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Reviewer: littlebit (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2008 05:51 AM · On: Deconstruction

Please, please give me the next chapter. I am loving this story.



Author's Response:

Give just YOU the next chapter?  LOL  The next one will come in a couple days.  As long as the writing keeps flowing quickly, you'll have new story. 

Reviewer: lulabelljane (Signed) · Date: December 29, 2008 04:47 AM · On: Deconstruction

Oooh, that Rick was a nasty little freak...lol! You handled the meltdown scene well....oooh, do we get the scene of Alice and Bella in the bathroom with her asking Bella if she really wanted to do Rick in the storage room....I love the part when Deb says to Cory "Oh, Rexy, you're so sexy!" LOL! Good job! :)

Author's Response:

I HAD to make Rick filthy.  There was such a strong compulsion to take a guy that was seen as kinda nerdy when he first came out and make him freaky. 

Chapter 14 will indeed have the Alice/Bella bathroom chat, with some of the original movie dialogue... and Yes, she will ask about Bella doing Rick!

Reviewer: dolphin62598 (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2008 05:07 AM · On: Moments of Weakness

Oh boy!  Why does Edward have to be so snarky?  LOL!  Great chapter!  Can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Because Edward is a great big smart ass know-it-all who's stubborn to the point of foolishness?  LOL.

Also, because I REALLY loved that sequence in Empire Records and had to have it happen this time, if only so everyone could overhear Rosalie...   Mwahahaha.  New chapter tonight, methinks.

Reviewer: littlebit (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2008 11:21 PM · On: Moments of Weakness

Oh not with RICK. Ick! SICK! I am going to vomit. The last thing I needed this early in the morning was to think of Rose doing a RickRoll. LOL!!

 

Great Story. Hurry up with that damn fluff. I wanna see a happy E/B. And please set Rick a blaze.

Did he really have more than one song? I will be damn...



Author's Response:

ROTFLMAO!  I was wondering when someone would give it a resounding EW!  You read it first thing?  Should I maybe warn people not to read while eating?  LOL

He had a LOT of songs.  I know this because *cowers* I adored Rick Astley when younger and still like some of his stuff.  I know, I know.  Shame, shame.  I never wanted to bone him, though.  His first album had Never Gonna Give You Up and Whenever You Need Somebody, the second had Together Forever and She Wants To Dance With Me; the third had Cry For Help (I think that's my favourite song he's done).  He then released a strong of CDs primarily in the UK, including a covers album called Portrait, which I stumbled onto when a YouTube search listed as a related video "Rick Astley - Cry Me A River".  It was NOT the Justin Timberlake one, but an old bluesy standard.  Whew!

The fluffy sweetness is COMING.  I'm sure it won't be enough fluffy stuff for everyone, but hey, they did have a nasty fight and all...

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2008 08:03 PM · On: Moments of Weakness

Oh no, Carlisle finally let Edward have it.  I hope Bella doesn't OD.  Will Rose and Rick be interupted or will it be the best sex of Rose's life?  Gah, I hope that title belongs to Emmett actually.



Author's Response:

I hope so too!  Hopefully Rosalie listens to me and agrees that Emmett is her "monkey man".  ;)

As for Bella...  I think she'll be okay in the long run...   I have promised fluffy goodness so I can't very well kill her off!  But did she take too many?  Well...   Tune in next chapter!

Reviewer: katopotato (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2008 07:22 PM · On: Moments of Weakness

haha, love it.. cant wait for more.



Author's Response:

Yay!  I'm aiming to upload a chapter every two or three days over the holidays for the benefit of those with extra free time between school semesters or just for vacation fun.  Chapters 13 and 14 are written but need a final proof and edit.  I will say this:  13 is going to be explosive and I cannot wait for the reviews!

Reviewer: girl with a pearl j (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2008 05:34 PM · On: Moments of Weakness

Ooooh can't wait for more. I feel bad for Carlisle, ahahaha. I can't wait for the E/B fluff ! =]]



Author's Response:

Poor Carlisle.  He has seriously had the worst day, hasn't he?  It just doesn't stop!  He didn't even get to have a serious fluffy time with Esme! 

E/B fluff coming up in chapter 14 (13 is a little crammed with, um, chaos).  Those two have to get over the mutual hurt and start talking again and all.  So I made 'em play nice. ;)

Reviewer: oh_the_webs_we_weave (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2008 05:00 PM · On: Moments of Weakness

Rosalie and her slutty little ways. I want her to be truly affected on eof these days! But overall, good chapter.



Author's Response:

Rosalie will have a serious soul searching moment or few starting next chapter.  The effects of her actions will definitely be brought home to her, and with a little luck, maybe I can get Emmett to reform her.  :)

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2008 10:21 PM · On: Lost and Delirious

ROTFLMAO... over the entire vampire mythology debat.  That was truely priceless!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I had a hell of a lot of fun especially with Emmett's horror over Anne Rice and Edward snarking about "sparkling vampires". 

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2008 10:04 PM · On: The Thin Ice

I was really confused at first with how you started this chapter. Then it made sense.  I must be slow due to the time!  ;) 

I'm glad that Alice is starting to come around.  I want to know more about what's going on with her.  Poor Edward, he didn't get the response from Bella that he thought he would.



Author's Response:

I intended for the confusion there.  I wanted to set it up, wanted it to seem perfect and then BOOM! you start the next chapter going, "Wait, what??  Did it go badly?  WHAT?"  It's most effective as a mindscrew if you haven't seen Empire Records, because those who know the film knew it was destined to go badly. 

Alice will, circa chapter 15 or 16, finally tell all.  And I suggest you keep a tissue handy;  that chapter is going to be a heartbreaker.  But Alice is definitely realizing that cutting herself off from everyone is just making it all worse. 

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2008 09:45 PM · On: Hello, Time Bomb...

Peanut butter and barking like a dog?  Okay, now that's a new kink I've never read before.

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2008 06:52 PM · On: Arresting Developments

Loved your take on the phone call from Clerks.  Alice's storyline - is that from Empire Records or is that yours?



Author's Response:

Partially Empire, partially mine.

In Empire, Deb (the 'role' Alice is playing) shaves her head, does indeed cut her wrist and generally is miserable to everyone.  Very little is revealed as to just why she's so unhappy, beyond her mother abandoning her.  It's always irked me that there was no real explanation from her, beyond feeling shitty/invisible.  So I've decided to take those basics and expand them, in a way that explains how she was once friends with everyone but now isn't, and what went wrong.  I've been dropping little hints here and there, very small clues, but when the full story finally comes out, it's going to be a very sad and shocking moment for the staff of Velvet Records.

As for Clerks, that was one gag I HAD to do.  It's a highlight of the movie for me.  I even learned of a few new bands.  ;)

Reviewer: Autumn Dreamer (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2008 06:37 PM · On: Rick Everlasting

I just have to say, so far, this is the best written third person story I've read.  It flows so easily.  I hated writing in third person and found that first POV came easier.  Your transitions from one character POV to another are flawless.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  You know, I very seldom write first person POV at all anymore.  I think the biggest test of how to pull off an ensemble story with multiple POVs was a novel I wrote with seven hostages trapped in a bank robbery situation, and each begins telling their life story.  I tried very hard to see the events from every person's perpsective and it was a challenge, but really gave me new skills as a writer.

If you find it harder, you should practice!  Try a one shot in third person, with two people and flowing POVs between them.  Some of my best writing comes when I shove myself out of my usual boxes.  Don't censor;  just write it then edit when it's done.  You might surprise yourself. :)

Reviewer: xparawhorextwerdx (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2008 03:06 AM · On: Lost and Delirious

Rose, if you do this, Bella will kill you. I repeat, will. Love this!

Author's Response:

Hahahaha, but does Rosalie care?  She is our ice queen.... 

Reviewer: kms1979 (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2008 05:30 PM · On: Lost and Delirious

NOW I remember what happened. I had totally forgotten about the underwear scene! I also wasn't aware of several of the vampire stories you referred to. It's funny how you poke fun at Twilight. :)



Author's Response:

I only came to know the Vampire Diaries series myself recently, when a coworker said Twilight borrowed a lot from books she'd read several years ago and lent me all four.  And the similarities are definitely there!!  My coworker is the one who basically pulled an Emmett and was horrified by The Vampire Armand and its oral sex mentions.  So in effect, the chapter was a combo of me lovingly mocking Twilight and also getting to reference a lot of workplace chatter.

Reviewer: tiffanyanne3 (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2008 05:05 PM · On: Lost and Delirious

My dog's name is Axl. ;)
And I think I like more frequent updates/shorter chapters. Gives me more to look forward to!

Author's Response:

Done and done!

LOL oh my.  As long as you don't ask him to lick peanut butter from interesting places while barking ;)

Reviewer: katopotato (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2008 12:35 PM · On: Lost and Delirious

Hehe, i like this... update soon!! I just wanna see a lil' tiny bit of fluff with e/b tho.. but it's all up to you!!

..:Taylor IS Jacob:..



Author's Response:

Fluff?  Just fluff?  Because see, I'd be rooting for some lemony goodness myself ;) 

Fluff will come soon, I promise, with multiple pairings....  But first, there's going to be a LOT of chaos.  Hee hee.

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2008 11:52 AM · On: Lost and Delirious

so bella on drugs eh? love it, love updates, love some more e/b, this is awesomeness rolled into a nice package of win =D



Author's Response:

Awesomeness in a package of win!  I like that!  <3

Alright, shorter chapters which lead to faster uploads then!  And yes, there will be more interaction with e/b soon!

Reviewer: dramagurl82 (Signed) · Date: December 23, 2008 11:44 AM · On: Lost and Delirious

I say whatever gets us reviews faster would work for me... I loved the talk about vampires very nice addition.  Please update soon.



Author's Response:

Shorter chapters it is!!

I'll do my best.  I've got a few hours tonight to play with my little crackfic world.

Reviewer: kms1979 (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2008 07:32 PM · On: The Thin Ice

I hope you get enough reviews! I don't want this story to end!

 

Great chapter. I went and downloaded that Amanda Palmer song so thanks!



Author's Response:

Oh I wouldn't end it...  I'd just make you all wait a lot longer for more.  ;)  I couldn't be THAT mean. 

And yay!  Amanda Palmer is seriously awesome and that woman deserves many lovely things.  She's so sweet.  Her blog is fantastic to read for its honesty and rawness.  I genuinely think Straight is one of her best songs ever.

It's why I post my writing soundtracks;  most of the artists are ones that deserve more love and fans.

Reviewer: adriana122002 (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2008 02:42 PM · On: The Thin Ice

Really great story, please continue! I'm dying to see what happens next. I'm especially intrigued by Edward's harsh reaction to Bella and how broken she is. Poor Bella, I know Edward was stressed and heartbroken, but I don't think she deserved *that*

Sorry you are having a bad week



Author's Response:

Thank you!  I have a few days off now and things happened today that may solve everything, so fingers crossed!

As for Edward's reaction, I just fired off a reply this morning a few reviews down that sort of explains why he's freaking out.  He will apologize later because he kinda knows he's been wrong, no matter how hurt he was.

Reviewer: xparawhorextwerdx (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2008 08:44 PM · On: The Thin Ice

Hey! I'm reviewing rather regularly, you whore! (review whore I mean, lol.) Love how Bella realises what she's missing, but can't do anything about it.

Author's Response:

LOL  aww I know and I appreciate it so much.  There's two or three of you review junkies that keep me going when I'm stumped. 

Poor Bella...  What a silly Bella she is.  So oblivious to her charms and appeal that she never let herself believe he'd be interested, and now, it's a disaster.  (And she bet against ALICE, who flat out told her that she and Edward would be together).

Reviewer: girl with a pearl j (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2008 05:43 PM · On: The Thin Ice

Oh that was very well writen. I really enjoyed this chapter, and am looking forward to more. This is definetely one of my new favorite stories, eep!



Author's Response:

Oh yay thank you!  I like the idea of writing a favourite.  It's so wonderful to hear and I'm so glad you're enjoying it!

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2008 05:42 PM · On: The Thin Ice

edwards reaction at the end was surprsiing...i know he's hurt by bellas rejection but he was horrified at the possibility that they wouldn't even remain friends...i think his actions at the end there didn't really aid in sustaining a relationship between them...gah i just wanted to slap him for not letting her explain...i wonder if sending bella to the hospital would force a conversation between the two...such as edward discussing her drug use and why she took so much that day and so on...this update came so quickly i was so happy! i can hardly wait for another one this story is so well done i adore it :)



Author's Response:

Well, I'm going to take a guess and say you haven't seen the film I'm spoofing, because half of his lines were lifted from there.  That said, here's what I see happening:

Bella does something she feels utterly stupid over, is a trainwreck and then Edward surprises her with this declaration of love.  It's overload.  And then he freaks when he finds out what she just almost did.

So now, Bella gets a clue, and wants to fix things.  But she fumbles her delivery, and on top of that. Edward emotionally is the equivalent of Bella on the roof, his mind racing all over, his emotions in a turmoil-driven state....  And so he of course takes one thing she says wrong, and ends up storming off because he can't handle any more.  Basically, he's afraid she's about to give him the whole 'let you down easy' speech and he can't bear to hear it on the heels of her confession of almost boning Rick and her comment that what she does with her body will never be his business (=rejected).

Excellent point raised, though;  so glad you posted it here!

 

Reviewer: equestrienne326 (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2008 04:52 PM · On: The Thin Ice

really great story so far. it's so fresh and real. i love it. this chapter very nearly made me cry though. :(

great jpb so far! cant wait for more!



Author's Response:

Aww, it was a sad one, I know.  The next chapter will make things a little lighter again, I promise! 

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