I want the story to move forward, let's skip the dance in different POV's, I think we know what they both were thinking :)

I loved this chapter!  I totally like the vamps have "vodoo" that effect bella.  I always felt like she was under a spell with them.  And Alice, gotta love to hate her :)  I mean seriously, convicing bella to abandon her boyfriend, not cool.  Not cool. 

Author's Response:

I'm agree, and it seems most people agree with you as well. I'm going to do a short rehash, but have most of the next chap focus on what's happening with Jake.

I'm so glad that you liked the chapter! Personally I always felt that the "dazzling" was a bit of a cheat with the vamps, so I guess my true feelings are leaking into this story!

Thank you so much for reading & reviewing dirtychicken!

LOL... multitask much, Embry?

I'm personally good without Jake's or Edward's POV from this chapter, but if you wanna do either, I don't mind, of course. I'd like to see what happens next!

Author's Response:

I know right?  Poor Emrby - nothing is too much for our dear Wolfboy.

Next chap will probably be EPOV (briefly) before we launch into JPOV of what's going on and why he feels like crap!

Enjoyed Embry's POV. Good way to tell what was going on with both Jake and Bella. I had almost forgotten that Jake has not phased yet in your story. And my first reaction to Jacob starting to phase was to think OH NO, this will mean time apart for Bella & Jake! Which means you've built your suspense well in getting those two together! Just telling you though...I can't handle them apart for too long. ;)

And ugh... I hate Edward. The thoughts of him getting his hands on Bella makes me feel sick! I don't know if I want to hear about the dance from his POV since it would guarantee me hating him some more. Your description of how he was acting already has told me all I need to know, I think! And the song that immediately comes to mind that Edward wanted the DJ to play is The Righteous Brothers' Unchained Melody. Maybe I thought of that because it's a slightly older song and I can't imagine Edward liking modern music too much. And also, I know it's a love song, but in relation to Edward wanting it, I can only think of it as being sleazy... hungering for her touch in more ways than one!! If I was Bella, I'd only want to get as far away as possible if I found myself dancing to that with him!

As for Jake, it's no wonder he started to phase with Edward around! It makes sense that his wolf side appeared when seeing Bella in Edward's arms. I'd say he was instinctively feeling the need to protect Bella while sensing a danger he did not understand yet. Not that Edward was about to bite Bella but to Jacob, his wolf form wouldn't know any different at this stage. I imagine he just sensed something was not right with Edward and he felt Edward's unhealthy, stalkerish tendencies towards Bella. 

So... I won't mind a brief POV from Jake but I also want to see what happens next. Thanks! :) 

Author's Response:

Wow Liadan!  Thank you so much for the amazing review!

You'll have to wait and see what unfolds with Jacob and Bella, but like you, I can't stand when they're apart too long, so we'll just have to see how it all turns out!

What a great suggestion for the song!  I've already written the song I had in mind in (also an older song, so you and I agreed on that), but I would love hearing from you on what you thought of it vs Unchained Melody in terms of which is creepier coming from Edward?

That chapter was awesome! I really liked hearing Embry's pov. I think you should push along and see what happens next.  I can't wait. 

Author's Response:

Thanks tracish!  I'm glad you enjoyed Embry's POV!

Hopefully you'll like what's coming up next!

Tell Mandi thanks for the punch on Mike ;)  I loved the Embry POV-who wouldn't love that sweet unimprinted wolf?  All the angst and pressure on this chapter was worth it because you made it everything that it should be.  I'd kind of like to push along with the story to see what happens next but a JPOV or EPOV would be fun to read too.  It was nice seeing Jake going from silly boy to a man who can be trused to handle these supernatural situations.   

Author's Response:

Hi stephsmith - thanks for the review!

I told Mandi thanks, I thought it was hilarious too! Gotta love that Mike's there for comic relief!

Thanks for the vote of what you'd like to see next - I hope I don't dissapoint you!

You did a great job with this chapter. The dance was great. My opinion is to just push the story along because I am eager to read what happens next.

Author's Response:

Thanks danimcket!  I'm glad you're eager to see what happens next, although I'm sure you have a good guess!

There is a God after all. I'm not that into Jake but I do love this story. I found myself wondering earlier this week if it had been abandoned. Thankfully, you are back........

Author's Response:

Sorry for the scare ruthhazelton!  I had writer's block, then went away on vacation, then had editing nightmares...blah blah blah...lots of excuses!  Rest assured I will not abandon this story before it's done!

Surprise! I think Edward is an asshole.

The hottest part of this chapter is when Embry said Jacob was going to be the first to phase because he wanted to claim a mate. I LOL'd, then swooned, then squirmed in my seat.

I loved that this was all from Embry's POV. Great update :)

Author's Response:

Wordslinger! Thank you so much for your review!  I was so excited when you replied to my review on your story!

I'm so glad you liked that part - it was one of my faves too, and I wasn't sure how others would react to it! I'm hoping to add on to it in further chaps! wink wink!

Glad you liked Embry's POV - gotta love us some wolf boys!

LOVE it!  They aren't moving too fast at all...this totally would have happened in the books if Edward wasn't such a moron.

More naked Jake please!  Can't wait to see what happens at the dance!

Author's Response:

Thanks!  I think so too! 

I want more nake Jake too!

Dance chap is almost done!

So sorry for not reviewing since my first comment. I have been reading your fic and I  thoroughly enjoy it but haven't been able to comment since I mostly read it on my phone. So, I'm finally on my computer to leave you a review. 

Your version of Jacob and Edward feel so real. I laughed at the telephone conversation between Jacob and Bella ...can visualize the scene so well. Adore the way Jacob trusts Bella and gives her space... don't make him appreciate Bella's space overly much in the future though! Not that I think you will, based on what you've written so far. :)

I hate the way Edward hangs around when the girls go shopping. I can picture his face hanging outside the changing rooms and it freaks me out, making me want Bella to run a mile anytime he shows up. The good part is that it makes me love your Jacob even more. Just hope Bella continues to feel the same way! 

Will re-read your next chapter over the coming days and review then. In the meantime, thanks for your story. I love it that you're tackling an episode (in time) of Jacob/Bella in detail before he phases. This way, they've established a good, healthy relationship first. 

Its all good, and I am really enjoying the story.

I don't think you have taken Bella OOC at all, in the original books she could barely contain herself and it was angstward that was all "No, No, No, No, No" so it makes perfect sense that with Jacob who is clearly willing and able that she would want to take things further.

The only thing I think is maybe a little out there is how competent they are and how totally unworried about the whole being caught issue - It was a long time ago, but I seem to remember that was a major issue in my youth, so there was a lot of sneaking about, straining ears and doing stuff outside - LOL fond memories! 

Anyway, keep with the writing and don't make us wait to long and more nakked Jacob please.

Ness

wooohooo I loved it!

I think It's sam.  and eww! lol Great Chapter!

Author's Response:

"and eww" - hahahaha.

Yeah, I know.

LOL