You honestly bring me to tears with how perfect this is. I want to comment on it all yet theres so much that I won't remember everything.
It's like this every time I review.. I sit here.. and I write the first sentence and then I just sit and stare at the screen not knowing how to explain just how much I actually loved every single word of this chapter. I wish I could write as perfect as you do.
Firstly, I love how you formatted this chapter, it's not confusing in the slightest, and I kinda liked how you didn't state who's POV it was written from. Because its the whole working out who is 'speaking' that adds to the perfection.
I loved the april fools talk Emmett and Jasper had, their stories really made me smile. But its so sad, because they were stories back when everything seemed fine, or at least, weren't bad.. unlike at times for Jasper now. Well, most time actually.
Alice looking in the mirror and looking at herself and describing what she looks like, then ending it with 'Me. My. Mine. I' That was so simple, yet it said so much.
I'm just about to continue with her other details-hair color, eye color, height, weight-when I stop short, my breath catching audibly as I realize the error of what I've just written. Name: Alice Brandon. Dropping my pen back down to the page, I cross it out.
Again, you have a knack for just taking the words 'dropping my pen back down to the page, I cross it out.' and make it into such a simple, yet meaningful sentence. I don't even know how to explain it to be honest, it just really made me realise that you are truly, an amazing writer. No two ways about it.
Emmett's letter was so well written, and if I might say, SO Emmett. I loved it. I really wanted to know what it said, so I was happy to read it. The ending really made me smile when he kept writing p.s :D
Somehow I manage not to shudder.
Again, I love that. Its true, she had such long hair.. and she had been growing it back.. and then she cut it again.. it just shows that she doesn't want to be the same girl anymore, or at least shes trying to make herself someone else. She said she doesn't want to find her family, so she is changing something about her that made her who she is.
I'm losing her.
The harder I try to find her, the faster she slips away.
There are no words for that, it says it all in that sentence. Very nice detail by the way, I like how Jasper went back to where it happened so that he could try to understand what made Alice kind of fold in on herself so to speak. I did wonder whether he would return to the lake again.
The painter and the canvas in one. A fraying rag-doll, concealed by a porcelain mask.
No words. Great symbolism :)
The one thing I really really loved about the next section, was Emmett and Alice's relationship growing.. Emmett is such a breath of fresh air for both of them. I really think Alice needed the banter that Emmett provides, and Emmett does it so good as well.
I smile halfheartedly up at him and take his hand.
We both look away.
Powerful and extremely heart breaking.
I knew that when Alice walked in with the take out, that Jasper wouldn't tell her he cooked something for her. It really made me sad that did. He overcame his biggest fear of being near the cooker.. only for it to be a wasted effort.. poor Jasper. I do wonder what it would have done to their relationship I mean, not that it would have affected them much, but I wonder whether Alice knowing he had over come something as big as he did would change something? Does that make sense? It's upsetting that he threw it out though.. :(
"Thanks for calling, Jasper," she adds. In the background, I hear Chip laugh.
That is a nice, lighthearted sentence. I really can't wait until Jasper meets Chip.
My reflection stares back at me from the mirror.
I turn off the light.
Again, no words needed here, that just shows how perfect that is. Am I saying the word perfect too much? Too bad. I'll keep saying it.
Something that's real.
Nice closing line :)
I think I've outdone myself yet again with your review. I still don't think I got it all either.. I apologise for the rambling thoughts, I just wanted you to know what I loved and why I loved it. And also, how perfect it is. Yep, I said it again :P
Favourite story, ever. Oh, and favourite author too :)