I'm with Bella being with Felix would be a huge nightmare. But to find Marcus just sitting in her room watching and waiting for her is weird. What was he searching for? Searching for her bond with Edward? It should still be there.  She still loves Edward has little doubts now based on half truths/twisted remarks/lies from Aro. Getting an insight into Marcus' frame of mind.  Knowing the reason for his total disinterest in his existence and the world around him was in the retelling of his love story.  If he ever found out his love was killed by her brother Aro, I wouldn't want to be Aro for any sum of cash or other incenitive.  Marcus' fury as a warrior would rain down on Aro and he would be destroyed with that vengeful rage. It would be the collapse of the Volturi power because the need for the power would all have been a lie from the start. The threat was never there it was all constructed with schemes/plots from Aro including the murder/destruction of his sister Didyme.  Carlisle is staying with Edward along with Esme.  His coven is being divided making them vulnerable for attack as well as separation/losing themselves as a family unit. Something the Volturi has wanted for a long time since they have been the biggest coven outside of them.  Especially since they live a very different lifestyle (living on blood of animals not humans.) Carlisle doesn't have the entire story correct about the Bella incident.  They are all thinking that Bella is dead.  No one has been thinking that she has been kidnapped.  Jasper is thinking the wolves have been involved blocking Alice's vision to warn them of the fight between Edward/Bella, Bella driving alone, Bella's car accident, and pending car fire.  Without the wolf involved Alice would have seen that Bella wasn't harmed and was taken against her will.  Also that she was in Volterra in a cell that has been pimped out with antique furnishings befitting a royal ward. Edward still in his mind locked in his world of himself with Bella in his life.  His body still in shock and motionless.  Recognizing nothing in the real world only the created world within his mind where he is happy with his soul mate Bella. Craziness is definitely in the future for all to come.  I already feel for Charlie when they call and tell him Bella was in a car accident and burned with the Aston Martin.  My heart is breaking for him now.

Seriously I know you want to write more and faster. I hate waiting for updates. This is the only story that I am reading (no other good ones out there) and so I become very impatient. You should updated more... But if you don't, know that I check my Twilighted everday to see if you've updated knowing that you haven't. :-(

Author's Response:

LOL!  Yes, you are correct.  I want to write more -- all the time.  Day and night this story is going through my head!  I wish RL would stop interferring, TBH.  I want to continue with weekly updates, but I'm beginning to lose that battle.  Look for them weekly until you hear otherwise!  And thanks for your enthusiasm -- it certainly does inspire me.

Oh that was great. Good to see how Edward is handling it. When will they realize she is in Italy. Please update soon.

Author's Response:

Oh how fun it is to write wicked and suspense!  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.  Next chapter next week....

I am really enjoying this story.  I can't wait to see how evrything works out.  One little suggestion however.  Some of Aro's lines are a little off.  I think he would say "mother and father" rather than "mom and dad."  And I don't think he would use the analogy of a "wet noodle."  Maybe break like a brittle twig in a winter storm" or something like that?  And the saying is "waiting for the other shoe to drop" not the other foot.  Not sure of the origins of that saying, but it is shoe.  Other than that, I really like your Aro.  He is a smooth talker and very true to character.  He would use words and mind games to get what he wants.  I love Dominic.  He is Jake-ish but not too similar.  And I find myself really hoping he and Gianna get their HOA. 

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  HOA???

Raise my Hackles?  Quite the opposite.  That was a brilliant series of propagandia.  You set that up well.  <claps>

That was worth waiting for.  I said I was looking forward to your telling of her corruption; you do not dissappoint.  Keep it up, I'm curious to meet the Bella that ends up at the other end of this.

 

Dominic final conclusion is that he is valuable to Aro because of Isabella.  Now he needs to figure a way to help her against Aro.  Aro was so cruel to have Gianna admit that she was involved in bringing him to Volterra for Aro's scheme.  Dominic will have a hard time forgiving her this time.  Once betrayed, forgive, and give second chance.  Twice betrayed, forgiveness so/so, another chance doubtful. Trying to use her to be released, he didn't realize Aro couldn't care less about Gianna.  In fact, if Dominic killed Gianna would be one less thing on Aro's list he would need to complete.  The threat of having her decaying body in the cell with him and the idea of no food or water.  Pretty gross thing to visualize.  Besides he still loves Gianna, she is his whole world, he couldn't kill her.  Will be interesting to see how Aro's plans will fail by his faulty thinking.  Even with his great intellect he doesn't know what people will do for love, the sacrifices made, the crazy and wild things that can happen.

Very juicy chapter, love the backstory of Aro's treachery!

Author's Response:

Thank you, thank you!!  This chapter popped out very early in the story -- it just had to be told.  We knew Aro killed his sister and Marcus was none the wiser, so Aro must have loved his sister.  Aro is so fun to write because he is utter evil yet he truly believes what he is doing is for the best of vampire kind.  Twisted is fun to write.  Anyway, I submitted the next chapter just now, so hopefully it will be up soon.  Thanks for reading.

Nice Sidebar. 

I like the view of the internal culture within Volterra. 

I have noted that most Twi-fan writers gloss over Chelsea and Corin; favoring the witch twins, Demitri, and Felix more.  I approve of giving limelight to the other valued members of the Guard.

I've, on occasion, wondered about the realistic expectations of fidelity amongs murderous, hedonistic vampires after centuries of time together.  Without some magical Geas enforcing it, like wolf-shifters, can it be expected?  I approve of your solution, while not nessessarly popular amongst twi-fan readers, it does seem the most likely senario.

Your scene with Dydme was excellent, sad, and emotionally moving.  I like that it haunts Aro still, but that he has learned how to deal with that ghost.

I guess I'm feeling a bit loquacious, as well as approving, this review.  I'll temper my general enthusiasm by closing simply with this:

Good job, I liked your Aro PoV, and look forward to next chapter.  I'm almost on the edge of my seat anticipating what you have in store for Bella.

Author's Response:

So sorry it's taken me so long to reply.  My computer at home won't allow me to!  So the boss is away from his desk, and I am thanking you for the awesome review/comments.  Taking a trip to "the dark side" has been thrilling and fun.  I agree, I noticed my readership for this story is much lower than my fluffier stories, or many readers don't have interest in the Volturi or some have even said having Bella and Edward apart is too stressful for them.  However, as a writer, it just feels necessary to try other themes and approaches.  This story will twist and turn, but hopefully will still satisfy.

So thank you for hanging in and giving me feedback/comments -- it is greatly appreciated.  The next chapter was submitted today (thanks to the boss's absence) and will hopefully post very soon!

Great chapter, I'm on the edge of sanity, anxiously awaiting the next update. Looking forward to the fiesty tough side of Bella to come forward. Its torture watching poor Gianna suffer!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  Fiesty Bella surprised me!  I guess she is just getting pissed off and fed up!  Good for her!  I had whimpering female characters anyway...Oh, and Gianna, I do have to get back to her, but I am so entralled with Dominic, Bella and Aro, she has slipped to the back burner!  But don't worry, she is still key...

Edward can't face the truth (as it appears) that Bella has died in a car accident with the car explosion. I'm surprised that Edward, Alice, or Jasper haven't arrived at the scene.  Just to check out and look for clues. The vampires would recognize the scent of a wolf.  Since Dominic did exit the car to get Bella into Gianna's car.  Also checking further around the area would alert them to other vampire scents as well.  Granted Alice's vision would be effected, but the doubt of whether Bella was actually killed would be there.  The other scents could be tracked and then possibly locate where airplane took off.  It wouldn't give them location of where plane went but might give them an area to further search for answers.  Right now Edward is living in a fantasy world with Bella and his two children. Gianna double dosing Dominic so he doesn't phase on the small private jet was smart, too bad though, would be nice to have him destroy Logan.  Life will be changing for the three of them Gianna, Dominic, and especially Bella. My heart goes out to the grieving Cullen family and Charlie along with Renee the loss of Bella. Edward had good reasons for not wanting to return home to his family.  Listening to all their thoughts about loss of Bella and their feelings towards Edward and the loss of his soulmate.  It would just increase his own grief 10+ fold.  I hate Aro.  I hate Gianna and her selfishness.  Even if she has had a change of heart, she hasn't stopped things from happening.  My heart is just breaking for Bella in her current state as well as all her loving family over her loss.

Author's Response:

Grief does appear to be affecting everyone.  Hopefully all your questions will be answered adequately...the weather change, the fire, the delay of Alice and Jasper's arrive in addition to their grief and need to care for Edward all take their toll on the trail.  But mostly, I'm glad to see (or read) you are emotionally involved in the story!  And if you think you hate Aro now...just wait!!

Poor.... well poor everyone.  That was expectently painful.

See you next time around.

 

Author's Response:

Oh, I know!  The only one happy is Aro and that's just wrong!  Unfortunately, we have to endure that a bit more, but not in the end (hint).  Hope you stick with the story and thanks for the review!!

OMG!!!! This is a great story. Please write more soon. Want to know what's going to happen to Edward. Will he find Bella? Keep up the good work. Certainly had my heart racing in parts of this story

 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review!!  I love it!  I did submit another chapter last week, it is still in the queue awaiting validation, but should post very soon.  And thank you for the encouragement!