... Wow. I'm wondering what the hell happened to him... My guess would be some sort of experimentation, considering the barcode bracelet and the fact that the syringe to the mouth freaked himself out so much. Also, the strange scent... And the random gashes and wounds... But experimentation? On a vampire? The who/how/why are trying to convince me that is incorrect, but that's the only thing I can think of! I'm hoping the answer is in the chapters already posted so I don't have to wait to find out XD

Reviewer: Britt01 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 07:56 PM · On: The Jump

I like this view of Edward, getting to enjoy life a little bit.  Makes sense it was with Alice, too, since she has abilities most like him, and is less intimidating looking than the  boys.

Reviewer: MuffNbutter (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 07:50 PM · On: The Face

So much to comment on, and I can't remember it all! I think I just have a bunch of one liners, lol.

I love how Bella referred to him as Her Vampire, and I'[m imagining him thinking of her as his human.

I sense a co-dependant relationship in the works here...

I noticed how when Edward crouched down when Esme wentered the room, Bella said that his back was to her, and I'm wondering if he was tryign to protect her as well as himself.

LOL! Rose and emmett were in the shower. I remember briefly wondering about the shower water going when Bella first came into the house, but I had completely forgotten about that the second she opened the basement door! Thanks for reminding me XD

Bella was so wonderful when she was upset about the Cullens not feeding him yet, and all angry toward them... It was beautiful on her part :)

At the end, Carlisle said that he thought Jasper would be his greatest ally in this task, and I'm wondering if that IS true for some reason, or if they're just forgetting to acknowledge the progress that Bella has had with him, or considered it a fluke... Because personally, I'd wager that SHE would fill that position hahaha

Ooooh... Bella awoke to a fierce snarling. Because the Cullens came in the check on her? For the examination? I wonder how much Edward will hate being held down for that, eh? XD Or if Bella might actually manage to calm him down enough so it wouldn't be necessary... I don't think the latter is possible if I was correct in my guess about him wanting to protect her as well...

Oh! Mind Reading! Before I forget again, hahaha. Does Edward have that power? If so, is he able to harness it now in his condition? Can he still not read Bella's mind? Because i am pretty damn curious about that XD

Reviewer: berrycute105 (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 07:43 PM · On: The Jump

yay ALICE nad EDWARD are gettin along.great chapter .i'm glad he is communicating better with the other vampres even if its only carilse and alice its still progress. LOVED THE CHAPTER AS ALWAYS. AND I AM SO GONNA NOMINATE U AS SOON AS I FIGURE OUT HOW 2 WORK IT.

Reviewer: Cullenitis (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 07:41 PM · On: The Jump

Hello Fiance!

I miss you!  I hate having a busy RL.  I wish I could split myself into two people I swear!

Fecking LURRRRVED this chapter.  Loved it HARD!  Seeing Edward open himself up to Alice and letting himself EXPERIENCE what his existence entails for him was so mother flippin' AWESOME to read! (I can't wait to see how fast he really is...hehehe) And his inability to FULLY let go and him keeping pace with Alice and no more was... *sigh* ... perfect.  And I loved his questions, though I pretty much love EVERYTHING that comes out of your Edward's mouth.

As always, you give SO much in a single chapter, yet have this uncanny ability to leave me so very wanting (and wanton).  Bella wants more from him in the worst way, and SO DO I! but...it just wouldn't be right, and you know that, and you write it the way it SHOULD be, the way it is realistic and believable and expected (yet always surprising), and I can't describe to you how much I love you for it. I believe I've said this before, but let me say it again...

Your pacing is EXCRUIATINGLY SMEXCELLENT!  :licks lips:

I hope you are breaking all KINDS of records with this bitch!

 

Love and Hugs and Kisses and HUGE RESPECT!
BOATLOADS OF IT!

XOXO
~JO~

 

Reviewer: skymykel (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2009 07:27 PM · On: The Jump

GREAT chapter!!!  Don't think I didn't notice the "Rob" appearance in there...LOL  When Edward nervously raked his hand thru his hair???  --So sexy!  Anywho, I loved this chapter.  I am so glad to see the story moving along nicely.  I enjoyed the interaction between Alice and Edward.  I also really enjoyed the tender moment between B & E.  I can actually see Bella exploring his face and hair...  It's actually a sexually charged, yet heart quickening scene!  Oh my, oh my ...I just can't wait for more!  So, WRITE FASTER!!!  LOL... just kidding, but I'll be waiting!  HAPPY WRITING!

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