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Reviewer: madisynblack (Signed) · Date: June 26, 2010 06:52 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Alrighty..... two months worth of a chapter and wait.... Let my reviewing begin!!
Ty for the first 2-3 paragraphs to kind of recap on what happened in 34, I'm happy that you didn't copy/paste from the last chapter, you recapped with different descriptions, so kudos for that!
I really love the inner turmoil that B is feeling when J gets home... 'To jump his bones, or not to jump his bones?" For your B to dress like that and have the sultry adulteress in the works, I was surprised she didn't succumb to her own sexual desires and raped J right there! (personally, I would have! hehe)
B was amusing when she was getting angry with J and the constant jokes were thrown out... making B furious, but it made me chuckle =)
I'm especially happy that they, finally, laid the cards on the table. I was cheering J on when he was leaving himself vulnerable for B while he explained his actions. B kept attacking him, but it lead to more specific details... Bravo B!
B took the news about Charlie’s talk very well... At first, I believed she would be furious if she found out, but she's smart to understand where her father was coming from... Thank you for including that!
The rest thereafter.... was INCREDIBLE. You truly wrote that for all the J/B fans that wish she picked him over E. lol! Annnnd, in the midst of reading, I might have replaced B in my mind with myself....only for a second =P
You really pulled this chapter off! Even though it was a long wait, I'm really glad you worked on this as hard as you did... It left me sated until your next post! *haha see how I used your line there!*
Also, I don't personally agree with one of your reviewers, Ambellisha, who commented "oh my god you totally have to be kidding? is this it? no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you have much talent but i hate this bella!!!!!" I must say... I love how you transformed the book B into someone who wants to choose, wants to make mistakes, wants to take some chances, and chooses the right guy! *biased! Oh well* I truly believe that B in the books just plainly sucked. She was just a mindless drone when it came to E. Yea, yea... she love him, but J always had the effect that you can do anything you possibly would want to be or do as a human, and J didn‘t treat her like a small child >.<. But different opinions, I guess. I do agree, however, that you ARE extremely talented, and I will be making an acct to nominate your story! The category "Story You Would Have Bound into a Book to Keep On Your Shelf" is the one that jumps out the most for me =)
Keep up the good work, and update as soon as possible!!!!! <33
-Madi
Author's Response: Hi Madi!
Your reviews are a good reason for me to update as much as possible. I just love them. Thank you for taking the time to highlight all the things you liked about the chapter. Considering how much time I take writing it, it's so nice to know that it's appreciated. And, don't worry, I won't tell anyone that you pictured yourself in Bella's place. It'll be our little secret. Thank you for thinking of me in terms of more nominations. I'm lucky to have a reviewer like you.
Erin
Reviewer: sure_sure (Signed) · Date: June 26, 2010 04:59 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
You are DEFINATELY NOT too old for this!!! I Love this story!!!!! Thank you so much for writing it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. :)
Reviewer: Lou Lou (Signed) · Date: June 26, 2010 01:25 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
'It was in that very moment that i realised that the guy i was in love with was a complete moron' Best line ever!
I love dirty-man hands, my husband was a mechanic for 11 years and only just recently has changed profession. I miss his strong, dirty-man hands, I didn't think I would but I love a men who works with their hands. ;)
This chapter really struck a cord with me, it was well worth the wait. I will definitely be voting for CFC.
As always love you work.
Louise.
Author's Response: Hi Louise!
You're probably watching Eclipse right now. I hope you had a great time w/your friends. So, I wanted to officially thank you for your review. I'm so glad this chapter struck a cord w/you and that it reminded you of "dirtier" times w/ your hubby. Thanks in advance for the votes. I can't tell you how much I appreciate it. Talk to you soon.
Erin
Reviewer: LOVE_VANESSA (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2010 06:24 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
it is A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!!!!!plz update asap!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. I'll try to update a lot quicker next time. :)
Reviewer: twirl1 (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2010 06:17 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
LOL...hahaha....I love that last line...I laughed so loud...everyone in my house was asking me what was so funny....Awesome amazing chapter...I am so glad they talked and cleared things up... Bella gets a gold star for getting her man back....update soon...
Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad I had you laughing like that. That's a great compliment. Thank you for reviewing. :)
Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2010 03:36 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Well, about damned time! I thought they were going to enter a nunnery or the priesthood soon! ;) What could be better than hot shower sex, girlfriend? I LOVED it!! Jake was adorable and precious and Bella was right on with her Cinnamon Peeler story/poem. Great imagery.
It was well worth the wait, Meany! Good luck with the Underdog Award! I'll be voting for you! Oh, and thanks for the shoutout.
Are you having an Eclipse party? Are you going to invite me this time? I can't wait!
Author's Response: Hi Crazy!
It took me a while, but I'm finally getting to responding to your review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. And honestly, that poem has stuck with me since high school. I'm just glad I finally had a chance to share it with people.
You are more than welcome for the shoutout. I just wish I could do more for you because I absolutely LOVE your story. Speaking of which, what's the ETA for your next chapter, missy?
And, hells yeah I'm having an Eclipse party. Whenever you can get out of bumfuck, let me know. ;) Talk to you later.
Meany
Reviewer: Luvtwilight14 (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2010 10:27 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
I know it has took you two months, and I have desperately missed this story, but I have to say this with vigor IT WAS WELL WORTH THE WAIT!!!!!!!!! Damn, girl! Whew! We have waited for that for a while now and you definitely did it justice! Love love love the last sentence! That was just priceless! I am so glad to see other people using oldie songs in their stories as well. If I wrote a story on here my whole song list would be from the 80s! HA! And it so funny how you and ysar, two of my fav Jake/bella story authors always seem to update on the same day which make my day sooooo very GOOD! Hopefully Leelator & Bloodofbeckie will have another one of her great chps up soon too!!! (have to give props to all my favs, ya know?)
Thanks for the great start to the weekend! (but reading this while doing a yardsale in 95* weather isnt helping matters for sure!)
Hugs, Stephanie
Author's Response: Hi Stephanie!
It means so much to me that you're willing to wait for my updates. (Not that you have a choice, of course. But, it's still nice)
The Duran Duran reference was done at the suggestion of my beta. I thought it sounded cheesy, but then I figured a way to fit it in where it played on the cheesiness factor. I'm glad you liked it.
I certainly don't mind you leaving props for all of your fave authors/stories. I love them too! How To Seduce a Werewolf is epicly funny and amazing.
Thanks again for always leaving such wonderful reviews. They make my day.
Erin
Reviewer: wordslinger (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2010 08:07 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Wow. Great chapter. Totally hot!! I'm still reeling.
Pregnancy scares can really freak a guy out. Especially when the girl's father corners him. LOL!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it!
Erin
Reviewer: ambellisha (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 09:59 PM · On: Chapter Six
oh my god you totally have to be kidding? is this it? no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you have much talent but i hate this bella!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm sorry you hate this Bella. Personally, the one from the series was lacking in any real character. Since it's fanfiction, I just wanted My Bella to be a stronger person, someone I thought would be worthy of Jacob. Anyway, thanks again for reviewing and taking the time to share your opinions.
Erin
Reviewer: liljules (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 07:30 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Holy crap! Damn you came back with a bang lady. Some ridiculously sexy shit throughout the whole chapter. Simply perfect:)
Author's Response: Hi there!
Thank you so much for the awesome review. I'm so glad you enjoyed all the "sexiness." Let me tell you, that was a bitch to write. Hopefully, we won't have to wait as long for the next udpate. Thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 07:03 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Holy smokes! That was insane...way hot... I don't think you could make Jake any hotter if you tried... damn..... I actually have goose bumps! .....shit, how am I suppose to go to sleep now? .....maybe a cold shower.... crap.... I can't do that, I'll think about J/B in the shower...wishing it.. was.. me....damn,,,I'm screwed,,.... shit .... I wish .....
Author's Response: LOL! Thank you for the awesome review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter. I'm really happy that the "hottness" factor was there for you, because honestly, that was the hardest part of this chapter to write. So, how'd that shower go anyway? ;)
Thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: diamondheart (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 06:41 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
*whew* well, um *gulp*...that was worth waiting for, Erin! I think that surely Jake is convinced that Bella truly loves him as he is...but just to make sure, I think I better re-read the whole thing...
Congrats on the nom - I just can't figure out how leelator narrowed it down to one kiss! All the ones you've written are winners as far as I'm concerned! <><3
Author's Response: Hi Carmen!
Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to this review. I have to save my poor wrists, otherwise the typing kills me. Anyway, I'm so glad you liked the chapter and that you found it was worth the wait. Lord knows I didn't want to make you have to wait as long as I did. Hopefully the next chapter will be better. Anyway, take care and I'll talk to you soon.
Erin
Reviewer: froggyqueen (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 05:47 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
lol a helmet! It was worth the wait!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. :)
Erin
Reviewer: tazz (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 05:09 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
OMG so worth the wait - the sex was so hot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Erin
Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 03:12 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Glad to see that they are back to their horny ways. Don't leave us hanging so long next time.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'll try not to leave you hanging so long next time. :)
Erin
Reviewer: mittap (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 02:01 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Erin-- Oh holy f-in hell..... Amazing chapter. I have so been waiting for the make-up and you have NOT disappointed, not that I thought you would. Everyone has there own taste as we can tell by the wide range of Fan Fic, however-- this is so totally my very, very favorite story. I loved early on when Bella says Liz wants both Jake and Edward--- and Jake finally gets it and says ewww, funny. You've made my week, thank you ;-)
Author's Response: So, did you like it? LOL! Thank you so much for yet another wonderful review. Your reviews make my day! I'm so honored to be writing your favorite story. That really means a lot because I know there's a lot of J/B fanfiction to read. I'm glad you enjoyed the humor I tried to interject throughout the chapter. Even though they were dealing with serious stuff, you gotta be able to laugh at it...at least a little, right? Anyway, thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: LCB (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 01:00 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Well worth the wait. Glad they figured it out. Wow way hot. Amazing Jake shower sex is a get out of jail free card as far as I'm concerned!!! Thanks for writing and sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. Now I know that if I take too long between chapters, all I need to do is put in a shower scene, and all will be forgiven. ;) Thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: pcaulfield (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2010 12:52 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Five (shabbyapple)
Eek! That poem is one of my favourites, I love that you used it. It was totally appropriate for this story. I think Bella forgave Jacob too easily, but I'm not the forgiving type so I'm biased. And I'm relieved they finally got it together, I was worried during that hiatus between chapters.
In general, I really like this story and please keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm so glad you love that poem too. I really did read that back in high school, and it's stuck with me ever since. I was glad I had a reason to share it. Anyway, thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: Lou Lou (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2010 07:08 PM · On: Chapter Thirteen
Douche-wad, gets me every time. Don't you just love Jacob? You can always count on him to tell you like it is. Loving it......again!
Author's Response: Hi Louise!
I'm so glad you're enjoying re-reading this story. :) Good news, I'm hoping to post tonight. Keep your fingers crossed for me.
Erin
Reviewer: Lily83 (Signed) · Date: June 19, 2010 12:07 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Four (shabbyapple)
HOLY SHIT is what I'm going to say too! AMAZING! I keep saying this but I can't wait for the next chapter.. I hope they finally get it going! :D
"Since when did Jacob start taking lessons from Edward?" That was priceless!! :)
Author's Response: Well, I must tell you that the next chapter has been a pain in my butt for weeks. But, I'm ridiculously close to finishing it. I hoped to post it tonight, but now I'm looking towards tomorrow. I don't want to rush it if it's not ready yet. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and hopefully you'll enjoy B/J's reunion even more.
Erin
Reviewer: Lily83 (Signed) · Date: June 19, 2010 11:19 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Three (shabbyapple)
Bella is awesome when she's drunk! :D
Poor Jake with blue balls! I'm still giggling :P
Great chapter! *hurries to the next one*....
Author's Response: Drunk Bella is a lot of fun to write. I'm glad you enjoyed her. Thanks for always reviewing.
Erin
Reviewer: Lily83 (Signed) · Date: June 19, 2010 10:08 AM · On: Chapter Thirty-Two
I'm back!! LOL
I've been taking a break from fanfics and I haven't really thought of anything twilight related lately. My obsession for Jacob has calmed down a bit too after I started watching True Blood and reading Sookie Stackhouse novels (I love Eric) :D
But it was really nice to start reading this again.. Though Jake was sooo annoying ;D (I still love him though..:)) But I've gotta admit, him being annoying like that makes me want to read the next chapter even more :D I'm curious to know how they'll handle this.
It's funny how most Twilight fans always love Alice. I feel like I'm the only one who doesn't like her. So it felt SO GOOD when Bella finally stood up for herself and didn't let Alice get her way! Thank you!!
You manage to keep even these filler chapters so interesting that I can't wait to read the next one when you said it's getting more exciting..
Author's Response: Yay! I haven't heard from you in so long. Welcome back. Yes, Jake is being pretty annoying in this chapter, but I'm glad you still love him anyway.
You're so right. A lot of fans seem to love Alice, but personally, I think she's just as manipulative, if not more so than Edward. Of course, I'm trying to be nice to her, since the majority of fans do like her. But, My Bella isn't going to put up with her BS anymore. So, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks again.
Erin
Reviewer: Livefree (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2010 11:15 AM · On: Chapter Two
Wow... Seriously, that's all I can say. That was almost a tear-jerker.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it.
Erin
Reviewer: Lou Lou (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2010 09:16 PM · On: Chapter Thirty-Four (shabbyapple)
I thought I'd just check to see if you'd up dated. I have been waiting very patiently and i can't wait for the next chapter, I know its going to be H.O.T!!!!!!!
Louise
Author's Response: Hi Louise!
So, I'm still working on the next chapter. I actually sent it to my betas this weekend and they suggested a couple of things to help me make it better. So, I'm going to be working on it a lot all week so that I can hopefully post by Sunday. Wish me luck with that.
Hope all is well. Talk to you soon.
Erin
Reviewer: yayi2284 (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2010 10:52 AM · On: Chapter Fourteen
Ok, i see that youre a Jacob lover and i like that you wrote about what couldve happened. But did you have to portray Edward sa a jackass?? we all know thats not him and its just not believable. I must say though im loving this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm so glad to hear that you're enjoying the story. Yes, obviously I am a Jacob lover, but I'm really trying to be fair to Edward. He may act like a jackass sometimes in my story, but I think overall I'm giving him a positive overview. Of course, I do have plans for him, which require him to grow and mature a bit, something that I don't think he was capable of in the series. Anyway, I hope you stick with me for the ride. Thanks again.
Erin
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