I'm dead. I'm dead, I'm dead, I'm dead, I died. I'm dead.... Yep, you killed. You killed me with that last paragraph. Holy mother of all that's good... Ungh!

Sigh, ok I'm back. Somehow, I managed to revive myself and form coherent thoughts again. I loved the reviews, I can only imagine some of the crazy things you've been sent. Um, please tell me it's Alice and not dear Esme that's reading Written in the stars fanfic, please. If it's Esme I swear I'm going to bust a rib. Somewhere while reading young-at-heart's PM I got that idea into my head and I covered my face with my hands, peaking through my fingers to keep reading. I couldn't get that out of my mind until Edward distracted me. You know, you should probably add an ice pack to your survival tote because I think I died back there because I overheated… or forgot to breath or something. Either way, it may become a necessity if Edward’s going to take an interest in Bella’s fic writings.

OMG is right.  Love the shower scene.  Rowr.  I knew it wouldn't take long for Edward to realize just how attractive Bella is.  He really seems to be making a huge change in his life, and I'm enjoying the more introspective Edward.

I kinda just want to give Bella a hug and tell her it's going to be alright.  I hope Edward's surprise cheers her up, and that things get smoothed over between them.  Can't wait to read more!

I knew that strawberry was going to cause a scene like this hihihi I bet my arm and leg that Esme is young at heart...which gave the towel hanging feat a whole new dimension LOL

Love your story!  I was hoping Edward was going to read her story... but no.. not yet... yeah yeah, I get it, slow burn,as they say!  But man, can't wait for this to roll... faster...   lol  Your're really funny too, in your writing style and story...  it's refreshing!  Keep up the great work!

PS: I have a confession to make...  I did not read Bella's story... in the story...  but I'm going to, If I can just find it again... I realize now that Edward will most probably read this and I will need to know what she wrote.... I'm beginning to think that he  will probably read the reviews too...   oooh, it will be delicious!  Can't wait!

Great chapter! I loved it!

For a moment I thought Edward had sent the review, but when he got frustrated that he couldn't find her....well, that shot my theory away, lol.

I can't wait to see what will happen next! I wonder if Edward will try to talk to Bella first....

That poor guy is likely in for a rough ride.  I'm guessing that the male review she received was from Emmett...just sort of sounded like him.  I hope he mentions something to Edward about reading something about an asshole hat and silk pajama covered hard ons!  That would be hysterical.

Can't wait for more. 

I love your story! My computer hasn't been letting me review, but I'm really hoping that it will this time. Esme is the reviewer, isn't she? My guess is that sh'e going to lead Edward to the story, and he's going to be even more confused by Bella than he is right now. I'm wondering what was in the box that couldn't wait till morning. Maybe you'll explain in the next chapter. Just out of curiosity, is this on FF as well, and if so, do you have more chapters written? Yes, I think I'm an addict.

Young at heart has to be Esme. So she is going to mention this interesting fanfic that she has been reading, which has so many parallels but a few embellishments to a story she knows already. lol It'll be quite funny to see his reaction when he recognises himself.

ah smart move there lady bug, Mommy will help Edward find bellybeans(love that name too by the way, if i haven't said so before) and an insight into her ways of thinking.  I see now how the story may play out.  He will read her fanfic post and as she turns it more from real life to fic he will start to mimic the fic.... am I right.... cause he could just change little things and make bella seem as if she is going crazy... lol anywho, I look forward to the next update..... 

Maybe Edward's self love will help him realize he's starting to feel something for Bella? 

I'm guessing that Alice intends to invite Bella to Edward's picnic? That would be interesting to watch the two of them squirm! Of course, Alice will know something's up just by observing them

And I'm dyin' to know what was in Edward's box that he felt the need to sort through so late at night

chapter 18

well first of all i don`t agree with your teams.it`s  an edward in silk pjs team,edward on the bed across the mirrow(double view,double pleasure) team,edward with a wedge in hand team and i am all 3 teams,any team with bella`s name is waste of time.moving on i would like to say that my favorite line is "he has the right to live however he wants " look at bella she has finally seen the light.i would like to answer a question "how do i look?" absolutelly perfect edward don`t worry boy.in the end i would like to disagree"no.and it`s not her fault...."well it`s not the same thing.he was in her house trying to help so unless he used his blindfold of course he saw her things.she actually used the keys to snoop.(but with my reason he should be angry for long and it is not helping with my wish to see him use some or all of the things in his drawer so carry on).

p.s i don`t believe after the crashing edward`s sensitive spot you pulled on me ,you could be more cruel but i was wrong.you actually had edward to performe a strip-tease?what the hell,and then in the hot bath?are you insane?and then touching his ass and groin?have you no mercy woman?write fast

FUBAR-ella is right.  Oh I just knew she would go and get it all purged.  Jeesh Bella needs some lessons is holding back just a tidge.  Hold those reins back girl.  But she went for it and now she's in a messy pickle.  

But really going into a beautiful home it's hard to not look at all the rooms.  The drawers were the no-no's.  To really blow her virgin mind King Kong Dong would have been a priceless opportunity for her to just happen on.  But that might have done it for her.  Might need to weave that in one of the chapters....just for her.  Maybe as a trick she pulls on Emmett that she likes the Mr. Really Big Kong Dong tickling the back of her throat.  Waaah Haaaa

Conversation between Dickward and Edward was so excellent.... just brilliant. Who is going to win? He's already starting to take stock in himself so it's looking good for Edward.  Make no mistake though all men have a bit of Dickward in them and we have a bit of Singing Bitch girl in us. 

I just know Edward is going to go to the website and find out about bellybeans! Love to see that slip out of Edward somewhere.... he's been snooping too.  

I'm hoping Emmett to the rescue with his boisterous wit and full braisen openness will get them on the right track.  

Just warning you; I'm going to be so OCD checking your updates.  Thinking about all the ways this can go.  girlie squealllll hurry up.  I can't wait!!! I'm sure Bellybeans is so proud of you.

All fun things I share with my "Edward".  He loved the belly laughs about Dickward, the Dickcave and the Dickmobile... oh the KKDong and the Meat Packing Industry too.  We were both laughing so hard we had tears.  Just two old farts laughing our asses off over Rubber Kong Dongs and Dicks.  Been a long time since we have laughed liked that without some alcohol involved.   So sincerely.... thank you.

Superward to the rescue with all his toned physique and fuck-me-hair... oh yeah and crushed cajones.  I loved that part... Dickward showing some chivalry.

This is good; a little nice wine, dinner and dessert, then the digging questions.   can't wait for "next".