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Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 11:09 PM · On: Chapter 1

Always said Bella was too trusting where Jacob was concerned.I'm getting a bad feeling, here, and not just because you warned us what was coming.



Author's Response:

Oh, my gosh! You are SO AMAZING! Thanks a million for reviewing chapters as you read! I'm so sorry I didn't get to replying sooner. RL has been a bit hectic. 

I agree--Bella does tend to be a bit too trusting! Ha ha, I'm glad I got the atmosphere across right!

Reviewer: Twilight131 (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 07:47 PM · On: Chapter 21

Excited is not the word.  This is incredible! I just love the pacing of this story and the plot twists.  It's SO GOOD.  I love how you had Renee handle it.  I feel like people have been making Renee into this monster lately in stories and I thought this was very true to her character - perceptive when she needs to be.  I also really felt the fear from that nightmare and I'm petrified about this cliffhanger (except I know you're an Edward girl and you wouldn't do anything too cruel to us, lol).  All joking aside this is just amazing and I can't wait to see where you take it in the next chapter (and beyond). :-)



Author's Response:

I'm so sorry for my late reply. RL got a bit hectic over the last few days. You are so amazing! You always make me so happy and motivated with your reviews. I seriously can't thank you enough for that. I'm so glad you liked how I portrayed Renee. I know what you mean about reading stuff where Renee is not portrayed in a good light. You won't see that in this story. Your compliment on Renee means a lot because it took me some time to figure out how things were going to go with Renee because her personality (as portrayed in the books) is difficult to apply to something like this. I wanted her to be able to help Bella (be a mother figure to Bella), but at the same time I wanted her to be in character. I actually went back to the books and re-read all the parts in each book where Renee was featured. And you will be seeing more of Renee. Now that she knows she couldn't possibly just leave Bella now.

Ha ha, you're right! I'm definitely an Edward girl and I could NEVER kill him. I also couldn't write anything without a happy ending! Thanks again for your wonderful review! I'm working on getting the next chapter out as soon as possible. It should come faster than this chapter did (fingers crossed). 

Reviewer: RavenFlyer (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 06:06 PM · On: Chapter 21

More please!!!! I like reading this story!!!!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're enjoying! I'll do my best to update soon! Thanks for your review. 

Reviewer: kakaloo5 (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 12:46 PM · On: Chapter 21

You can't leave it here!  Yes, I am excited.  This is a great story.  This chapter is incredible, you've done a fantastic job.

So when do we get more?

 



Author's Response:

I know, I know, sorry for the cliffhanger! But I'm so glad you're excited! Thank you so much for your kind words! It means a lot to me.

Don't worry, I'm working on it! The next chapter should come quite a bit faster than this one did. I'll do my best not to leave you hanging for too long! Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: renee aubin (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 21

Yaay, new chapter!  Have to know what happens to these characters...

 

So cool that Renee agreed to change her plans without knowing all the details.  She really came through as the mom Bella needed.

 

‘Jacob was trying to scare me into leaving the protection of Edward and his family’

     Well, it worked for James, which Jacob probably knew.  And it had almost worked for Jacob in the days following the rape.  Good that Bella was clear on this.

 

Creepy, creepy dream blending elements of James and the ballet studio and Jacob.  

 

‘I knew that if I sacrificed myself to Jacob, Edward would be devastated. I couldn’t do that to him.’

     Thank goodness she figured that out.

 

See, Bella?  I just knew Edward would know exactly what to do about the still-visible bruises.  So glad she’s gained a little ground re not hiding herself so much, as if she is somehow wrong.

 

“Did you get that from Charlie? He said the same thing.”

     She should know she’s in deep trouble when those two agree.  Just let them have their way when that happens!

 

Nice that Edward understands Renee is going to figure out for herself that something serious has happened.

 

“I wanted so badly to believe I was reading all the signs wrong, but…”     

     Aww, sad.  Her mom intuition is on full alert - put her out of her misery!  Brave and thoughtful of her to say the words, so Bella didn’t have to.

 

“Please tell me that Edward or your father murdered that bastard.”     

     That’s exactly what we ALL want to hear!

 

And nice that she picks up that there’s some kind of mystery or secret about Edward.  Without getting pushy or hysterical about it.

 

‘I slowly started to awaken to the feeling of something poking into my back.’  

     OK, I’ve clearly been reading too many NC-17 fics, because I had a totally different theory about what was poking into her back, giggle.

 

'“Oh you won’t be seeing him again,” came a horribly familiar voice.'    

     Ugh, I can just hear how Jacob would say that line.  After seeing the engagement ring in the ashes in her dream, she had better start wearing it NOW.

 

I’m sure we all had flashes of the battle with Victoria, where Edward and Bella were separated from the rest of the Cullens.  Not a good idea…

 

Wicked cliffhanger. 



Author's Response:

Oh, my gosh! I absolutely love your reviews! I'm glad you liked how Renee was portrayed. It took me some time to figure out how things were going to go with Renee because her personality (as portrayed in the books) is difficult to apply to something like this. I wanted her to be able to help Bella (be a mother figure to Bella), but at the same time I wanted her to be in character. I actually went back to the books and re-read all the parts in each books where Renee was featured. And you will be seeing more of Renee. Now that she knows she couldn't possibly just leave Bella now.

Ha ha, yeah I wanted to blend in what happened with James and how Bella handles things differently this time around. I'm very happy you noticed how this time Bella wasn't going to sacrifice herself to try and save others. She realized how much it would hurt Edward and she couldn't do it. 

I was laughing so hard when I read your what you said about the 'poking into her back' part. LOL. I was at University when I read it and my two office mates were giving me funny looks, but I wasn't about to tell them what I was laughing about. LOL. 

Ah, yes, you will see that that dream still has an effect on Bella (she's not going to be forgetting something like that). And the thing with the ring will come into play as well. 

Yes, there are definitely similarities between this battle and the one with Victoria. 

I know! Sorry about the cliffhanger, but the next chapter should come quite a bit faster than this one did (fingers crossed). I working on it!

And once again, a HUGE thank you to you for leaving me another amazing review! I just LOVE reading them!

Reviewer: 98765 (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 10:02 AM · On: Chapter 21

Anohter great chapter! I can't imagine who is with him? Did he team up with vampires??



Author's Response:

Thank you very much! It's great to hear from you! Ha ha, you'll see in the next chapter! :-)

Reviewer: PiperSun (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 07:46 AM · On: Chapter 21

love it!

can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! it means a lot to me :-)

Reviewer: acehui (Signed) · Date: September 09, 2010 06:25 AM · On: Chapter 21

OMG! U r really good! Keep up the good word. I'll be waiting for the next chapter. Don't keep everyone waiting!!!



Author's Response:

He, he, thanks! Don't worry, I'm working on getting the next chapter out soon! It should come faster than this one did. 

Reviewer: Sarahippy (Anonymous) · Date: September 09, 2010 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 21

WHOA it was amazing as usual, of course! I'm going to kill Jacob. Officially. Amazing chapter and I can't wait to see what happens! I'll he anxiously waiting for the next chapter!! xx



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! LOL. Well, I'm glad you're looking forward to the next chapter. There will be lots of action! Many thanks once again for your lovely review! 

Reviewer: MissManda (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 10:19 PM · On: Chapter 21

OoO

Great chapter, and sweet video! I don't have a youtube account so I can't comment there, but it turned out really cool :)



Author's Response:

Thank you! No worries, there's no need to comment over there. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! 

Reviewer: dejr88 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 07:29 PM · On: Chapter 21

Jacob... let Edward rip him to pieces and burn it all.  No evidence of murder and Edward doesn't have to deal with retaliation from the pack.  The pack - who really would think, even at their most destraught, that simply stripping him of his ability to transform is punishment enough for what he did to Bella.  Sam can't really be that naive... what if it had been Emily, would that have been enough?  Hell no!  Let Jacob burn!



Author's Response:

Those are some very good points! I won't say anything about it because you will see what happens in the next chapter. But thanks so much for sharing your thoughts! I love reading them! :-)

Reviewer: Twilight131 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 07:15 PM · On: Chapter 21

Don't have time to read this tonight, but I watched your video and now I want your story made into a movie!! BADLY!  Really great. So looking forward to this chapter tomorrow :-)



Author's Response:

What a lovely thing to say! You always make my day! I'm so glad you enjoyed the video! I hope you will enjoy the chapter as well. Take care!

Reviewer: Twifan913 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 06:23 PM · On: Chapter 21

OMG!!! OMG!!! This is so exciting. Which I shall chaste you about for making me wait for this chapter too long. ;-) JK  Hope you don't take too long for the next one. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Hope it gets really ugly. lolz Always leaving us with an awesome cliffe. 



Author's Response:

LOL, that's what I like to see! I know, sorry about the wait for this chapter. But it's not completely my fault. This chapter was actually submitted to the queue on Aug 29th, but it took nine days before it was validated. My beta must have been busy! The next chapter should come a lot faster because it should be shorter than this one (though there will be lots of action!) and I'm working hard to get it out soon! But, it does also depend on my beta. Thanks so much for your encouraging review! :-)

Reviewer: Edwardsgirl83 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 06:02 PM · On: Chapter 21

Looking forward to the next chapter, though I do like Jacob.  I am kinda of unhappy about seeing him in this light.  But still enjoying the story.



Author's Response:

Well, I'm very glad you're still enjoying. And I very much appreciate you giving my story a chance! I know that my Jacob is very out of character, but I wanted a villain that was someone Bella really trusted. I don't have anything against Jacob from the original books. Anyway, thanks again for reading and reviewing! 

Reviewer: Kristal_Victoria (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 05:35 PM · On: Chapter 21

i can't wait!!! excellent chapter! :)



Author's Response:

I'm so glad to know you're looking forward to more! Thanks so much! 

Reviewer: Ashapea (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 05:21 PM · On: Chapter 21

Continue! Please! Please! Please!



Author's Response:

Don't worry, I'm working on it! Thanks so much for your encouragement. It is very much appreciated!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 21

Yeah - it's undoubtedly Paul with him.  It makes perfect sense.  Paul had a hatred for the Cullens and if I recall correctly, he would have already imprinted on Jacob's sister - which means he'd feel somewhat obligated to support Jacob given they're related by law.

It's been a great ride BUT I'm ready for Edward to SAVE THE DAY already, so I'm happy that you said "Jacob will be dealt with, and... out of the picture very soon."  :-)

Thanks for sharing your awesome talent!



Author's Response:

Wow, that's some very good thinking! You'll see in the next chapter if you're right! :-)

Yes, I think it is about time Jacob gets some, lol. Lots of action stuff going on in the next chappie! 

Thank YOU for your lovely compliment! 

Reviewer: Gwilwillith (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 01:30 PM · On: Chapter 21

you could cut the tension with a knife! sooo good I need to find out what happens!!



Author's Response:

Ha, ha, I'm very glad my attempts at suspense are working! Thanks so much! 

Reviewer: djwolf55 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 11:51 AM · On: Chapter 21

CAN'T WAIT!!!



Author's Response:

That makes me very happy to hear! And it's so nice to see a review from you! :-) 

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: CA BLACK (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 21

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! Why did you have to end the chapter??? please upload the next chapter pretty please *does puppy eyes and begs* :) even though im Team Jacob, i love this story :) keep writing please xxxx

p.s i love the trailer. how did you do it?



Author's Response:

LOL, I love that reaction, he, he :-D

Don't worry, I'm working on getting the next chapter up soon! Well, I'm very happy that you're enjoying this story even though you're Team Jacob. That definitely says a lot! 

I'm so happy you liked it! I have a Mac computer, so I used imovie to make the trailer. It was my first time ever making a movie, so I just kind of played around with it, lol. I had to rip my Twilight DVDs to get the clips. 

Thanks so much for your review! 

Reviewer: kony1994 (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 01:43 AM · On: Chapter 21

About the chapter: That's it! You are the queen of cliffies. Every time you leave me breathless with your writing. This time, I actually cried when I read the conversation between Renee and Bella.

About the trailer: Amazing video!!!!! Are there spoilers about the future chapters in it? Once again, well done!



Author's Response:

Ha, ha, sorry for all the cliffies but I've been building up to this for a while and after this chapter there shouldn't really be anymore major cliffies. Aww, thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. I worked pretty hard to get the Renee/Bella conversation right. 

Thanks! As for there being spoilers...no, not really. I thought of that, but I didn't want to spoil anything, though there was one clip in there that I chose with the next chapter in mind...he, he. 

Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: i-was-broken (Signed) · Date: September 07, 2010 10:19 PM · On: Chapter 21

I hope whatever comes of Jacob, it gives Bella the peace she needs to move on.  It's nice to see her healing in bits and pieces with her dad, mom, and Edward.

Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Don't worry, it will, but she will still have a ways to go in terms of healing, even when Jacob is out of the picture. It makes me very happy that you picked up on that! It's a slow process but with the support of her loved ones, she's getting there! 

Thank you very much for your review! 

Reviewer: edwards_girl_4_ever (Signed) · Date: September 07, 2010 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 21

I'm so excited about the next chapter, it's been so long since the regular updates I treasured that I was about to  message you and beg.

 

Please let Sam okay it and let Edward kill that mangy mutt!

 

Great chapter: Renee, the family meeting, charlie/edward bonding... perfection! 



Author's Response:

Well, I'm so happy that you're looking forward to reading more. And thanks for not forgetting about me! You can feel free to message me, and I will be able to tell you how things are going. This chapter was actually submitted to the queue on Aug 29th, but it took nine days before it was validated. My beta must have been busy!

Ha, ha, you'll see what happens in the next chapter. Everything will be revealed in the next chapter, including what we were discussing in your review for the last chapter about how Jacob is the 'master criminal' LOL.

Wow, thanks so much for your kind words. That really means a lot to me because it took me lots of thought to get it right!  

Reviewer: Sunrise Wanderer (Signed) · Date: September 07, 2010 09:50 PM · On: Chapter 21

Yeah! It's definitely time to settle the Jacob question! I can't wait.

Author's Response:

I definitely agree with that! It's coming up in the next chapter! Many thanks for your review! 

Reviewer: westosobear (Signed) · Date: September 07, 2010 07:45 PM · On: Chapter 21

What a cliffhanger.  update soon.



Author's Response:

Ha, ha, I know. But don't worry, I'm working on getting the next chapter out soon! 

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