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Reviews For Breaking Bella
Reviewer: eviltigereye (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:57 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

i don't think i have told you enough how much i fucking love you and this story, so "I fucking love you and this story!"  can't wait for another update to see where they go from there.  I like how you didn't make either character completely vulnerable and weak about the other, and that they are both strong individuals who are comfortable with themselves and how they are with each other rather than critisizing and rationalizing everything that happens like they are written to do in most other stories!

Reviewer: branlc (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:52 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

LMFAO!!!! Great chapter! They are so perfect together. I got worried for a sec when she went into the woods that so scary hillbillie attacked her or when they got back they car would've been gone. I hope that adrian is out of the picture now.

Reviewer: BellaS (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

I'm glad they made it out of Sisters and that she took back calling it a crappy kiss. I hope Adrian and Jace go away.

Reviewer: MyBell (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

I thought I was going to die when Edward smacked Bella with a stick, I crack up just thinking about it.

 

Adore the story.  You are genius.

Reviewer: dsccc (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Nothing like a road trip with no directions to get two people together. I really hope they don't slip into awkard mode with everone else around them. I really hope Adrian forgot to go back to school.

Reviewer: MeIshAlice (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:35 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

so sweet how hes in lerve with her.....have to update soo!! love the story more than Twizlers!!

Reviewer: laylieb (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:32 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

I DID laugh my ass off!!!  SOOOO funny!!!!  I love this effen story!!!!!

Reviewer: NickleD81 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

I NEVER review,  but the trip through Sisters warrants for me to take a moment to thank you for the funniet thing I have read in a long long time. Bravo!



Author's Response:

Hells yeah!  I'm glad you chose this one to review on, it's my fav. bahaha.  Thanks!

Reviewer: bellebookworm9 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:25 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Oh I was totally laughing my ass off. I love this story; it's my perfect brand of humor. Keep up the fantastic work please!

Reviewer: whiteroses (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:23 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Omg, the URST is freaking killing me. So, how long are they gonna do this dance? Are they still in denial? Are they gonna progress from chaste kisses at all? I mean, she did kiss the men in La Push affectionately so was the kiss with Edward the same for her?

Reviewer: obsessed92 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:17 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

that was freaking hilarious!!! i died laughing in Bella's POV "gotta piss gotta piss..." too freaking funny! i loved this chapter. edward and bella's banter is genius! ha ha ha LOVE it.

Reviewer: daniellemariecullen (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

i reviewed on ff.net already but who cares! im reviewing again bc this chapter was fuck-awesome!!!!!!! e/b fighting was absolutely hysterical and i loved that he got lost, but wouldnt admit it...typical guy!!!! the e/b cuddling at the end was amazing and i cant wait to see what happens when everyone gets together again...*sigh* i love this story and you are awesome!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: wytchwmn75 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 05:00 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Wow, I must have been a good girl. No sooner than I reviewed that I just started this story and ended on THE cliffie, the next chappter is up. No waiting! Awesome chapter, especially the hotel cuddling. I don't suppsoe the next chapter will be up tomorrow?

Reviewer: mrsn (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:56 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

This is just the chapter I hoped for after part 1.  Bella's reaction to the kiss was perfect and them being able to go back to being "them" was great.  I laughed so hard at one point I thought I was actually going to fall off the couch.  Love this story and this update made a totally shitty day a lot better - so thanks!

Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:52 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Good Lord, this is the funniest thing I've read yet! And I DO think things are progressing nicely. We are actually enjoying them slowly fall in love, all through laughter, hilarity, romantic moments, and plain ol' devotion for each other. It's a real joy to enjoy this, and I can't wait for more! WOO-HOO!

Reviewer: gillies (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:50 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Hilariarse!!!!! I love it hahahaha!! Well doone!!! I think i peed a little!! ...TMI???

 

Can't wait til next!



Author's Response:

LOLOL YES!!  I have been WAITING for somebody to say they pee'd a little while reading it, and you're the first!!  high 5, man!

Reviewer: iliveforthis (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:48 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

wheeeeeee! haha, i hope edward doesnt still try to go after adrian, not after he kissed bella, lols

Reviewer: apricot (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

weeeeh!!! i am so excited and HAPPY with this chapter!! thanks so much! bella's reaction is the best that i could possibly hope for. i mean, they weren't awkward or anything. it could have gone terribly wrong but no.. it is just perfect! you really are the best!! i love how they both reacted btw.. it's just so...them (given their characters in the story).. i was LMAo when they got lost and when edward beat bella with a stick! LOL.. but i love the moment in the hotel just when they were about to sleep.. i love that bella kissed him!! weeeh!! is it obvious that i am suuuuper excited with all these? i really am.. i'm wondering what will happen now.. i bet all the others would recognize that something's change between edward and bella. i wonder how they will proceed from thise. at this time it looks like both of them don't want to confront their feelings for each other. but i guess it's to be expected for now since the kiss came out of nowhere..but i hope they realize it fast!! and i hope that adrian girl won't be a problem.. please?  (mimicking alice's famous pout).. hehe.. well anyways, whatever you decide to write about that i'm sure would be great. you've never disappointed me throughout all this. thanks so much! update soon!!! PLEASE!!!

Reviewer: linzk78 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Awesome chapter...I knew they would have to stay in a hotel!!  Loved it.  I loved the sweet kisses in the bed.  Glad to see them getting along so well!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: linzk78 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Awesome chapter...I knew they would have to stay in a hotel!!  Loved it.  I loved the sweet kisses in the bed.  Glad to see them getting along so well!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: whoaacxh37 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

that was nice in a content way, not nice in a sarcastic way. although i wouldn't have minded a nice long description of what was going through edward's mind as closer played and bella sang along, but hey, the guy's gotta catch a break sometime, right? and gotta love best western's abundance of rooms with single queen sized beds(:

Reviewer: xchic (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:42 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

don't worry. i laughed sooooooooooo much, you have no idea. i even had tears streaming down my eyes. its was cute, the scene on the bed. update soon, please

Reviewer: green-eyed storywritter (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:24 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

Best fucking epic chapter ever! God, you are awesome!

Frackly, Edward, a python? Pythons don't hiss, dork! They just... grab you from behind and choke you to death!

Waiting anxiously for chapter 21, and after an outake of the reactions to the kiss.

Reviewer: Esquire (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

HMPH.  OK, the sip of lemonade was nice...but not NEARLY AS TART as is should have been!! Not even a mention of morning wood, which we all KNOW he was sporting??

Sigh. At least she could have given him church tongue when she kissed him goodnight. :(((((  sniffle...sniffle....

Sisters is in Oregon, and despite what they thought, I hear it's a rockin' town and has some seriously cool art galleries. Ya know, they COULD HAVE had some almost-sex, and then spent the extra day(s) they had exploring the town and each other..just sayin'. ;)



Author's Response:

Having anything more would have completely ruined the story.  They're not at that point yet; it's just starting.

I...know Sisters is in Oregon, I did research.  It really doesn't look that bad, but considering how long they'd been driving and the fact that it was dark, they didn't give a fuck.  They were annoyed they were lost and just wanted to get home.  They left when they did because they needed at least a day back in SF to recooperate, and they didn't end up getting in until Saturday evening.  They didn't have any extra time to spend somewhere else.

And no, they couldn't have had some almost-sex, because, again, that would have completely butchered the story.

Reviewer: amym9903 (Signed) · Date: August 16, 2009 04:19 PM · On: Chapter 20: Road Trippin' Pt. 2

O.K.  that was the freakin' funniest thing I think I have ever read!!!! I was crying and trying not to fall out of my chair!!!  I LOVED it!!!!  I wish things would progress a little faster.... but this way it will be so much better when it does finally really happen!!!!  I can't wait for more and thanks for updating this chapter so quickly!!! You're doing a great job!!

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