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Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 10:07 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Yes, yes, and definitely, yes.  Loved it.  Quite witty witht he play on names.  Can't wait for more.

Reviewer: mysticfighter (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 09:47 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Wow - that was one hell of a dream Bella had there. I wouldn't want to wake up. Loved the way Jake made Bella and Edward reconsider their first and second bad impressions of each other.

Reviewer: JaobsStephanie (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 09:41 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Holy Mother of EC!! I want  a dream like that!!! Well with less EC and more JB maybe.

Keep'em Comig Suger Britches! Can't wait :^)))))

Stephanie

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 08:46 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Yes Bella did indeed out dream herself and lmao on the name switching through and the chick flick hahahahhahahahaha omg lmfao!!!  Post again soon!!!

Reviewer: amelia30 (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 08:18 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

that charter made me pissed   .first is it possible in any universe edward cullen to be afraid of jacob black?be angry at him ok be jellous of him,hmm be sorry for him totally but afraid,nahha.second  and most  why the basketcase gets  a threesomme with edward ,his alter ego and pat?(i loved the name).so unfair!!!!anyway  edwards confusion about pbj`s and bj`s was my highlight i actually felt tears drop.the way your edward`s mind works is brilliant.and it makes me tolarate his fear to be bitten by the barberian dork it would ruin the awesommeness of his face.what `s next?ican`t wait

Reviewer: Discordia (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Rowr! Well I am jealous of Bella's dream. That just sounds delicious. Loved the chapter, I thought they all made some nice progress. Jake seems like a good friend and Edward offering to help was nice. Love the PB&J mix up, poor Edward. Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Emochan (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 08:02 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

I am totally in love with this story. The whole hat thing is hilarious. I really like Jake in this story, too. He seems to be pretty perceptive. It's too funny to read Edward being terrified of him. Nice change of pace from other fics I've read. The fanfic angle looks promising. I'm curious to see what happens next! Hope you update soon!

Reviewer: prettykisses (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 07:52 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

Jake didn't need any redeeming in my book so he just got better for me. Edward, yeah he redeemed himself a little.

Bella well she's just too funny. Defs out dreamed herself. wonder if the neighbor was watching?

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 07:08 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

I had to really laugh when I was reading what Edward was thinking as "Big Burly" was walking across the street.   ROFL!!!!   Damn...I think all of his inner dialogue was absofuckinlutely HYSTERICAL....including the BJ....I mean PBJ....LOL!    I know your Edward seems like a bit of a jerk sometimes, but I really think he is just a hurt lost soul, and somewhere alone the line he started to behave like an ASSHOLE...lol.    Edward thinking that Bella was a dancer, he he.   That's funny!    I hope Edward finds out that Bella is not really dating Jake soon, but it will make for some funny times.       I'm not sure Edward will be able to date a brunette now...with Bella next door.     It is really clever how you created the whole Stardust movie and now she's writing the fanfiction.  Very clever.   I feel that somehow Edward could be writing as a fan to Bella soon, especially after he sees he similarities of his life with the fanfiction.   He would have to be involved with the writing of the book or involved with the movie probably from Stardust, and maybe he follows the fanfictions.   Gah....such a great story, and now we're just waiting to read more.   I'll even change my Depends before I get to the next chapter....lol.

Reviewer: Looby Luscious (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 7: Aide-de-Camp Black

A BJ sandwich, huh? Interesting, but not as tasty as peanut butter, I imagine!

Edward is definately the author. I forgot about Stardust Lane!

Again, really funny. These chapters are finished way too quickly :(

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 07:21 PM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

You know....I don't think you would ever have to worry about not bringing the funny to your story.   You have an incredible imagination, and never cease to amaze me with your little funny lines that keep me laughing.      Your Jacob already is extremely funny, along with your Edward and Bella of course.    Several parts had me laughing, especially Dickman and Dingbat.....ROFL!   What is it about boys and the drooling over their cars!   Don't get me wrong...I'm impressed over a good looking car...but man...when you get a man near a pretty car.....I swear they get all overheated and aroused, lol.     I foresee a lot of funny times ahead with those two guys.   Now...add Emmett into the mix....pure gold.     Got to love it!   When Edward came across to help move her stuff, and was holding her hat....explaining it would be inappropriate for him to wear it...lol....I was laughing.   We didn't hear yet what Jake actually told Edward about his relationship with Bella....so we're all dying to know....but we do know that Edward saw Bella dance, and now Bella knows it too....and I've got to say....wow...so embarassing.    Time to come up with a great story Bella....lol.     It appears that either Edward isn't into peanut butter and jelly or maybe he knew it was already a "sticky" situation and wanted to get out of Dodge.   LOL!   Love your stuff.   Can't wait for an update! 



Author's Response:

Hi

I've been off on a little vacation so I'm slow getting back to reviews from chapter 6. I already posted 7. You already know that. I'll get there.

But as to 6: Glad I gave you more to laugh about. Dickman and Dingbat...off on their first date. ;) I don't know what the lure is with cars...I mean yes, I get the attractive appearance of a sports car over say, a mini-van, but still, it seems to be firmly locked into the male psyche.

Bella...just so deliciously awkward...dancing in her window, getting caught and the worst thing is, she was forced to interact with him and didn't know he'd seen her. LOL That just cracks me up.

Thanks for the review once again. I love how you detail what you enjoyed and laughed at. Thanks bb!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Sunflower (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 04:11 PM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

Snort. i knew that your pennmame was familiar. i love this quirky story.



Author's Response:

Hi Sunflower!

So you've read me before, huh??? Welcome back, in that case. Thanks for the Quirkystorylove!!!

-bannerday

Reviewer: samekraemer (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 11:00 AM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

Great chapter!  Love it.  Love the "more manly...less tranny" comment!



Author's Response:

Hi sk!

Oh goody! Somebody loved my "more manly...less tranny" line. LOL That was one of my favorites. Thanks for the Chapterlove and the review!

-bannerday

Reviewer: nightline (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 09:21 AM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

Is Edward discovering his nice side - or did he have an ulterior motive for helping? Hmmmm... given his general asshole-ness, I'd go for the latter. Although it was quite nice of him to give Jake a ride; but maybe he was just scared that Jake might kick his ass if he didn't? Oh, I'm hoping for some insight into Edward's head :-)



Author's Response:

Well nightline, you'll just have to read chapter 7 to decide if Edward was trying to be nice or if he had an ulterior motive. There's a little bit of insight into the Ed-Head in chapter 7. Hope you like it. Thank you for reviewing!

-bannerday

Reviewer: nightline (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 08:54 AM · On: Chapter 5: From Bad to Unimaginably Worse

You're a genius. One sentence had me rolling on the floor, laughing hysterically... "Nearly twelve hours later, at approximately one thirty a.m., with hat in hand,..." LOL...



Author's Response:

Me again!

Well, I don't know that I'd call myself a genius. Deranged, perhaps. Sadistic, maybe. Irreverant, certainly. So you quoted my own personal favorite line back to me"...with hat in hand and erectile dysfunction in his pants..." That still makes me giggle. I don't know where this stuff comes from. It's frightening. LOL

Thanks for the giggle.

-bannerday

Reviewer: nightline (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 05:16 AM · On: Chapter 4: Mr. Silk Pants a.k.a. Mr. Big Stuff

I'm still crying with laughter here. Please tell me that this story comes from your imagination and isn't based on your real-life neighbor. Please!



Author's Response:

Hi again, nightline!

Really...I should have given you readers a special note to grab tissues before you began to read. you're not the only crier-laugher out there. This story does indeed come from my imagination. Scary isn't it? No, I don't have a real-life hot neighbor who runs around semi-naked with a semi or a full-on. If I did I'd probably have to quit my job so I could spend more time ogling that neighbor.

Thanks for the review and the giggle!

-bannerday

Reviewer: nightline (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 3: If the Hat Fits, Wear It

No, I definitely never had one of those days, and boy am I grateful for that fact.

Their first meeting was all kinds of hilarious, the second one was just as funny, and the third one - *giggles*... Now I can't wait for the fourth!



Author's Response:

Hi nightline!

I'm glad you didn't ever have one of THOSE days. More importantly I'm glad I've never had one of THOSE days! lol Something tells me these two will have a string of "bad meets" where they constantly misread each other and the situation. But when they finally get it right...Hmmm...

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch!

-bannerday

Reviewer: nightline (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2011 04:14 AM · On: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life

My poor budgies just fell off their cage because I screamed with laughter... Yes, please continue (yeah, I know, you already have, but still...), I haven't had that much fun reading a fanfic in ages!



Author's Response:

Sorry I gave your budgies such a fright! Well..I didn't, you did, but I do feel partly responsible. Glad you got a good laugh...er...scream out of that chapter! Thaks for the review!

-bannerday 

Reviewer: DreamCatcher10 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 08:45 PM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

Adding this to my favorites! I really have enjoyed it so far! Update soon please!!!



Author's Response:

Hi DC!

Thank you8 fopr fave'ing me. Glad you are enjoying the read.

Thanks for the review!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Daybreak (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 3: If the Hat Fits, Wear It

Poor Edward, it really wasn't his morning, was it? LOL. What he had to endure to get back inside his condo... I hope the rest of his day is better. It's a joy to read stories that are well written, and this one really is. And I just love stories that make me laugh, which this one surely does.



Author's Response:

Hi Daybreak!

No...not Edward's day at all. Poor baby! Thank you for the compliments on my writing and my silliness. ;) I'm glad you are enjoying the read!

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch!

-bannerday

Reviewer: mysticfighter (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 08:59 AM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

Jacob wolf-whistling at the sight of Edward's ride LOL! I'm glad this Jake seems to be a nice guy. Irina and her backrub-remedy for erectila-dysfunction is priceless. Never thought Eddie saw Bella's performance - ha, ha. So they both made an ass of themselves in front of each other and hopefully found out  that the other is not as awful as they initially thought. Love it - so funny!



Author's Response:

Hi mysticfighter!

I really had fun trying to sneak in little dog-references when I wrote about Jake. lol He is a nice guy here and he's tolerant of his good friend, Bella. Glad you liked Irina..I think she added a little exotic flair. LOL So yes, they both keep making fools of themselves in front of each other and getting irritated for no good reason. I think this might have to continue a little. I just love them at odds with each other...so awkward!

Thanks for the storylove!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Msarkie (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 08:16 AM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

In regards to the BITCH hat - I used to work at a Wallyworld in a seedy area with some very strange customers.  One hateful woman must have at least had a sense of humor, cuz she had a tshirt that read, "That's MS. BITCH to you!"  I'll never forget that!



Author's Response:

Hi Msarkie!

I love the t-shirt "That's MS. BITCH to you!" You never know...Bella may find that at her doorstep next. ;)

Thanks for the giggle!

-bannerday

Reviewer: hkimberly1 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 06:42 AM · On: Chapter 3: If the Hat Fits, Wear It

Ok. So I'm thinking that Edward is the author of these books, turned movies. Maybe written under a pen name? And he owns the complex, since the streets are all named after the book/movie? hmmmm....... a whole lot to think about!  



Author's Response:

Hi hkimberly!

Well...conjecture is a fun thing...but my answers would have to be : nope, nope, and nope. I guess you'll just have to read on, my dear. ;) I'm glad I have you thinking, though!

Thanks for the review. Keep in touch!

-bannerday

Reviewer: hkimberly1 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 06:40 AM · On: Chapter 6: Moving Right Along

LMAO! I was drinking my coffee when Jake told Bella that Edward had seen her dance!! I am loving the story bb! Keep up the great work! 



Author's Response:

Hi hkimberly!

See, now the spitting of the coffee at the computer screen...I don't mean for you all to short-circuit your computers or make a mess! LOL Glad you liked that little tidbit. Not only did Edward see it, but he just spent the last hour at her house and she had no idea that he had seen her, so she's probably douby-embarrassed. ;)

Thanks, bb!

-bannerday

Reviewer: Daybreak (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2011 04:32 AM · On: Chapter 2: A New Chapter in Her Life

LMAO! Oh God, PLEASE continue! This is the funniest fan fic I've read in a long time, and I really shouldn't be doing this at work, because I have a really hard time trying not to laugh out loud. I can't wait to see where this goes... Hilarious!!!



Author's Response:

Hi Daybreak!

Catching up here. glad you got a good laugh out of that second chapter. Don't want to get you fired from your job, however...read with caution!

Thanks for the review!

-bannerday

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