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Reviewer: twilightjie (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 04:42 AM · On: Burning
that was hot!
Reviewer: bga1974 (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 04:23 AM · On: Burning
Wonderful stuff !!!! I am so happy that this story is in the top 10. It SO should be. I can't wait for more.
Reviewer: BethanyKnight (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 03:56 AM · On: Burning
this chapter rocked. loved it. ungh. only word for it. can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: Deavlynn (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 03:43 AM · On: Burning
Woot! Hot steamy Twister sex! It doesn't get any better than that. lol
You have some really great lines in the story so far - so I will think up some art for you. I'm tempted to go with "Every kitchen should come with a Bella".
Keep up the awesome work.
Reviewer: AndImaVirgo (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 03:37 AM · On: Burning
“Say it,” I commanded in a rough voice. “Say it… out loud.”
Love that you used that line - nice touch. And so HOT! This is definitely one of my favorite stories, I loved the build up and the silliness and flirting - keep those chapers coming!
Reviewer: Morrigan728 (Anonymous) · Date: January 12, 2009 03:07 AM · On: Burning
“Say it,” I commanded in a rough voice. “Say it… out loud.”
HOLY FUCK! This just made the forest scene 1,000 times hotter! I already loved your story, but now I have audio to actually make me see Edward's face!! LOVED IT!
Reviewer: dolphin62598 (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 02:19 AM · On: Burning
Great chapter!! PHEW! I'm glad Edward didn't go all emo when he found out Bella was a vigin! Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: obsidian (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 01:30 AM · On: Burning
i really connected with this chapter, with Bella and Edward's vulnerability. i always know it's a good story when i get a little heart tug when i read a certain line, yours had it! congrats on the top ten!
Reviewer: Jime (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2009 12:48 AM · On: Burning
Wonderful chapter, that really is a cool way to lose your v card :)
Reviewer: EandBforever (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 11:45 PM · On: Burning
Great first time for Bella! It was romantic, even if it was on a twister mat!
Reviewer: TWILIGHTRULESZ (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 11:19 PM · On: Burning
is there going to be more to the story?
Reviewer: giulietta85 (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 11:13 PM · On: Burning
the simple thinghs are the prettiest..
Reviewer: Feisty (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:44 PM · On: Burning
Alright, my real vote would be for "Every kitchen should come with a Bella." Because that's my true favorite line from this story. But seeing as you can't include the names of the characters, my vote is for: "Forget fight or flight!!! Stay and snuggle!!" :)
Reviewer: ieatfiction (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:42 PM · On: Burning
i loved the movie reference! "say it....say it out loud"
Reviewer: Feisty (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:38 PM · On: Something Else
Okay, I'm being a good reader and trying to find the perfect quote for the t-shirts. Then I stumbled on this one:
"I wished the floor would open and swallow me, but I doubt that would erase my shame. Edward would still be standing in the hall thinking What is up with that complete spaz and pervert who just got swallowed by the floor? "
Not right for the shirts or anything but, still, pretty damn funny!
Reviewer: lmkf (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:21 PM · On: Burning
this was a erally good chapter i am looking forward to Alice's reaction when she finds out that they have hooked up considering i think that she set the situation up.
Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:14 PM · On: Burning
YES! THIS IS THE CHAPTER WE'VE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR! THANK YOU!!
this story is amazing. you deserve that spot in the top 10, maybe even a higher spot. i cant wait to read more of this story. im looking forward to bella and/or edward's conversation with alice. im 99.5% positive that she had something to do with this. then i again there is a 0.5% im wrong. lol please update soon.
Reviewer: falconcranelove (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 08:02 PM · On: Burning
O.M.G that was soooo HOT! And their little insecurities are cute too. LOL I have nothing else to say right now, I'm still in a bit of shock from teh hottness! LOL
Great job hun! Can't wait for the next one! ~Cat~
Reviewer: BRANDY_D (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:44 PM · On: Burning
"It’s a good story- losing your virginity to the perfect guy on a Twister mat while being snowed in. It’s quite original.”
I totally think you should use this line for your t-shirt. And for teh artwork....you should get somebody to draw and guy and a girl laying on a twister mat!
Reviewer: lobsters4ever (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:43 PM · On: Burning
Thanks for the lemonaide. Quite yummy!!
Also - "say it -- out loud" LOL!!
Reviewer: missmaj (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:40 PM · On: Burning
That is hot... and Edward's inner monologue had me laughing at the same time.
"say it... out loud" priceless!
Reviewer: christine30974 (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:39 PM · On: Burning
WOW! Keep up the great work and Congrats on being number 6 on the list. That is awesome!
Reviewer: FearlessNot (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:34 PM · On: Burning
Amazing.
You know there are a couple of very huge bouncy beds, kitchen counter tops, a couch... OHHH... IS THERE A HOT TUB OUT BACK?!
Breathing in the lemony goodness.
Reviewer: DSCH (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:32 PM · On: Burning
LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!!!
Reviewer: alaskangirl (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2009 07:30 PM · On: Burning
ahhhh great chapter!! so loving this!
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