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Reviewer: terrabella (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:41 AM · On: Night Marish
Dick's Hamburgers & very greasy fries!!!
He was out...nothing happened with Lauren, right???
Reviewer: Twinsmom (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:37 AM · On: Phenomena
Oh. My. You write tension very well. Everything was suggestive without being over done. Totally hot!
Love how Edward was listening in to the call. Loved hearing both versions. You write the poetry, right?
Reviewer: flipacoyne (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:33 AM · On: Night Marish
No way! Edward and Lauren?! Say it ain't so. Write more please!
Reviewer: DarkwardluvsT (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:31 AM · On: Visuals
^_^ Mmmm. I love this. <3
i like mine potent with a nice amount of cinnamon-y rum creamer. yum. ^_^
Reviewer: cullengirlx (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:25 AM · On: Night Marish
Noooo! Just when E&B were getting somewhere skanky Lauren has to ruin it! GRRRR i really hate her!
Please tell me that Edward WILL remember what happened between him and Bella and that NOTHING happened between him and Lauren?! Bella is understanding so i'm hoping that after his explantion that nothing happened (wishful thinking?) she'll forgive him.
Loved Bella's first time, realistic and ideal for the characters and 'Closer' - seriously hot.
I have to say agin how much i adore your characterisations. Alice is great and her friendship with Bella is lovely, that bathtup scene was perfect! I expect Alice will let Edward have it for how much he's screwed things up and gets him to get it together. I completely agree with her Edward and Bella are 'meant to be'.
Stunning writing as always - there's a rason this story is my favourite!
I know you get this alot but please update soon! The wait might actually kill me this time!
Reviewer: Twinsmom (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:20 AM · On: Opening Lines
I want a shirt like Bellas.
I love how she instinctually called Alice. And she if she did'nt realize it at the time- by singing to her she was not only revealing herself but being herself.
Well done!
Reviewer: Twinsmom (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:06 AM · On: First Listen
Your disclaimers make me chuckle every time!
Obviously, your Bella doesn't see herself clearly either. Sounds like she had some haunting vocals.
I love how you are creating an AU story while trailing next the canon stuff in the book.
I was only confused about one thing. How did her skinny jean possible hide any curves? The shirt I can see, but usually skinny jeans show everything- that' why people with real curves- like me- can't wear them well. Just pickin'! :)
Love this! Yeah! Off to read more. Love how she's already under his skin.
Reviewer: bgwillis (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:05 AM · On: Nocturnal Prelude
Here are I thought we were making progress and taking a giant step forward....only to be dragged back. Get skanky Lauren outta there. Let's get this show on the road!
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 09:00 AM · On: Visuals
Lotsa cream; lotsa sugar!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!( a line from Pulp Fiction)
Reviewer: DarkwardluvsT (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:57 AM · On: Phenomena
*sigh* ^_^
A friendship-y Twilight charm from my BFF and a cute anime-ish smiling apple key cover. Yup, I'm a teenage girl.
Reviewer: Mastaspammip (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:57 AM · On: Night Marish
What the hell, when did laurnen get in there?
Reviewer: Rinna (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:50 AM · On: Night Marish
Oh Edward.....skanky Lauren! Poor Bella! Can't wait to read the reaction chapter!!
The best hangover cure is lots of water, aspirin and pancakes :)
Reviewer: fonsy (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:38 AM · On: Night Marish
OMG! Now that everything was coming around, Lauren had to ruin it all. I just hate her. Bella must be dying inside thinking all the wrong things, and who could blame her, that bedroom scene looked everything but inocent. Best hangover cure...aspirin, water, lots of sleep. Can't wait for next chapter
Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:36 AM · On: Night Marish
Edward just can't restrain himself from fucking things up, can he? Constantly. But Bella's forgiving and understanding, more so than I would be. Alice is perfect, and I think the bathtub scene is my favorite yet.
As far as a hangover "cure"... I do Pepto Bismol and takeout. It doesn't really help. These days, when I wake up naked, disoriented, and sore, it's in my own bed with my new husband, though. That helps, because I only have to suffer the headache and nausea, not the shame.
-Lola84
Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:34 AM · On: Night Marish
Ok what the fuck just happened? Lauren is such a skank!!!! I really hope he didn't do anything with her. Did she drug him? And why did Bella not go back in there to sleep with him?
Reviewer: Twinsmom (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:27 AM · On: Nocturnal Prelude
This is very good. Nice juicy long chapters and some interesting situations right off the bat and I think I'm hooked. I'm glad I'm starting this late so I can read the next part!
~christy
Reviewer: Kalle (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:26 AM · On: Night Marish
Dammit Lauren get lost already.. Gah, Don't keep us waiting.
Reviewer: Jiminy Crispies (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:25 AM · On: Night Marish
My best hangover cure is simply getting through the night. Once I've managed to fall asleep without being sick because everything starts spinning as soon as I lay down, I'll rise and shine without any headache. [Only the occasional feeling that some furry animal crawled into my mouth and died, haha.]
Oh, I love this. Not just this chapter, but all of it, as I might have mentioned before. I love how sensual and sexy and sultry it is.
I love your words. Little phrases and half-sentences seem to jump out at me and grab me by the throat, eliciting tiny moans and breathless gasps.
And I love [LOVE] Bella's first time. This spoke to me so much more than any scene with rose-petalled beds and candle-lit rooms and beaches ever could. For these two characters this was just perfect [and I try to not ever use that word].
EDIT: Because someone else mentioned this as well: the thought "Hey, kids - CONDOM!!" did cross my mind, though.
I also want an Alice of my own. [I'll take this Jasper, too, if they're a packaged deal.]
And I was SO not surprised that Lauren re-appeared. ;) Had to happen. The faint light from the bathroom was a hint.
Thanks so much for sharing this! My favourite story so far. x
PS: I'm re-reading "Tropic Of Capricorn" at the moment... I "blame" you. [Cheers!]
Reviewer: DarkwardluvsT (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:21 AM · On: Opening Lines
Omigosh. I'm pretty sure you make Edward sexier with every sentence.
Reviewer: tilia (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:08 AM · On: Night Marish
Hartbreaking...
Reviewer: Just Peachy (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:04 AM · On: Night Marish
Was Lauren being somewhat of a voyeur whilst Edward and Bella were tango-ing?!! Did she just slip out of the bathroom as Bella exited?
Please - no lemons between Edward and Lauren that night! Keep him REALLY drunk and passed out (i.e., completely unable to perform ANYTHING at all with her!!!).
And why did Bella never return during the night to his room? I wouldn't have been able to stay away, even if he was passed out drunk!
Please, I seriously bego of you - don't let Edward have no recollection of he and Bella being together. That would be beyond heartbreaking!
Reviewer: Shadowdragon13 (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 08:00 AM · On: Night Marish
Please tell me you have the next chapter already written!
I can't get this out of mt head... I have 45 stories in my favorites and ToV is my very favorite!
Please have mercy on us and update soon, PLEASE!
Reviewer: scottslass (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 07:51 AM · On: Night Marish
WTF!!!! Please, please tell me the skank crawled into his bed and he was too fucked up to do anything! You MUST update soon....please?
Reviewer: DarkwardluvsT (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 07:44 AM · On: First Listen
Yes, please. Keep going.
btw: The Deep End by Scary Kids Scaring Kids reminds me of Bella's sexual frustration and readiness. ^_^
Reviewer: Neurotika (Signed) · Date: April 15, 2009 07:32 AM · On: Night Marish
Uh-oh spaghetti-o. Edward's got some serious explaining to do! Lol.
Best hangover cure - flat cola. Works like a charm.
xxx
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