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Reviewer: twilighter11 (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 04:13 PM · On: I've Got News For You, Eddie: I'm Not Fighting With You. (v)

awe yay! Jake cracks me up and i love how formal edward is with everything he does.....hahahah nessie seducing jake? I cant wait for the next chapter! glad I dont have to lol



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm glad you thought it was funny! Poor Jake just doesn't know how to handle that.

Val

Reviewer: twilighter11 (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 04:06 PM · On: Shopping, Clothes, and Tiny Dressing Rooms (v)

great chapter! it actually surprised me that jake enjoyed the shopping.



Author's Response:

Thank you! You know, that kind of surprised me, too. I didn't intend for him to like it. It just worked out that way. Weird.

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:50 PM · On: Morning Breath (v)

I can't help but laugh at all the teasing that went on in this chapter.  Nessie definately seems a bit spoiled about always getting her way.  I guess I'll just have to see how Edward and Bella deal with this continuing issue.  ;)



Author's Response:

Yeah, lots of teasing! Nessie is very spoiled and is used to everyone giving into her. I hope she isn't too obnoxious about it, though. I didn't want the character to come out seeming all bratty. Do you think she's bratty? Because that's not what I intended. Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:45 PM · On: All I Wanted Was to Rip His Head Off. Is That Too Much To Ask? (v)

Val,

This was an amazing chapter. Words kind of fail me now.  The emotions swirling all around were so strong, the words you used painted a beautiful picture of love, hate, anger, and love and acceptance again.  It will take all of them to help Nessie heal, but I know that with her family, she will.  Especially with jake by her side.



Author's Response:

Thanks. This was a hard chapter for me to write for many reasons. I think with Jake's support, she can get through just about anything.

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:35 PM · On: Chapter 11 The Arrival of the Spawn (v)

Oh, I am so sad for Jake!!!!  And why on God's green earth would Alice put Nessie in an outfit like that to go out with Nahuel?  Grrr...

I enjoyed hearing Jasper recount Nessie demanding he not hold back in her training.  ;)  That really is a "Nessie" thing to say, she must have gotten that from her mother.

What really got me about this chapter was the camaraderie among Jasper, Edward and Jake.  They, out of all the other feel and know what each other is feeling and they know how much Jake loves Nessie and how much it hurts him to see her go out with this other guy. 

In addition to seeing the relationship between Jake and Nessie develop, I enjoy seeing the relationships with the rest of the Cullens and Jake evolve.



Author's Response:

Poor Jake. Alice should have known better. Hehe - I'm glad you liked that part with Jasper! I tried to give Nessie a lot of traits from both Bella and Edward. She has many of their good and bad qualities.

I like that you picked up on the dynamics of the relationship between Jake and the Cullens; how things have grown and evolved. Thanks for the great review!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:18 PM · On: Chapter 10 Dazzling (v)

Wow.  Nessie has definately been a good student and learned a lot from her aunts.  That poor waiter never stood a chance.  I actually expected her to dazzle the guys at the movie theatre but having Jake teach them proper etiquette was WAY better!!!! 

Hmmm...Nessie's just now learning how she truly effects Jake.  This could get interesting. 



Author's Response:

That's a skill Nessie learned very well! I could just picture Rose and Alice demonstrating that on poor, unsuspecting human men. Yeah, the waiter was trying to deal with something way out of his league! I just love the idea of Jake teaching those punks a lesson at the movie theatre! I'm glad you liked it!

That's dangerous information for Nessie to have. Think she'll use it to her advantage? I do!

Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:00 PM · On: Chapter 9 Charlie's Got A Gun

Haha!  Oh my!  The horror at being caught by your grandfather!!!!  Oops!  Yeah, hormones, we'll blame it on the hormones.  ;)

At least they made up.  And though it wasn't make-up sex, it was getting pretty hot and heavy.  ;)

I loved how Jake started to pull the card about Charlie and Sue. 

Great job on this chapter!



Author's Response:

Can you imagine getting caught by your grandfather? The image of Charlie standing there with his gun drawn just cracked me up! As soon as that image popped into my mind, I knew I had to use it!

They did get very hot and heavy. Those darned hormones! lol!

Hehe! Jacob just had to tease Charlie about Sue! Thank you so much!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 11:53 AM · On: Chapter 8 Me, Jealous? Damn Straight!

Awww...poor Jake.  I really dont blame him, after all, he just professed his love for Nessie and she's going out on a date with the only other guy in her "species".  I'm glad Jake managed to calm himself down enough to get out of there without hurting Nessie though.  That would have been bad, really bad. 

Hmm...how are they going to fix this problem.  At least we all know they end up together in the end.  ;)



Author's Response:

Yeah, poor Jake. He was going through Nahuel overload. That would've been pretty bad if he hadn't calmed himself down.

Yes, we know they have a happy ending! Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 11:45 AM · On: Chapter 7 Oh Crap, There Goes Any Chance I Had (v)

Val...

This was so sweet!!!!!  It was everything I was hoping would happen, and even more!  What blew me out of the water was Rosalie talking to Nessie.  The things she said, who knew she had such a kind heart underneath the "Ice Queen Barbie" exterior?  hehe  Alright, so I already figured she was kind deep, deep, deep down but still.  It just goes to show how much Nessie has changed the dynamics of the family. 

And the subtle way Edward gave his approval, it was just so totally well, Edward.  He does love his cars, and he loves Nessie and Bella even more so it makes sense that if he trust Jake with Nessie then he trusts Jake with his cars.  Still, you had to know that was a thrill for them.  :) 

Hmmmm...a date with Nahuel.  This is going to be interesting to say the least.  ;)



Author's Response:

Awww, I'm glad you liked it! I really like the idea of Rose coming to Jake's aid like that. She would rather suffer through an eternity of dealing with him than to have Nessie be without him and be completely miserable. Writing that part made me like Rosalie a lot more than I did before.

Oh, I'm glad you thought that was an Edward thing to do! Nahuel ... interesting. That's one way to put it. Thank you for your awesome reviews!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 11:01 AM · On: Chapter 6 The Wheel's Spinning, But the Hamster's Dead (v)

I like how you worked this chapter...it could have been really heavy and serious the entire time, but instead you added in all the humor between Rose and Jake in the beginning.  The joking (and the way you wrapped it up) nicely displayed their ever evolving relationship; the way they can hate on one another and still have fun, without getting too close.  And by Emmett commenting after he was only sure he would not be breaking up a fight you have demonstrated that with both their temperments there have been actually knock down drag out fights. 

I love Edward's comments, and seeing him finally get to play the "father" figure as in, you won't hurt my daughter role. 

Really you can't be too hard on Jake or Nessie.  They both have points and Jake knew this was a possability, that Nessie would need time.  In all reality the bond between them is so strong I don't think she could completely walk away even if she wanted to.  Their bond is so strong it's almost physical.



Author's Response:

Oh, I can't stand for things to be too serious for too long! I'm glad you liked that part between Jake and Rose. You got out of it exactly what I hoped people would!

I liked Edward's role in this chapter. If he wasn't a vampire, I can totally see him dragging out a gun to "clean". Whatever it takes to intimidate any guy that wants to get involved with his little girl.

I agree that Nessie and Jake both had valid points. I see that bond they have the same way you do. It really does seem almost physical, doesn't it? Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 10:43 AM · On: Chapter 5 The Birthday Girl (v)

Awwww....this was so sweet!  I love that he made a duplicate of himself for his Nessie! 

And it's cool to see all the things she is learning/has learned from her family.  But what with her gene pool, I wouldn't expect Nessie to be anything shy of a full fledged member of MENSA.  hehe :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the wolf carving! In Breaking Dawn, it seemed like everyone was so attached to Nessie and just enthralled by everything she did. I thought it would just be natural for the whole family to be involved in her education. Yeah, she's pretty much brilliant! That's one big reason I'm glad this is from Jake's POV. I'm not intelligent enough to do Nessie's POV. Thank you so much!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 09:57 AM · On: Chapter 4: Separations & Temper Tantrums (v)

Hey Val!  This chapter was a really great insight into the depth of the relationship between Nessie and Jake.  The fact that he was starting to physically feel the effects of their leaving before they even left is amazing.  And I never thought of Jake going to Quil for comfort but of course that's where he would go.  Quil is the only other person who could understand and help him deal.  Claire is just too cute too!

All I have to say is, Go Nessie!  Way to get your way.  All in all though I do wonder exactly how badly she is being spoiled, and I hope it doesn't detract from her personality in any way.  The Cullen household just cannot handle another Diva besides Rosalie.  hehe



Author's Response:

Hey! Thank you! That bond between them is something I really wanted to explore. I just kept wondering what would happen if they were separated by a certain distance or for an extended period of time. I was trying to make Claire extra cute! I was remembering what my daughter was like when she was that age.

Nessie is seriously spoiled! That is still evident after she matures, but I think it adds to her charm in a way. Yeah, Rosalie is enough of a diva for the entire Olympic Peninsula! Thanks again!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 09:46 AM · On: Chapter 3 The Tea Party from Hell (v)

Oh.My.Smurf!  Nessie is hilarious!  I can't believe she was in on the whole thing from the beginning.  She is spending way too much time with her deviant aunts.  I love this friendship/big brother phase of their relationship.  It's perfect and I like how the Cullens have accepted Jake into their lives (albeit probably grudgingly).  :)



Author's Response:

Oh my smurf! LOL! Yeah, Alice and Rose have had quite an influence on her! I love this part of Jake and Nessie's relationship, too! I think so many people were freaked out at the idea of Jake imprinting on her and thought it was creepy. My main goal for this part of the story was to show that it's not creepy at all. He doesn't think of her that way yet. A romantic relationship with her is so far out of his mind, it's practically nonexistant. The Cullens are very accepting of Jake, for the most part. Some more than others. Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 09:36 AM · On: Chapter 2 What Do I Look Like, a Horse?

Val,

This is brillant!  I love that it's told from Jake's POV.  You've written him in such a good light.  This really fills in some of those missing moments from Breaking Dawn.  You know that so much more occurred than was written, and now we can see it through Jake's eyes. 

I couldn't help but laugh at how much Nessie has everyone wrapped around her finger.  Well, that and the fact that she wanted Rose to join her first.  You know there was nothing that could stop Jake from leaning into her and rubbing on her.  Alice, now that was priceless!  Poor Jake when she kicked him.  ;)



Author's Response:

Thank you! I love Jake! I was hoping that making him a bit more mature, but still the same big, goofy, loveable guy, would endear him to more people.

Nessie learned very fast that they all fawn all over her! I liked that part with Rose! Jake just can't help but irritate her! And Alice ... I love her! That seemed like a very Alice thing for her to do!

Thanks again!

Val

Reviewer: 3daygirl (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 09:21 AM · On: Prologue, Chapter 1: Renesmee

Val!  This is magnificent!  Really, I'm not just saying that.  I had seen this story on the site for a while but I've never been a big Nessie fan.  How wrong I was about this story...yep, I can tell all that from the first chapter. 

I like how you started with the actual wedding.  The way Jake describes his friends and family and gives us a basis as to how relationships have changed.  Such as him now being friends with Edward, his still loving Bella but in a different way, and how Carlisle and Esme had become parents to him in his eyes. 

I really look forward to seeing this story and all the changes that have taken place. 

Oh!  I also love how you talked about when Nessie was born, and before, how he needed to be close to Bella, was drawn to be close to her. 

You have done a fantastic job.  Oh!  Maybe I should mention how I started reading your fic...I'm a fan of "A Smile That Explodes" and that story led me to the "Pixie" story which inturn led me here.  :)



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you decided to give it a chance!

When the idea for the story came to me, that was the main idea - to start with and end with the wedding. I like having that knowledge as to how their relationships end up. Then I have to come up with ways to bring all of these characters to where they need to be by the time the wedding rolls around.

I absolutely love "A Smile That Explodes"! Adrienne is so talented and "Pixie" was her fabulous idea! I was just lucky enough to be asked to come along for the ride! Thanks again!

Val

Reviewer: doowee (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 01:38 AM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

gogogo!



Author's Response:

Going going going! lol! Thank you for reviewing!!

Val

Reviewer: Baby_twi (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2009 12:14 AM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

You wrote yet again a nice chapter and love how you are taking things slow. Makes the story that much more wonderful.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you feel that way!

Val

Reviewer: Candi_ass (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 09:52 PM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

hahaha i nearly fell of my seat laughing at the banter between Jacob and Seth, that was amazing!! i'm so excited for the next chapter! GREAT JOB!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad it made you laugh! I was laughing like a fool when I was writing it, so I'm glad I'm not the only one! Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and rating!!

Val

Reviewer: mellyfrisco6 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

i liked this chapter. i like ths interaction between the werewolves, i really like seth actually. and jacob has so much difficulty staying in control it was hilarious.

keep on writing i want more !!



Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! I love Seth! Jacob has good intentions, but he might not be able to stick with them. We shall see! More will come soon! Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and rating!

Val

Reviewer: Candi_ass (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 08:37 PM · On: What Will I Do If She Says No?

holy crap, i think my heart stopped!! exquisite... simply exquisite.



Author's Response:

Well, aren't you just as sweet as can be? I'm so glad you liked it because I tried really hard to get it right! Thank you so much for reviewing and rating!!!

Val

Reviewer: lauraweasely (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 08:24 PM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

I love Seth, write a fic about him! Still enjoying this and giddy whenever you update. I can't wait to see their wedding, I'm sure you'll write it beautifully. Such tender moments.



Author's Response:

Oh, I love Seth, too! Hmmm, a whole fic about Seth ... maybe? I'm glad you're still enjoying it and I get all giddy when I see reviews! Thank you!

Val

Reviewer: faeriegal713 (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 06:08 PM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

One of the huge differences I love between the vampire romances and anything with Jacob in it is that Jacob will make anything funny.  Whether it is his fiance trying to act normal around him (swimsuit and pjs) or he is trying to literally sweep her off her feet, he will always do something funny.  I don't know whether or not to just laugh at him or to pat him on the head AND laugh at him.  At the same time though, it is really sweet.  He's acting like a sixteen year old kid who's trying to figure out how to be around the girl he's had a crush on since middle school.  Actually, that's probably a pretty accurate comparison here...  I'll have to think more on that later.

The scene with Seth was cute too - mainly because Seth was stuck in between a rock and a hard place and resentful of that.  Luckily for himself and Jacob, Jacob has actually grown up a bit and was able to demonstrate that to his friend.  Oh, and Leah's over reaction is priceless!

Last but not least - I like that new night time ritual they are coming up with.  It's sweet and kinda corny and perfect.



Author's Response:

That is one of my favorite things about Jacob! He always brings a smile to my face and usually makes me laugh! Yeah, that kind of is the way he's acting, isn't it?

Seth - I love Seth! He's so cute and sweet! Can't you just imagine Leah ready to storm the house? The thought of it made me laugh.

Yeah, that was corny, but I thought it was sweet. I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and rating!

Val

Reviewer: agiismsxx (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2009 04:33 PM · On: Bikinis, Hot Tubs, And Head Injuries. Oh My!

=D YAYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm so glad that you won on TA =] You have no idea.

This is such a sweet chapter. I LOVES it!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much Adrienne!!! I couldn't have done it without you! Not just with the chapters you looked over for me and gave your opinion on, but also for all of the fantastic encouragement through all of your comments! I've gotten to the point where every chapter, I look forward to seeing your comment! When I see that you've posted one, I get all giddy! You've been an awesome cheerleader and I really can't thank you enough! Woo! Look at the stars!!! Thank you for reading (again!), reviewing, and rating!!!

Reviewer: ColdOneCullen (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2009 01:50 AM · On: Ever Seen A Dazzled Werewolf? It's Not A Pretty Sight (v)

Congrats on writing a really good piece of fic here. This is the first "Nessie/Jacob" fic i have read cause none of the others really caught my attention, but this is great. Very well thought out and the story runs along at a good pace. I think you did a wonderful job of fleshing out this relationship and please keep up the good work. Oh, and your tasty little one shot from the dressing room was great to!

Well done and cant wait for the rest. Will we be seeing some Isle Esme action at the end perhaps???

:)



Author's Response:

My gosh, thank you for such kind words! I'm really glad you're enjoying it! The dressing room one shot made me nervous, so I'm glad you liked it! I will be submitting my next chapter either tonight or tomorrow. I hope you continue to enjoy it! Nope, there won't be any Isle Esme action at the end. The wedding ceremony is where it will end. I've been considering doing a little wedding night one shot, though. I'm not sure yet. Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and rating!

Val

Reviewer: nothing_is_as_it_seems (Signed) · Date: March 31, 2009 01:09 AM · On: Ever Seen A Dazzled Werewolf? It's Not A Pretty Sight (v)

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww i LOVE it :D so cute :D mor plase?? grta writ and great story :D



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you love it! I'll be submitting the next chapter either tonight or tomorrow. Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and rating!!!

Val

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