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Reviewer: KrisBowes (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2012 11:46 PM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

im one of those ppl that read storys that never review, and its not b/c i dont like the storys its b/c i never know what to write.

anyway i just wanted to say that i cant wait to see how the rest of the story turns out, and that i dont think that i have LOL so much reading a story in a long time

Author's Response:

Hi Kris!

Thank you for the review. You did a good job! :) Just knowing you are enjoying the read is a great review. I'm glad you are getting some good laughs at my characters' expense. LOL

I'll update in a few days. Keep in touch!


Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2012 06:50 PM · On: Chapter 19: Distractions

Okay, at least there was a little citrus at the bottom. I've been agonizing, not having any form of loving going on :[ I mean, besides Edward and his slores :] And I'm really happy with how Edward turned around and wants to make things with Bella better. And I find myself finding things throughout the chapters that I want to say, but I have a horrible memory, so I usually forget some of the things I wanted to mention by the time I'm done with the chapter :[

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2012 03:43 AM · On: Chapter 18: Do the (After)Math

I was honestly close to tears during and after her returning her things. She's just so innocent and kind. I feel immensely bad for her and I wish I could give her a hug. I really hope that Edward makes up with her soon :[ It's so depressing to see them both this way. Hopefully Angie's visit with help Bella out :] I'm also happy I was right about Edward being a snoop (on Bella's laptop), I was sure at least someone had done something with it.

Author's Response:

Hi again, Shanniles!

I loved that you were so moved by sad little Bella when she returned Edward's things. He felt the same way. See how I did that? He wanted to hug her just as desperately as you did.

Thanks again for all the reviews.


Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 09:00 PM · On: Chapter 17: True Confessions of Stealth Transgressions

"Oh, Jesus Christ! Bella! You saw that giant, life-like, vibrating dildo?"

Best. Line. Ever.

And wow...This is the most I've laughed so far throughout this fic :] But I'm stressing out on what's going to happen next...I really hope I don't have to sit through a school day :[ That was extrememly boring for me. Oh, well :] Everything else has been amazing. But Edward, I can't imagine what he's going through XD It's hilarious. And poor Bella. She just did what basically any other girl would do. COME ON!

Author's Response:

The best line ever was you writing "Best. Line. Ever." to my line "Oh, Jesus Christ, Bella! You saw that giant, life-like, vibrating dildo?" Bwahahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!

I was rolling on the floor.

Tears. Really.



Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 08:08 PM · On: Chapter 16: Enlightenment

Ohmigod, I'm so happy she didn't lie. I was dreading it :[ And how he took care of her was extremely cute. Too bad it doesn't seem like they'll be getting together any time soon...Or will they? (Please say yes!)

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 15: In the Dark About So Much

Can they both be on the floor and in each other's arms? Sounds good to me :] I'm seriously waiting until they both give in, this is excruciating. I honestly wasn't breathing at this last part. It was like I was feeling it with Bella. Great chapter!

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 03:44 PM · On: Chapter 14: Puzzling Pieces

So before all of the new characters came into play, I felt like I knew who some of the reviewers were...But now I'm not so sure :[ I also don't know how much I like it when I have to wait to move on in a story while the story is being written in the other person's perspective...I like it, but at the same time I don't. Also, for some reason I was sure that when Bella left her computer on with her site up (or a review...I don't remember) that Alice or someone was going to go in there and realise (since I thought Alice was the person who makes Bella's banners...Star-Ho?) who Bella was. Anyway, great chapter, and I can't wait to see how this dinner goes :]

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 05:23 AM · On: Chapter 13: Not What One Would Expect

Did not see that coming. And I'm also sad for Edward...That was quite funny, though :]

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2012 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 12: Post Time

Loved this chapter. Definitely a first for me, with the whole story in a a story? Kind of thing :] I've liked it though. Also, the banner is sexy, just saying. Hopefully I'll get to see more of Edward's reaction next chapter.

Reviewer: Amber20 (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2012 09:44 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Story Has to Start Somewhere

This story is amazing and so different. But the anticipation for Bella and Edward to be together is tooo much! I can't wait for your next update!

Author's Response:

Hi Amber!

Thank you for the review and storylove. I know the anticipation is too much...I really like my UST. Can you tell? Wait, yes you can. ;)

Next update iin a few days.


Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2012 01:34 PM · On: Chapter 10: Into the Lair

Well, Bella's in deep shit :] I'm actually kind of excited. I wonder if I'd do he same thing as Bella if I was in her situation...Hmm...

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2012 09:18 PM · On: Chapter 9: Perceptions and Misperceptions

If I was in the creepy kind of mood I'd probably check his underwear drawer to see what kind he wears...Yeah. And I really hope both of the days are wrapped up in the next chapter. I don't think I can go without Edward (and Bella...Together) for a whole chapter.

Reviewer: momof2monkeys (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 03:03 PM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

So happy your back!! Can't wait to find out how much, if any, Bella heard! 

Author's Response:

Hi momof2monkeys!

Your command. More story in a few days. Thank you for the review.


Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 02:11 PM · On: Chapter 8: Departures

Bella a little jealous? :] I would be too, after I find out that dream wasn't real, and that someone else was getting the same thing that night. Hopefully she won't have to wait too long? (Or is that just my wishful thinking?) Great chapter :] And it looks like Bella's got a good start on her new story.

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2012 03:51 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Sorry for the lack of reviews for the last couple of chapters. I was without Wi-Fi for the last couple of days and was using my phone to read :] I didn't want to have to deal with having to type on it and then go back and fix grammatical errors...Because I wouldn't be able to leave them if I saw them. Anyway, awesome chapter(s)! I've been loving it so far and I can't wait until things really start heating up ;]

Reviewer: erinlouk (Signed) · Date: June 02, 2012 11:42 AM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

So I started this a while ago and never really got around to catching up.  I have to say, I have never laughed so hard in one chapter as I did in this revealing fuckery of a barbecue.  I can only imagine what Bella has to say now :) Can't wait to hear how this plays out!! Thanks for sharing!


Author's Response:

Hi erinlouk!

I'm glad you got a laugh and a half at chapter 34. Good stuff, huh? Yeah, this is totally a fuckery of a barbecue. Poor Edward. I keep imagining him trying to put a bandaid on a gushing artery. lol

Next chapter in a few days. Thank you for the review.


Reviewer: scammy1980 (Signed) · Date: June 02, 2012 12:32 AM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I have final caught up at thats where you leave it!!! That so not fair! I have to know what happens next, I can't wait for the next chapter.

Thank you so much for this story its amazing! I haven't laugh this hard in a while. I love Edward's convesations with himself, they're always highly entertaining. But may favourite part would have to be, Edward reading, his reactions were brilliant! I'd love it to read chapter 2 along with Edward aswell!

Again Thank you. Love this story!





Author's Response:

Hi scammy!

I'm glad you are enjoying the read and getting a load of laughs at my characters' expense. ;) Book Club with Edward while he was reading Bella's chapter 1 was fun, wasn't it? ;)  We might get to join him for chapter 2 as well. ;)

Thanks for the storylove!


Reviewer: scammy1980 (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 07:40 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Story Has to Start Somewhere

Hi I just started your Fic, I love it, I have been Laughing my ass off the whole time, (my husband thinks I nuts) I was up all night I only got up to Chapther 12. But the RW calls and I have to go to work! I plan to finsh when I get home. I just had to let you know, how much I am enjoying the story and how talented I think you! I can't wait to read more!!

Reviewer: 1ljreader (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 03:13 PM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

Crazy people. All of them!

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 02:11 PM · On: Chapter 4: Mr. Silk Pants a.k.a. Mr. Big Stuff

That was awesome...The song and the chapter. I laughed very, very hard :] And do you make up the reviews, or have people actually sent you those? And is it irrational that I want to punch all of Edward's slutty guests in their throats? No? Okay, good.

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 05:39 AM · On: Chapter 3: If the Hat Fits, Wear It

Very nice :] I liked her comment about the hat to Edward. I'm sure it does fit. Hopefully he will act better when he's not half naked, barefoot, with a boner.

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 04:38 AM · On: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life

Wow...No, I can't say I saw it happening quite like that. I sure hope things get better...Or at least stay was funny :]

Reviewer: Shanniles (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2012 03:26 AM · On: Chapter 1: The Story Has to Start Somewhere

I honestly love this so far, although I'm kind of confused at the end...Maybe I just need to re-read?

Reviewer: i_heart_ecullen (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2012 01:32 AM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

Great Great chapter update pls pls pls update soon!!!!

Reviewer: Human Moment (Signed) · Date: May 27, 2012 04:42 PM · On: Chapter 34: Missing Pieces...aka WHAT?

I am dying. Hahahahahahhahahahaha. Literally just lying out in the sun giggling to myself. Kudos to a hilariously brilliant wonderful fantaaaaastic, nearly-as-fabulous-as-alice story! I have only ever reviewed once before (I know, stingy huh, I just get nervous), on Master of the Universe, but this story is just SO HARD TO PUT DOWN. Please please please write soon! 

Author's Response:

Hi Human Moment!

Thanks for the wonderful review. I feel honored to be mentioned in the same breath (paragraph? lol) as Master of the Universe. I'm glad I have you hook-line-and-sinker reading this story. Thanks for the love. Glad you got some giggles and guffaws in the sun.


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