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Reviewer: LindyP (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

I came across your story & am really enjoying it! Looking forward to your next post!

LindyP :)

Reviewer: twilightfan1969 (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 04:18 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

This was a great chapter! I am happy she is going home with Charlie.

Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 02:21 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

DON'T WORRY ABOUT BEING CANON - I love things OOC and AU - if I want canon I will read the damn books again (don't let anyone give you crap about i! *the shrink steps off the soap box*

As for the chapter - loved it. I was so bummed that, typical ProtectWard is not going to tell Bella about Alice's vision...jeez, no matter what story he NEVER gets it! NOW this is NOT a criticism of you or your story - actually that is quit IC for Edward...sigh...it just makes me want to bitch slap him...with a tree...or a boulder...hard.

AND hearing that Alice saw her DRAINED WHY ON EARTH he wouldn't even ASK her if she wanted to be changed (i mean she is CHANG-ING already!). You write him very consistenly - and the scene at the end where B felt so torn about her allegiance to Charlie and he love for Protectward...was very sweet. But after he messed up and left her earlier, he better tread lightly on the not telling her stuff bc when she IS a newborn there might be hell to pay (that is something I would enjoy - B throwing a tree at Edward for all the shit he doesn't tell her! LOL)

Thank you so much for upadating...love the story!



Author's Response:

"But after he messed up and left her earlier, he better tread lightly on the not telling her stuff bc when she IS a newborn there might be hell to pay (that is something I would enjoy - B throwing a tree at Edward for all the shit he doesn't tell her! LOL)"

Hahahahaha!  I'll remember that when I write that scene.  That's hilarious.

I'm trying to keep my Edward true.  He wouldn't be Edward if he wasn't an over-protective ass at times.

Thanks for the lovely review.  I haven't had time to get caught up on Shrinking Violets yet.  It might be May before I can get to it.  I will be doing some traveling and will take my laptop and read fanfic when I'm not working.

Reviewer: inlovewithtwilight (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 12:12 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

very nice chapter!i cant wait for the next one!!!!you have no idea how nervous i was to see what was going to happen...if she would yes or no!!i checked to see if the new chapter was posted every day twice a day!!!i love your story!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I'm pleased that you like my story so much, and I am happy that you like what I did with the answer to the proposal.  I always thought Bella was nuts for saying no--I mean she had Edward (Prince Charming incarnate) or the rest of the male population of the world.  I'd take Edward--lol!  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: k8ew8e (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 12:00 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

This was a great chapter! I cannot wait to see how this plays out with the nomads!

Reviewer: nessiebells (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 08:51 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling

Go Edward!  LOL. I even I feel liberated by that speech. I had to giggle a little when Emmet put his 2 cents in.

Reviewer: nessiebells (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 08:17 AM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful

WOW. Thats all I can say.

Reviewer: nessiebells (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 07:00 AM · On: Chapter 22: Changes

I love the way you are transforming her. I cant wait to read the rest.

Reviewer: dolphingirl1997 (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 06:38 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

That was probably one of my favorite chapters so far.  You are correct it is not cannon but it gives it that same feel and yet something more.  Great job!  Can't wait for the next chapters!

Reviewer: Re-Re (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 06:13 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

So good.

Reviewer: nessiebells (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 05:10 AM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

I love the fact that you kept Edward there to see what he was doing to Bella.

Reviewer: SnoopyPuppy1106 (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

PLease hurry and finish some more chapters I want Bella back with The Cullens and happy.

Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 03:20 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Thanks for writing. I think it's good. I wait to see what happens next. Just get James and Victoria out of the way quckly...Please!



Author's Response:

The terrible trio will not get out of the way quickly--sorry.  We have a few chapters to go before we see them as anything but a vision.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: ladybri (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 02:56 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

I LOVED that chapter!!!!! Though go figure Charlie would come for her when the other vampires are coming as well!!!!! I am nervous because the thought just bhit me, I hope this story ends happily! I cannot wait for the next, please hurry!!!!! Hanging by a thread to know what is next!!!

Reviewer: dancingblondie (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 02:30 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

AWWWW, poor Edward :'(

Reviewer: ebonyeyez1 (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 12:50 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Even though there is no smutty action {darn}, this is still an awesome story.  I still think though on their honeymoon (unless nothing happens), you should be a little descriptive.  I mean afterall it's a tender moment.  We already missed the moment when both of them lost their viriginity to one another, which was an opportunity to really show the depth of their love for one another.  It's almost like the SM version (which was rated G), yet your version is more PG-13, especially since you rated your story NC-17.  It may put some people off.  I understand writing sex scenes especially when it involves teenagers maybe bothersome for some folks, but its a fact of life. 



Author's Response:

I'm not one for graphic sex.  I might be a little more descriptive.  But I also don't write a sex scene in every chapter.  I don't want my story to be a porn (no plot and all sex).  I rated it NC-17 to warn teens that I do deal with sex in this story, and in case I get a little graphic, I want to cover my bases.  Thanks for reading it anyway.

Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2009 12:43 AM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

I love this story!  I do hope Bella gets back to Edward soon.  

Reviewer: TeamJasper13 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 10:51 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

No I definitely loved that she said yes so quickly and with only that one exception cause I really don't blame her for wanting to hold off on telling everyone, of course though I knew that it wouldn't be kept secret from the Cullens.

And Alice's reaction to their idea of eloping was fantastic. So very Alice.

Jasper was terrific in this chapter too, loved the teasing. He was acting very Emmettish, lol.

Alice's vision....wow. I really felt bad for Edward and I was thrilled when Em and Jazz followed to cheer him up. But then I felt like punching him (even though it would probably result in a broken hand for me) when he made it clear that he didn't want Bella to know about the coming threat. Jasper was so right that Bella should have a say in what happens and I'm sure she'll see it that way too. One of the most annoying things about Edward is that tendency to keep things from Bella. I have a feeling he'll pay for that decision.

Loved all the lovey-dovey stuff and Edward's plans to lose his v-card, lol! And Charlie came for Bella-yay! But that means she has to leave Edward- boo. Loved it! Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Thanks TJ.  Edward wouldn't be Edward without his tendency to keep secrets from Bella.  I know he'll pay for it.

I always envisionsed Jasper and Emmett teasing Edward like brothers.  I think even Jasper had a lighter side.

Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: witchykitty (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Best fic I've read so far and the only one I've bothered to rate. Keep writing!!!!



Author's Response:

Wow.  I'm really honored, witchykitty.  Thanks.

Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 08:33 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

FAN-FREAKIN'-TASTIC! Just when I think I can't love this anymore, I fall deeper and deeper!

Please post more asap!!!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you fan-freakin'-much!  You are very kind.

Reviewer: berdb (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 07:25 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Love it.  I think some awkward talk between bella and charlie would be funny.  

 

 

Reviewer: antipyro (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 07:11 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Oh, WOW!  Three more strangers????  Could this be a replay of James/Victoria/Laurent??  Wait, where am I???

I can see Bella's reasons for not wanting the ring until after Junior year and taking her time with Charlie's feelings as to her changes.  With any luck, Charlie will see through her heartache and let her be with Edward, or something will happen that results in the same thing, kinda,...

Great prose on her accepting the proposal - it was cute and just sassy enough to be a Bella answer!

Reviewer: loveroftwilight (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

luved it please update soon!

Reviewer: my1edward (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

Great chapter, liked every bit of it, very satisfying.  It would be nice to know what Bella was thinking when E proposed, etc.  Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Since this is only Edward's POV, we don't know what she's thinking.  Though I have thought about writing the story from Bella's POV after I'm done with this.  We'll see how you all feel about that towards the end, whenver that is.

Reviewer: nessiebells (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 8: Accident Magnet

I like the way Rose is much nicer in your story. And there is so far not alot of drama. I cant wait to read more.

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