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Reviews For Break Even
Reviewer: acey (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2011 04:51 PM · On: Chapter 17

what a great chap!  Im all fuzzy wuzzy now!   Can't wait til nest chap..James???  Ohh noooo...good that the SOB will live with knowing his child will be raised by a real man..a really HOT man!  grrrr

Reviewer: Lindis84 (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2011 12:03 PM · On: Chapter 17

Yay, FINALLY!!=)

Such a sweet chapter!

Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2011 05:46 AM · On: Chapter 17

so are they official?! are they together together! what will everyone else say? im so excited!!! i hope that james doesn't ruin it all!

Reviewer: romancaholic (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2011 04:04 AM · On: Chapter 17

It was a risk for Bella to tell Edward her true feelings for him.  Even admitting she resented and hated James for coming home.  When he wasn't there Bella was able to be herself, unguarded, and free.  She only went back to James because of her loyalty and what her feelings towards him used to be.  After having a few drinks for courage Bella was able to tell Edward that she loves him and has loved him for years.  Edward pausing to take in the moment he has been dreaming for years made Bella feel that Edward didn't return those feelings and rejected.  Finally Edward admitted his love for her from before they ever met.  How romantic of our hero. Bella and Edward kiss for the first time passionately.  They are finally able to express their love verbally, physically, and emotionally.

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2011 03:47 AM · On: Chapter 17

Wow...Yeah!!!  Finally!   It was so long overdue, but as in most relationships, there is always something that can take so long to admit, there situation, maybe a l;ttle longer.    Keep up the great work!   Loved how you built up their conveersation where Bella was admitting her feelings and Edward was comletely confused.  I found myself shaking my head at the screen, as if to say "just say it!".  Great job!

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 09:44 PM · On: Chapter 17

YES!!!! THESE TWO HAVE SEEN THE LIGHT!

Reviewer: acey (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 08:04 PM · On: Chapter 17

What can I say??  U are an awesome faaking writer!   Got me on the edge girl..pz update soon....last cliffage had me hanging by finger-nails..all bloody and shit..was not a pleasant sight ;-/  as always great chap...great 2 see thier emo's finally coming to fruitation...I am so looking fwd to what ur creative mind will bring us to..but, I am looking fwd to it...QUICKLY!  I am sooo greedy...plz spoil us and update soon k?  xo

Reviewer: lanigirl95687 (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 06:20 PM · On: Chapter 17

im happy that they finally came clean to eachother! 

Reviewer: Floridasunshine (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 06:12 PM · On: Chapter 17

wow so glad they were able to say i love you !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: little frog (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 17

finally! Yea! Good story - I look forward to more chapters.

Thanks for writing!

Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 12:43 PM · On: Chapter 17

Good Chapter.....

Reviewer: belled_70 (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 12:12 PM · On: Chapter 17

Yes this chapter definately lived up to my expectations - I am so glad that they have finally been open and honest with each other. Loved the chapter and can't wait for the next one :0)

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2011 11:47 AM · On: Chapter 17

SQUEEE!!!!!!

WOW!!!  Just WOW!!!  That was one amazing chap you gave me whiplash shes going to tell him shes not going to tell him shes going to tell him shes not lol!!

I am so glad these two have finally come clean and I wonder how juicy a lemon would eventually be or if you won't go there..some authors don't ever go there but these two deserve something hehehe

Wow James in 2 chaps muah hahahah  SCARY!  I hope he doesn't try and take Bella back or go after her child...No offense its the one time I have ever wished bad things on a pregnancy...  thats so sad I feel awful even thinking it but James is nuts and a child with him will only damage the child when ever he tries to get involved...

Post again soon can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

So glad you liked it! Trust me; there are PLENTY of lemons coming!! We just have to let Bella heal a bit first ;)

Reviewer: romancaholic (Signed) · Date: April 04, 2011 07:31 AM · On: Chapter 16

Funny that everyone around Bella and Edward can see that they love each other.  Even the drunken jerk beating Bella can see it.  James's behavior is just plain evil.  He blames his drinking on Bella cheating with Edward.  He feels justified in his behavior of beating her whenever he feels like it.  Then to add more insult to injury he forced to have sex with multiple times on multiple days.  Edward is correct that's rape.  Edward beating up James is going to come around and bite him in the ass.  Even with the witnesses lying for him.  James has another evil plan in mind to regain Bella  as his.  Just because he was raised in a violent environment doesn't give him the right to be violent to someone he claims to care about.  He considers Bella as nothing but a possession to be used for whatever he wants, when he wants.  Bella blaming it on PTSD is just giving him an excuse to continue his abusive behavior both verbally and physically.  Edward finally getting her to move in with him so he can take care of Bella and the baby.  Edward has loved Bella for years and just thought she loved him as a friend not a boyfriend.  Bella felt the same and thought Edward was only helping her because he was her best friend.  Best friends can easily fall in love because you know each other so well, it just flows.  I married my best friend.  Angela told Edward Bella's plan was to break up with James and then tell him she loved him.  So now he is being more physically and romantically aggressive.  More touchy, more soft sultry tones in Bella's ear, etc...  Funny both of them are with their friends trying to figure out if it's too soon to tell the other how they feel.  Of course, Jasper laughed because soon doesn't really exist since they have been in love with each other for years even before the abusive behavior began.  Looking forward to the remaining chapters of this story.

Reviewer: Leenf (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 07:34 AM · On: Chapter 16

very very good chapter keep up the greta work and post soon

bye bye

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 10:14 PM · On: Chapter 16

Dun dun dun!

Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 16

Good Chapter....

Reviewer: delilah69 (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 01:40 PM · On: Chapter 16

will the talk go as planned and make it easier for them? does james have someone on the outside getting ready to hurt bella? will bella and the baby be ok?

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 10:20 AM · On: Chapter 16

SQUEEE!!!!  OMFG OMFG!!!!!!!!!!   Yay next chap is going to be amazing!!!!  I can't wait for more post again soon please please please post again soon I can't wait for them to spill it!!!!!!

Reviewer: lanigirl95687 (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 10:20 AM · On: Chapter 16

i hope he just puts everything out there ! and i hope she dose the same thing! 

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 09:59 AM · On: Chapter 15 (therunaway)

SQUEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry I have been holding that in all chap hahahaha!

I am so glad you updated they have both figured some thing sout and when they talk wow frieworks will come out.  I go tchill everytime you described how he whiepered in her ear no joke goose flesh all over   lol   Great Chap amazing very detailed and picturesque!  Post again soon so excited for more!!!!

Reviewer: Yrollam (Signed) · Date: March 23, 2011 07:04 AM · On: Chapter 16

Fudxkkkkkk I wish I was in ur head to c what's gonna happen I friggin love this story!!!! Omfg update soon. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2011 01:54 AM · On: Chapter 15 (therunaway)

Good Chapter.....

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2011 10:53 PM · On: Chapter 15 (therunaway)

I can't wait for the confessions :)

Reviewer: lanigirl95687 (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2011 09:14 PM · On: Chapter 15 (therunaway)

im glad that shes finally starting to see it all ! 

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