I think your Bella was much more brave than the one in the books. But I Loved your story. Very erotic! 

Great story.  I loved the slow progression, especially in the begining.  It made the newness and wonder of the whole thing believable. 

What! That's it! What will I do now?! Uuugghh! Man, you should write the honeymoon scene as an extra/bonus scene! That would be awesome! Please continue to put stories on here! 

Awww I love a happy ending.

I like this story, and I enjoy the slow burn.  I do think Edward would need the slow persistence, and I like that he is giving in.  I think he would probably start to pick up the pace about now, and I think he would start feeling more comfortable with their intimacy. However, i would like to say that one thing I am having trouble digesting  is how Bella seems to be Charlie's maid and chef.  I know she did sometimes do those things in the book, but I don't remember her being so enslaved to it everyday.  She is his daughter, and I don't think he wanted her to feel like she had to do these things nightly.  Its just not normal.  I know she wanted to to an extent, but when I read stories where everyday she drudges herself home to cook Charlie dinner and clean, it feels a bit overdone and almost abusive.  No teenager wants to cook every night and clean for her father, so maybe you could back off just a bit on the cooking and cleaning for Charlie as an every night occurrence.  In the movies even more so than the book-I loved Charlie!  But that Charlie wouldnt have let her cook and clean every night for him.  He would have told her that he was grown and could do it for himself, so I just think the excessiveness of it makes him look like a douche, and I don't think that's what you intended.  I do love the story, though, and I can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

Hi! Thanks for your review. I love thoughtful reviews with feedback.  I think my emphasis on Bella cooking/cleaning, etc has been unintentional. In the books, she definitely does these things, so I wanted to include them. But really her going home each night and feeling responsible for Charlie's dinner (which I think is supported by the books), is what I use in my writing to end the slow burn between B&E.  But I haven't been reading the story as a whole (since I've been writing it chapter by chapter), so it's helpful to know that it seems like Bella is doing a lot of housework!  Certainly that's not realistic teenage behavior, even for Bella :)

Anyway, thanks for reading and taking the time to review. I love hearing from readers.

OMG.  Let's get it on should have been the CD. LOL:  Love it.

Bella can't catch a break; leave it to Emmett to say exactly what's on him mind and turn Bella all sorts of red. I love me some him!

Fun story so far, thanks for sharing.  

Now that's my kinda sleepover, lol.

When are you going to update again? You can't leave me hanging!! Love your writing!!

Only 4... So sad.  

another great chapter, please post again soon, i cant wait to read more

Oh my gosh! Emmett is such an ass! (Hilarious, but an ass.) Poor Bella! haha.